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My Dad After Graduation + My North Routine

My dad arrived in Sverdlovsk to study law for next 5 years. I don’t know much about those years of his, so this story seems to be short. Sverdlovsk is a city in the north-eastern part of Russia. It gets freezing in wintertime, down to -35 degrees Celsius. All I know about that period is that he lived in a dorm with 4 roommates and daydreamed about reaching the top in his career. After graduation and mandatory military service for 1 year he got into the police and moved to Yamalia in the north. He lived and worked there for around 20 years.
I was there living through the part of that period myself. It was freezing, down to -40 degrees Celsius. I went to school, attended swimming classes, and did cross-country skiing on weekends along with my friends. Sometimes I could stay home, skipping school due to severe weather conditions. On that days I ate ice cream and played GTA San Andreas. I remember it as if it was today.

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My Dad After Graduation + My North Routine

My dad arrived in Sverdlovsk to study law for the next 5 years.

I would add the year here, after Sverdlovsk, to make it sound better. Otherwise, remove next.

I don’t know much about those years of his, so this story seems towill be short.

Sverdlovsk is a city in the north-eastern part of Russia.

It gets freezing in wintertime, down to -35 degrees Celsius.

All I know about that period is that he lived in a dorm with 4 roommates and daydreamed about reaching the top in his career.

After graduation and one year of mandatory military service for 1 year he gothe was accepted into the police and moved to Yamalia in the north.

He lived and worked there for around 20 years.

I was there living through the part of that period myself.

It was freezing, down to -40 degrees Celsius.

I went to school, attended swimming classes, and did cross-country skiing on weekends along with my friends.

Sometimes I cwould stay home, skipping school due to severe weather conditions.

On thatose days I ate ice cream and played GTA San Andreas.

I remember it as if it was toere yesterday.

Today isn´t grammatically correct but the idiom is "as if it were yesterday"

It getbecomes freezing in the wintertime, down to -35 degrees Celsius.

After graduation and mandatory military service for 1 year, he got into the police and moved to Yamalia in the north.

I was there, living through the part of that period myself.

I went to school, attended swimming classes, and did cross-country skiing on weekends along with my friends.

Sometimes I could stay home, and skippinged school due to severe weather conditions.

On thatose days I ate ice cream and played GTA San Andreas.

My Dad After Graduation + My Northern Routine

My dad arrived in Sverdlovsk to study law for his next 5five years.

I don’t know much about those years of his, so this story seems to be short.

Sverdlovsk is a city in the north-eastern part of Russia.

It get's freezing in wintertime, down to -35 degrees Celsius.

All I know about that period is that he lived in a dorm with 4four roommates and daydreamed about reaching the top inof his career.

After graduation and mandatory military service for 1one year, he got into the police and moved to Yamalia in the north.

He lived and worked there for around 20 years.

I was there living through the part of that period myself.

This sentence is a little unclear.
Do you mean that period of the story or that time period?

It was freezing, down to -40 degrees Celsius.

I went to school, attended swimming classes, and did cross-country skiing on weekends along with my friends.

Sometimes, I could stay home, skipping school due to severe weather conditions.

On thatose days, I ate ice cream and played GTA San Andreas.

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Overall, good grammar. Seems like a nice childhood. 👍

Sverdlovsk is a city in the north-eastern part of Russia.


Sverdlovsk is a city in the north-eastern part of Russia.

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It gets freezing in wintertime, down to -35 degrees Celsius.


It get's freezing in wintertime, down to -35 degrees Celsius.

It getbecomes freezing in the wintertime, down to -35 degrees Celsius.

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All I know about that period is that he lived in a dorm with 4 roommates and daydreamed about reaching the top in his career.


All I know about that period is that he lived in a dorm with 4four roommates and daydreamed about reaching the top inof his career.

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After graduation and mandatory military service for 1 year he got into the police and moved to Yamalia in the north.


After graduation and mandatory military service for 1one year, he got into the police and moved to Yamalia in the north.

After graduation and mandatory military service for 1 year, he got into the police and moved to Yamalia in the north.

After graduation and one year of mandatory military service for 1 year he gothe was accepted into the police and moved to Yamalia in the north.

He lived and worked there for around 20 years.


This sentence has been marked as perfect!

This sentence has been marked as perfect!

I was there living through the part of that period myself.


I was there living through the part of that period myself.

This sentence is a little unclear. Do you mean that period of the story or that time period?

I was there, living through the part of that period myself.

This sentence has been marked as perfect!

It was freezing, down to -40 degrees Celsius.


This sentence has been marked as perfect!

This sentence has been marked as perfect!

My Dad After Graduation + My North Routine


My Dad After Graduation + My Northern Routine

My Dad After Graduation + My North Routine

My dad arrived in Sverdlovsk to study law for next 5 years.


My dad arrived in Sverdlovsk to study law for his next 5five years.

My dad arrived in Sverdlovsk to study law for the next 5 years.

I would add the year here, after Sverdlovsk, to make it sound better. Otherwise, remove next.

I don’t know much about those years of his, so this story seems to be short.


I don’t know much about those years of his, so this story seems to be short.

I don’t know much about those years of his, so this story seems towill be short.

I went to school, attended swimming classes, and did cross-country skiing on weekends along with my friends.


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I went to school, attended swimming classes, and did cross-country skiing on weekends along with my friends.

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Sometimes I could stay home, skipping school due to severe weather conditions.


Sometimes, I could stay home, skipping school due to severe weather conditions.

Sometimes I could stay home, and skippinged school due to severe weather conditions.

Sometimes I cwould stay home, skipping school due to severe weather conditions.

On that days I ate ice cream and played GTA San Andreas.


On thatose days, I ate ice cream and played GTA San Andreas.

On thatose days I ate ice cream and played GTA San Andreas.

On thatose days I ate ice cream and played GTA San Andreas.

I remember it as if it was today.


I remember it as if it was toere yesterday.

Today isn´t grammatically correct but the idiom is "as if it were yesterday"

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