May 21, 2025
My Career
My first workplace was in Jiashan County, Chuzhou City (now Mingguang, a county-level city).
Four years later, I was transferred back to my hometown city, where I married a nurse and had a son.
When I was 25 years old, one day, while I was going shopping with my wife on the street, I happened to meet the director of the Agricultural Machinery Bureau of my hometown. The bureau was the superior administrative department of my work unit.
He told me he was going to promote me to be the deputy director of my office and asked me to be punctual for work and leave on time to make a good impression on others.
I was more than excited after hearing that, as I never thought I would become a director of my work unit. I even felt it was unreal. Nevertheless, my wife comforted me, saying, “It's a good thing anyway.”
About three months later, I was appointed as the vice principal by the county government. My work unit was a school responsible for training agricultural machinery operators in my county.
After five years of working as the vice principal, I was promoted to be the principal director of the Agricultural Mechanization Technology Extension Station of my district.
This official position is equivalent to the lowest administrative position in Chinese administrative ranks, that of a deputy township leader.
I have been working as a principal director in two deputy township-level units for 22 years. Now I work in a principal township-level unit as a deputy director and have been doing so for five years.
I dislike asking the higher - ups to promote me. I hate to fawn on the higher - ups and curry favor with them just for getting a promotion.
My attitude towards promotion is that I won’t resist if the higher - ups positively promote me since it’s not a bad thing.
On the other hand, I will never do anything deliberately to get a promotion from them since it’s also not a good thing.
Compared to continuously getting promoted, I value my freedom and dignity more highly.
My Career
My first workplace was in Jiashan County, Chuzhou City (now Mingguang, a county-level city).
Four years later, I was transferred back to my hometown city, where I married a nurse and had a son.
When I was 25 years old, one day, while I was going shopping with my wife on the street, I happened to meet the director of the Agricultural Machinery Bureau of my hometown.
The bureau was the superior administrative department of my work unit.
He told me he was going to promote me to be the deputy director of my office and asked me to be punctual for work and leave on time to make a good impression on others.
I was more than excited after hearing that, as I never thought I would become a director of my work unit.
I evenThe feeling I felt it was unreal.
The way the sentence is worded is unusual, so I fixed it a bit.
Nevertheless, my wife comforted me, saying, “It's a good thing anyway.” About three months later, I was appointed as the vice principal by the county government.
My work unit was a school responsible for training agricultural machinery operators in my county.
After five years of working as the vice principal, I was promoted to be the principal director of the Agricultural Mechanization Technology Extension Station of my district.
This official position is equivalent to the lowest administrative position in Chinese administrative ranks, that of a deputy township leader.
I have been working as a principal director in two deputy township-level units for 22 years.
Now, I work in a principal township-level unit as a deputy director and have been doing so for five years.
Don't forget about putting a comma after "Now" since it's an introductory word. You're adding new information which helps it flow nice.
I dislike asking the higher - -ups to promote me.
You don't need a space between the "-"
I hate to fawn on the higher - -ups and curry favor with them just for getting a promotion.
My attitude towards promotion, is that I won’t resist if the higher - -ups positively promote me since it’s not a bad thing.
On the other hand, I will never do anything deliberately to get a promotion from them since it’s also not a good thing.
Compared to continuously getting promoted, I value my freedom and dignity more highly.
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Your writing is very good overall, well done!
yesterday
Thank you very much.
My Career
My first workplace was in Jiashan County, Chuzhou City (now Mingguang, a county-level city).
Four years later, I was transferred back to my hometown city, where I married a nurse and had a son.
"Hometown city" isn't quite grammatical, since both "hometown" and "city" are nouns. Alternatively, you can omit "city" and just write "hometown".
WOne day, when I was 25 years old, one day, while I was going shopping with my wife on the street, I happened to meet the director of the Agricultural Machinery Bureau of my hometown.
"One day" (and other similar phrases such as "once upon a time") typically sounds more natural all the way at the front.
The bureau was the superior administrative department of my work unit.
He told me he was going to promote me to be the deputy director of my office and asked me to be punctual for work and leave on time to make a good impression on others.
"promote me to be the depute director" is fine, but more concisely, you can consider omitting "to be the".
I was more than excited after hearing that, as I never thought I would become a director of my work unit.
I even felt it was unreal.
Nevertheless, my wife comforted me, saying, “It's a good thing anyway.” About three months later, I was appointed as the vice principal by the county government.
My work unit was a school responsible for training agricultural machinery operators in my county.
After five years of working as the vice principal, I was promoted to be the principal director of the Agricultural Mechanization Technology Extension Station of my district.
This official position is equivalent to the lowest administrative position in Chinese administrative ranks, that of a deputy township leader.
I have been workinged as a principal director in two deputy township-level units for 22 years.
"I have been working" implies that you are still a principal director, but looking at your next sentence, it would seem that you no longer are.
Now I work in a principal township-level unit as a deputy director and have been doing so for five years.
I dislike asking the higher - -ups to promote me.
I hate to fawn onver the higher - -ups and curry favor with them just for getting a promotion.
"Fawn on" isn't wrong I don't think, but definitely much less common than "fawn over".
My attitude towards promotion is that I won’t resist if the higher - -ups positively promote me, since it’s not a bad thing.
(1) "Positively" is redundant, because promotions are typically positive in nature, and the reader will understand this.
(2) I'd suggest a comma break.
On the other hand, I will never do anything deliberately to get a promotion from them, since it’'s also not (necessarily) a good thing.
Personally, I'd throw in the word "necessarily" here, especially because you stated in the previous sentence that getting promoted isn't a bad thing.
Compared to continuously getting promoted, I value my freedom and dignity more highly.
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By the way, while writing, you might wish to consider forming larger paragraphs with more sentences, especially when you have sentences that all pertain to the same event. For example, you can combine "One day, when I was 25 years old...", "He told me he was going to promote me...", and "I was more than excited..." into one paragraph. I think that'd improve the reading experience.
yesterday
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Four years later, I was transferred back to my hometown city, where I married a nurse and had a son. Four years later, I was transferred back to my home "Hometown city" isn't quite grammatical, since both "hometown" and "city" are nouns. Alternatively, you can omit "city" and just write "hometown". This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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When I was 25 years old, one day, while I was going shopping with my wife on the street, I happened to meet the director of the Agricultural Machinery Bureau of my hometown.
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He told me he was going to promote me to be the deputy director of my office and asked me to be punctual for work and leave on time to make a good impression on others. He told me he was going to promote me to "promote me to be the depute director" is fine, but more concisely, you can consider omitting "to be the". This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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I was more than excited after hearing that, as I never thought I would become a director of my work unit. This sentence has been marked as perfect! This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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I even felt it was unreal. This sentence has been marked as perfect!
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My work unit was a school responsible for training agricultural machinery operators in my county. This sentence has been marked as perfect! This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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After five years of working as the vice principal, I was promoted to be the principal director of the Agricultural Mechanization Technology Extension Station of my district. This sentence has been marked as perfect! This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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This official position is equivalent to the lowest administrative position in Chinese administrative ranks, that of a deputy township leader. This sentence has been marked as perfect! This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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I have been working as a principal director in two deputy township-level units for 22 years. I "I have been working" implies that you are still a principal director, but looking at your next sentence, it would seem that you no longer are. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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On the other hand, I will never do anything deliberately to get a promotion from them since it’s also not a good thing. On the other hand, I will never do anything deliberately to get a promotion from them, since it Personally, I'd throw in the word "necessarily" here, especially because you stated in the previous sentence that getting promoted isn't a bad thing. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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