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VnukPuk

Aug. 22, 2023

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My day

I got up today and i was surprised because I slept above 10 hours. I should admit that I didn't ever sleep as much as today.
Then my mother cook breakfast and it doesn't beyong question but i need to write it : my mum cooks the best pancakes i ever tasted. We had eaten and gone to bed to relax after breakfast. At that time we are usually read the books : mum her book, i mine. Today shouldn't was an exseption but i had lacked a focus to read that why i just had been scrolling instagram. After that mum go to the market and i started cook lunch for us. I cooked the first dish was springed to my mind : salat with mushrooms, eggs, chees and tuna. Also I prepared meat for tommorow's lunch. I hope it will be edible, hah.
For this moment my mum had returned and her trip to the store was worth it : she bought very tasty plums.
We had been eating when we understood that it time to go to mother's first job and we are need to hurry. We immediately had started to take all necessary staff and run out the flat.
When we got to the office , all employees already left the office. Therefor mum was can start to clean up it. As usual i go to one of the officie's rooms and begin practicing my English.
After all we had gone to the second mother's job. Throughout the trip I had fighted with dad by phone, beacuse my dad thinks that i spare not enought time for him and he lacks our calls (Now we live in different countries). We didn't hang up to each other but we ended our conversetion too fast and in a bad mood.
It was a long day and when we had gotten home, we decided to have an early night.

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My dDay

All content words in a title should be capitalized.

I got up today and i was surprised because I slept abovemore than 10 hours.

I should admit that I didn't never sleep as much as I did today.

Then my mother cooked breakfast and it doesn't beyong question but i need to write it :. Without question, my mum cooks the best pancakes iI’ve ever tasted.

We had eaten and gone to bed to relax after breakfastAfter eating breakfast, we laid in bed to relax.

At that time we are usually read the books : mum her book, i mineeach read our own books.

Today shouldn't washave been an exsception, but i had lacked aI couldn’t focus ton read that why i just had beening. I just scrolling ied Instagram instead.

After that, mum gowent to the market and iI started cook lunch for usmaking our lunch.

I cooked the first dish was springedthat came to my mind : salat with mushrooms, eggs, cheese, and tuna.

Also I prepared meat for tommorrow's lunch.

I hope it will be edible, hah.

ForAt thisat moment, my mum had returned and h. Her trip to the store was worth it :; she bought some very tasty plums.

We had beenwere eating when we understoorealized that it was time to go to mother's first job, and we arthat we needed to hurry.

We immediately had started to takegrabbed all necessary staffthings and ruan out of the flat.

When we got to the office , all of the employees had already left the office.

Therefore, mum was cancould start to clean up iting.

As usual i go, I went to one of the officie'se rooms and begian practicing my English.

After all we had gone to the second mother'sThen we went to my mother’s second job.

Throughout the trip I had fiOn the way there, I foughted with my dad byover the phone, beacause my dadhe thinks that i spare notI don’t spend enought time foron him and hwe lacks our calls (Now don’t call enough (we live in different countries).

We didn't hang up ton each other, but we ended our converseation too fast and in a bad moodquickly, on bad terms.

It was a long day, and when we had gotten home, we decided to have aturned in early night.

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VnukPuk

Aug. 23, 2023

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Thank you ;3

My day

I got up today and i was surprised because I slept above r10 hours.

I should admit that I didhaven't ever sleept as much as today.

Then my mother cooked breakfast and it doesn't beyong question but i need to write it : my mum cooks the best pancakes iI've ever tasted.

Honestly I'm not quite sure what you're trying to say here, you can omit saying how it doesn't matter to the question and just continue with the story :)

At that time we are usually read the books : mum reads her book, iI read mine.

Today shouldn't was an exsception but iI had lacked a focus to read that whyso i just had been scrolling instagram.

Again, I'm not quite sure what the first half of this sentence means.

After that mum gowent to the market and iI started cooking lunch for us.

I cooked the first dish wasthat spriunged to my mind : salatd with mushrooms, eggs, cheese and tuna.

AI also I prepared meat for tommorow's lunch.

I hope it will be edible, hah.

ForAt this moment my mum had returned and her trip to the store was worth it : she bought very tasty plums.

We had beenwere eating when we understoorealized that it was time to go to mother's first job and we are needed to hurry.

We immediately had started to take all the necessary stauff and ruan out of the flat.

When we got to the office , all of the employees had already left the office.

Therefore mum was cancould start to clean up itit up.

As usual i gowent to one of the officie's rooms and begian practicing my English.

After allwe were done we had to gone to the second mother's second job.

Throughout the trip I had fioughted with my dad byon the phone, beacuse my dadhe thinks that i don't spare not enought time for him and he lacks ounever calls him (Now we live in different countries).

We didn't hang up ton each other but we ended our converseation too fast and in a bad moodquickly and angrily.

It was a long day and when we had gottengot home, we decided to have an early night.

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The biggest suggestion I can give is to spend some time studying tenses of verbs. It's important in english to keep all your verbs in the same tense in each sentence.
For example, it's incorrect to say "During the game, my dad stood up and is waving at me". Instead, you would say "during the game, my dad stood up and waved at me."
Since the verbs are happening at the same time (during the game), it's important to make sure the words you're using reflect that.

https://www.grammarly.com/blog/verb-tense-consistency/
This link has good information if you want to read more!

