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Aug. 7, 2020

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My dream

I believe that all of us have dream a lot when we fall asleep especially in childhood, but most context of our dreams will be forgotten eventually. Recently, I have some strange drams in the night despite the fact that I rarely dream since I grow up. However, I would like to share with you an odd dream I remember.

Being disturbed by creepy noise, I opened my eyes slowly from faint and attended to figure out the situation. A few male dead bodies whose heads were bleeding beside me and I stood up from the ground and looked around. There were four thick gray concrete walls formed as a big square. The corpses and skinny people dressed in dirty and torn clothes including me like servants or prisoners, were limited and stuck by these walls . Strangely, I did not feel a thing. No question like what happen now and who killed the poor guys who laid down on the blood ground appeared in my mind as I could not think as fast as I usually do. I felt some creep noise such as crying, screaming and whisper around but I could not listen clearly what these skinny talked about and where the screaming came from. I realized that maybe I was in my dream, a lucid dream. I lost control of my character in the dream. I was more like a outsider to watch a show.

All of sudden, a strong guy with bulging muscles whose body size was twice as normal people magically appeared in the jail. I had intuition that this guy was the bully and did murders. Someone wanted to challenge his authority and became corpses after fights. I did not know why but I decided to do a fight with the bully. And did I win? The answer is mystery since I woke up.
I thought that this dream is very thrilling and very unusual. In the dream, I lost my physical abilities of hearing, touching and tasting. I also could not feel the space and the time.

Do you have any similar experience like me? And thank you for reading and correcting.

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My dream

I believe that all of us have dream a lot when we fall asleep, especially in childhood, but most context of our dreams will be forgotten eventually.

Recently, I have some strange drams in the night despite the fact that I rarely dream since I have grown up.

However, I would like to share with you an odd dream I remember.

Being disturbed by creepy noise, I opened my eyes slowly from faint and attended to figure out the situation.

Not sure what you meant by "from faint", but the sentence is perfectly natural without it

A few dead male dead bodies whose heads were bleeding beside me and. I stood up from the ground and looked around.

There were four thick gray concrete walls formed as a big square.

The corpses and skinny people dressed in dirty and torn clothes including me like servants or prisoners, were limited and stuckenclosed by these walls .

Strangely, I did not feel a thing.

No question like w"What happens now?" and w"Who killed these poor guys who laidare lying down oin the blood g?". Ground appeared in my mind as I could not think as fast as I usually do.

I felt some creepy noise such as crying, screaming and whispering around but I could not listen clearly what these skinny talked about and where the screaming came from.

I realized that maybe I was in my dream, a lucid dream.

I lost control of my character in the dream.

I was more like an outsider to watch a showobserver.

All of a sudden, a strong guy with bulging muscles, whose body size was twice asthat of normal people , magically appeared in the jail.

I had intuition that this guy was the bully and didperpetrated the murders.

Someone wanted to challenge his authority and became corpsesdied after fightsing.

I did not know why but I decided to do a fight withfight the bully.

And did I win?

The answer is mystery since I woke up.

I thought that this dream iwas very thrilling and very unusual.

In the dream, I lost my physical abilitisenses of hearing, touching and tastinge.

I also could not feel the space and the time.

Do you have any similar experience like me?

And thank you for reading and correcting.

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Most of this makes perfect sense grammatically, it is only the word choices that can be made better in some places. Well done!

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frank

Aug. 9, 2020

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Thank you very much for your comment and correction.

My dream

I believe that all of us have dream a lot when we fall asleep, especially in childhood, but mostthe context of most of our dreams will be forgotten eventuallyis eventually forgotten.

Recently, I have had some strange dreams in the night despite the fact that I, although I've rarely been dreaming since I grow upmy childhood.

Present perfect + -ing, because here you're talking about a long action that started in the past and is still going on till this very day.

However, I would like to share with you an odd dream I remember.

