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My cat(3)
A week later, Bao finally no longer only stayed in the corner of my house and was willing to explore the surrounding environment.
Even though he still had not allowed me to touch him, but if I gave him some hairball relief paste he would love to come to me.
Every time someone past by him, he still got nervous, excaping back to the corner.
In the meanwhile I was trying my best to learn more knowledge about cats and coming to his world step by step.
我家的猫（3）
过了大概一周时间，小宝终于开始不再缩在角落里。开始走出来探索周围环境。
虽然现在它还是不让我摸，但每次给化毛膏它吃，它都会走过来。
不过，每当有人走靠近它的时候，他都会很紧张，然后逃回角落里。
而在这段期间我也努力学习有关养猫的知识，一步步地走进小宝的世界。
A week later, Bao finally no longer only stayedstopped staying only in the corner of my house and was willing to explore the surrounding environment.
Just changing it to sound more natural, your version was clear too.
Even thoughDespite that he still had not allowed me to touch him, but if I gave him some hairball relief paste he would love to come to me.
Every time someone pastsed by him, he still got nervous, exscaping back to the corner.
In the meanwhile I was trying my best to learn more knowledge about cats and coming (?) to his world step by step.
Not quite sure what you mean by coming here.
A week later, Bao finally no longer onlyjust stayed in the corner of my house and was willing to explore the surrounding environments.
for better flow
Even though he still had nodidn't allowed me to touch him, but ifhe would come to me I gave him some hairball relief paste he would love to come to me.
Every time someone pastsed by him, he still got nervous, excapingand immediately hid back to the corner.
passed is the correct past tense
In the mMeanwhile, I was trydoing my best to learn more knowledge about cats and coming to his world step by step.
in the meanwhile is a little awkward. don't forget the comma.
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I hope Bao will open up to you more!
My cat(3)
AFinally, a week later, Bao finally no longer only stayed in the corner of my house and was willing to explore the surrounding environment.
Word order changed to improve sentence readability.
Even though he still had not allowed me to touch him, but if I gave him some hairball relief paste, he would love to come to me.
Keeping "even though" and "but" is a double conjunction. We only need one to introduce contrast.
Every time someone pastsed by him, he still got nervous, exscaping back to the corner.
- Correct verb form is "passed"
- Correct spelling is "escaping"
In the meanwhiletime, I was trying my best to learn more knowledge about cats and becoming topart of his world step by step.
- In the meantime is more commonly used.
- "To learn" implies gaining knowledge, so we can leave it on its own.
- I apologise that I am unable to give much helpful feedback for the final change, "coming to his world". It just sounds more natural.
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A week later, Bao finally no longer only stayed in the corner of my house and was willing to explore the surrounding environment. A week later, Bao for better flow
Word order changed to improve sentence readability. A week later, Bao finally Just changing it to sound more natural, your version was clear too. |
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Even though he still had not allowed me to touch him, but if I gave him some hairball relief paste he would love to come to me. Even though he still Even though he still had not allowed me to touch him, Keeping "even though" and "but" is a double conjunction. We only need one to introduce contrast.
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Every time someone past by him, he still got nervous, excaping back to the corner. Every time someone pas passed is the correct past tense Every time someone pas - Correct verb form is "passed" - Correct spelling is "escaping" Every time someone pas |
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In the meanwhile I was trying my best to learn more knowledge about cats and coming to his world step by step.
in the meanwhile is a little awkward. don't forget the comma. In the mean - In the meantime is more commonly used. - "To learn" implies gaining knowledge, so we can leave it on its own. - I apologise that I am unable to give much helpful feedback for the final change, "coming to his world". It just sounds more natural. In the meanwhile I was trying my best to learn more Not quite sure what you mean by coming here. |
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