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VnukPuk

Aug. 23, 2023

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Thank you for your help <3
I will definitely take your advice.

My day


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My dDay

All content words in a title should be capitalized.

I got up today and i was surprised because I slept above 10 hours.


I got up today and i was surprised because I slept above r10 hours.

I got up today and i was surprised because I slept abovemore than 10 hours.

I should admit that I didn't ever sleep as much as today.


I should admit that I didhaven't ever sleept as much as today.

I should admit that I didn't never sleep as much as I did today.

Then my mother cook breakfast and it doesn't beyong question but i need to write it : my mum cooks the best pancakes i ever tasted.


Then my mother cooked breakfast and it doesn't beyong question but i need to write it : my mum cooks the best pancakes iI've ever tasted.

Honestly I'm not quite sure what you're trying to say here, you can omit saying how it doesn't matter to the question and just continue with the story :)

Then my mother cooked breakfast and it doesn't beyong question but i need to write it :. Without question, my mum cooks the best pancakes iI’ve ever tasted.

We had eaten and gone to bed to relax after breakfast.


We had eaten and gone to bed to relax after breakfastAfter eating breakfast, we laid in bed to relax.

At that time we are usually read the books : mum her book, i mine.


At that time we are usually read the books : mum reads her book, iI read mine.

At that time we are usually read the books : mum her book, i mineeach read our own books.

Today shouldn't was an exseption but i had lacked a focus to read that why i just had been scrolling instagram.


Today shouldn't was an exsception but iI had lacked a focus to read that whyso i just had been scrolling instagram.

Again, I'm not quite sure what the first half of this sentence means.

Today shouldn't washave been an exsception, but i had lacked aI couldn’t focus ton read that why i just had beening. I just scrolling ied Instagram instead.

After that mum go to the market and i started cook lunch for us.


After that mum gowent to the market and iI started cooking lunch for us.

After that, mum gowent to the market and iI started cook lunch for usmaking our lunch.

I cooked the first dish was springed to my mind : salat with mushrooms, eggs, chees and tuna.


I cooked the first dish wasthat spriunged to my mind : salatd with mushrooms, eggs, cheese and tuna.

I cooked the first dish was springedthat came to my mind : salat with mushrooms, eggs, cheese, and tuna.

Also I prepared meat for tommorow's lunch.


AI also I prepared meat for tommorow's lunch.

Also I prepared meat for tommorrow's lunch.

I hope it will be edible, hah.


This sentence has been marked as perfect!

This sentence has been marked as perfect!

For this moment my mum had returned and her trip to the store was worth it : she bought very tasty plums.


ForAt this moment my mum had returned and her trip to the store was worth it : she bought very tasty plums.

ForAt thisat moment, my mum had returned and h. Her trip to the store was worth it :; she bought some very tasty plums.

We had been eating when we understood that it time to go to mother's first job and we are need to hurry.


We had beenwere eating when we understoorealized that it was time to go to mother's first job and we are needed to hurry.

We had beenwere eating when we understoorealized that it was time to go to mother's first job, and we arthat we needed to hurry.

We immediately had started to take all necessary staff and run out the flat.


We immediately had started to take all the necessary stauff and ruan out of the flat.

We immediately had started to takegrabbed all necessary staffthings and ruan out of the flat.

When we got to the office , all employees already left the office.


When we got to the office , all of the employees had already left the office.

When we got to the office , all of the employees had already left the office.

Therefor mum was can start to clean up it.


Therefore mum was cancould start to clean up itit up.

Therefore, mum was cancould start to clean up iting.

As usual i go to one of the officie's rooms and begin practicing my English.


As usual i gowent to one of the officie's rooms and begian practicing my English.

As usual i go, I went to one of the officie'se rooms and begian practicing my English.

After all we had gone to the second mother's job.


After allwe were done we had to gone to the second mother's second job.

After all we had gone to the second mother'sThen we went to my mother’s second job.

Throughout the trip I had fighted with dad by phone, beacuse my dad thinks that i spare not enought time for him and he lacks our calls (Now we live in different countries).


Throughout the trip I had fioughted with my dad byon the phone, beacuse my dadhe thinks that i don't spare not enought time for him and he lacks ounever calls him (Now we live in different countries).

Throughout the trip I had fiOn the way there, I foughted with my dad byover the phone, beacause my dadhe thinks that i spare notI don’t spend enought time foron him and hwe lacks our calls (Now don’t call enough (we live in different countries).

We didn't hang up to each other but we ended our conversetion too fast and in a bad mood.


We didn't hang up ton each other but we ended our converseation too fast and in a bad moodquickly and angrily.

We didn't hang up ton each other, but we ended our converseation too fast and in a bad moodquickly, on bad terms.

It was a long day and when we had gotten home, we decided to have an early night.


It was a long day and when we had gottengot home, we decided to have an early night.

It was a long day, and when we had gotten home, we decided to have aturned in early night.

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