Being dDisturbed by a creepy noise, I opened my eyes, slowly from faint and attendregaining consciousness, and tried to figure out the situation.

A few male dead bodies whose heads were bleeding were beside me and. I stood up from the ground and looked around.

There were four thick gray concrete walls formed asing a big square.

The cCorpses and skinny people dressed in dirty and torn clothesrags, including me, like servants or prisoners, were limited and stuck bystuck inside these walls .

rags = shabby, dirty, shred old clothes

Strangely, I did not feel a thing.

"I wasn't feeling anything" would also be right, to insist on the duration of the process

No question likesuch as what was happen nowing then and who had killed the poor guys who laid downlying on the bloody ground appeared incame to my mind as I could not think as fast as I usually do.

I felt some creepy noises around, such as cryingies, screamings, and whisper arounds, but I could not listen clearly to what these skinny corpses were talkeding about and where the screamings came from.

I was about to write "heard some creepy noises" but you mention later that you had lost the sense of hearing in this dream, so I don't know exactly what would be the best option. Let's keep "felt".

I realized that maybe I was in mya dream, a lucid dream.

I lost control of my character in the dream.

I was more like a outsider to watching a show.

All of sudden, a strong guy with bulging muscles whoseand a body siztwice was twice as normal people big as average magically appeared in the jail.

I had the intuition that this guy was the bully and didcommitted the murders.

Someon people wanted to challenge his authority and becamebut were turned to corpses too after a fights.

"someone" implies there was just one person, obviously, "corpseS" indicate there were several

I did not know why but I decided to do a fight withfight the bully.

The answer is a mystery since I woke up.

I thought that this dream iwas very thrilling and very unusual.

In the dream, I lost my physical abilitisenses of hearing, touching and tastinge.

In that context, we generally talk about "senses"; you may have heard of the 5 senses (actually, there are far more than 5): sight, touch, taste, smell, hearing.

I also could not feel the space and the time.

DoHave you haved any similar experience like ms similar to mine?

And thank you for reading and correcting.

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Yes, I've had many similar and very odd dreams. I believe they all express what's going on within our psyche. Our wishes, our fears, our emotions and thoughts. All of them are written in an oniric language that is personal, although there are general trends.
For instance, challenging a bully in a small, dark, enclosed space might mean you yearn for more freedom, that you consider your life cramped and tasteless.
I don't know, only you can find out about it.

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frank

Aug. 9, 2020

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Thank you for your correction and comment. I have learnt a lot from your correction.

My dream


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I believe that all of us have dream a lot when we fall asleep especially in childhood, but most context of our dreams will be forgotten eventually.


I believe that all of us have dream a lot when we fall asleep, especially in childhood, but mostthe context of most of our dreams will be forgotten eventuallyis eventually forgotten.

I believe that all of us have dream a lot when we fall asleep, especially in childhood, but most context of our dreams will be forgotten eventually.

Recently, I have some strange drams in the night despite the fact that I rarely dream since I grow up.


Recently, I have had some strange dreams in the night despite the fact that I, although I've rarely been dreaming since I grow upmy childhood.

Present perfect + -ing, because here you're talking about a long action that started in the past and is still going on till this very day.

Recently, I have some strange drams in the night despite the fact that I rarely dream since I have grown up.

However, I would like to share with you an odd dream I remember.


However, I would like to share with you an odd dream I remember.

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Being disturbed by creepy noise, I opened my eyes slowly from faint and attended to figure out the situation.


Being dDisturbed by a creepy noise, I opened my eyes, slowly from faint and attendregaining consciousness, and tried to figure out the situation.

Being disturbed by creepy noise, I opened my eyes slowly from faint and attended to figure out the situation.

Not sure what you meant by "from faint", but the sentence is perfectly natural without it

A few male dead bodies whose heads were bleeding beside me and I stood up from the ground and looked around.


A few male dead bodies whose heads were bleeding were beside me and. I stood up from the ground and looked around.

A few dead male dead bodies whose heads were bleeding beside me and. I stood up from the ground and looked around.

There were four thick gray concrete walls formed as a big square.


There were four thick gray concrete walls formed asing a big square.

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The corpses and skinny people dressed in dirty and torn clothes including me like servants or prisoners, were limited and stuck by these walls .


The cCorpses and skinny people dressed in dirty and torn clothesrags, including me, like servants or prisoners, were limited and stuck bystuck inside these walls .

rags = shabby, dirty, shred old clothes

The corpses and skinny people dressed in dirty and torn clothes including me like servants or prisoners, were limited and stuckenclosed by these walls .

Strangely, I did not feel a thing.


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Strangely, I did not feel a thing.

"I wasn't feeling anything" would also be right, to insist on the duration of the process

No question like what happen now and who killed the poor guys who laid down on the blood ground appeared in my mind as I could not think as fast as I usually do.


No question likesuch as what was happen nowing then and who had killed the poor guys who laid downlying on the bloody ground appeared incame to my mind as I could not think as fast as I usually do.

No question like w"What happens now?" and w"Who killed these poor guys who laidare lying down oin the blood g?". Ground appeared in my mind as I could not think as fast as I usually do.

I felt some creep noise such as crying, screaming and whisper around but I could not listen clearly what these skinny talked about and where the screaming came from.


I felt some creepy noises around, such as cryingies, screamings, and whisper arounds, but I could not listen clearly to what these skinny corpses were talkeding about and where the screamings came from.

I was about to write "heard some creepy noises" but you mention later that you had lost the sense of hearing in this dream, so I don't know exactly what would be the best option. Let's keep "felt".

I felt some creepy noise such as crying, screaming and whispering around but I could not listen clearly what these skinny talked about and where the screaming came from.

I realized that maybe I was in my dream, a lucid dream.


I realized that maybe I was in mya dream, a lucid dream.

I realized that maybe I was in my dream, a lucid dream.

I lost control of my character in the dream.


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I was more like a outsider to watch a show.


I was more like a outsider to watching a show.

I was more like an outsider to watch a showobserver.

All of sudden, a strong guy with bulging muscles whose body size was twice as normal people magically appeared in the jail.


All of sudden, a strong guy with bulging muscles whoseand a body siztwice was twice as normal people big as average magically appeared in the jail.

All of a sudden, a strong guy with bulging muscles, whose body size was twice asthat of normal people , magically appeared in the jail.

I had intuition that this guy was the bully and did murders.


I had the intuition that this guy was the bully and didcommitted the murders.

I had intuition that this guy was the bully and didperpetrated the murders.

Someone wanted to challenge his authority and became corpses after fights.


Someon people wanted to challenge his authority and becamebut were turned to corpses too after a fights.

"someone" implies there was just one person, obviously, "corpseS" indicate there were several

Someone wanted to challenge his authority and became corpsesdied after fightsing.

I did not know why but I decided to do a fight with the bully.


I did not know why but I decided to do a fight withfight the bully.

I did not know why but I decided to do a fight withfight the bully.

And did I win?


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The answer is mystery since I woke up.


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The answer is a mystery since I woke up.

I thought that this dream is very thrilling and very unusual.


I thought that this dream iwas very thrilling and very unusual.

I thought that this dream iwas very thrilling and very unusual.

In the dream, I lost my physical abilities of hearing, touching and tasting.


In the dream, I lost my physical abilitisenses of hearing, touching and tastinge.

In that context, we generally talk about "senses"; you may have heard of the 5 senses (actually, there are far more than 5): sight, touch, taste, smell, hearing.

In the dream, I lost my physical abilitisenses of hearing, touching and tastinge.

I also could not feel the space and the time.


I also could not feel the space and the time.

I also could not feel the space and the time.

Do you have any similar experience like me?


This sentence has been marked as perfect!

DoHave you haved any similar experience like ms similar to mine?

And thank you for reading and correcting.


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