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mr_h

Dec. 20, 2020

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My biggest regret!

It will be probably when I was 7, and I was playing on my ps2, with a new friend I made.
He was 15 and we was playing wwe game and i was wining he said he was gonna show me
a new technique so i handed him my controller and he made my player approach his then he used his ultimate move making lose i started crying to mom this kid was living with us because his mom abandoned him when he was a child and he living with his dad and his dad brought him to us while he go to works and he could work on for my auntie convenient store anyway when mom heard i was crying she started freaking out i didn't thought she was gonna get like that
and he was very apologetic and he was just pulling prank on him but she didn't listen and kicked him out at midnight That night i felt very guilty because i knew i overreacted and i was thinking i will apologies to him in the morning when he comes back but he never did that was 14 years ago
last week i heard that he died in yemen in he sleep he left he is dad to go look for his mom leaving younger brother alone and all this from 15 just started flooding back i wished i could've
meet once more time so i can say i was sorry for acting childish

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It will beas probably when I was 7, and I was playing on my ps2, with a new friend I had made.

it sounds better to just say "with a new friend"
"a new friend I made" doesn't add any additional meaning

He was 15 and we wasere playing wwe game and iI was winning h. He said he was gonna show me...

a new technique so i handed him my controller and he made my player approach his, then he used his ultimate move making me lose i. I started crying to mom t. This kid was living with us because his mom abandoned him when he was a child and he was living with his dad and h. His dad brought him to us while he goes to works and so that he could work on forat my auntie's convenient store a. Anyway when mom heard iI was crying she started freaking out iI didn't thoughtink she was gonna get like that

I'm not sure if I caught exactly what you were trying to say here

and hHe was very apologetic and he was just pulling a prank on himme, but she didn't listen and kicked him out at midnight. That night iI felt very guilty because iI knew iI overreacted and iI was thinking iI will apologizes to him in the morning when he comes back, but he never did t. That was 14 years ago.

lLast week iI heard that he died in yYemen in heis sleep h. He left he is dad to go look for his mom, leaving his younger brother alone and all this from 15 years ago just started flooding back i. I wished i I could've

meet him once more time so iI can say i wasI"m sorry for acting childish

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you can say "once more" or "one more time"

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mr_h

Dec. 21, 2020

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Thanks that been very helpful.I realized that tend to misuse ''and'' a lot so thank you

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mr_h

Dec. 21, 2020

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lLast week iI heard that he died in yYemen in heis sleep h. He left he is dad to go look for his mom, leaving his younger brother alone and all this from 15 years ago just started flooding back i. I wished i I could've

I meant to say ''all of the memory of the past 15 years just started flooding back

My biggest regret!

It will be probably when I was 7, and I was playing on my ps2, with a new friend I made.

It will beas probably when I was 7, and I was playing on my ps2, with a new friend I had made.

it sounds better to just say "with a new friend" "a new friend I made" doesn't add any additional meaning

He was 15 and we was playing wwe game and i was wining he said he was gonna show me

He was 15 and we wasere playing wwe game and iI was winning h. He said he was gonna show me...

a new technique so i handed him my controller and he made my player approach his then he used his ultimate move making lose i started crying to mom this kid was living with us because his mom abandoned him when he was a child and he living with his dad and his dad brought him to us while he go to works and he could work on for my auntie convenient store anyway when mom heard i was crying she started freaking out i didn't thought she was gonna get like that

a new technique so i handed him my controller and he made my player approach his, then he used his ultimate move making me lose i. I started crying to mom t. This kid was living with us because his mom abandoned him when he was a child and he was living with his dad and h. His dad brought him to us while he goes to works and so that he could work on forat my auntie's convenient store a. Anyway when mom heard iI was crying she started freaking out iI didn't thoughtink she was gonna get like that

I'm not sure if I caught exactly what you were trying to say here

and he was very apologetic and he was just pulling prank on him but she didn't listen and kicked him out at midnight That night i felt very guilty because i knew i overreacted and i was thinking i will apologies to him in the morning when he comes back but he never did that was 14 years ago

and hHe was very apologetic and he was just pulling a prank on himme, but she didn't listen and kicked him out at midnight. That night iI felt very guilty because iI knew iI overreacted and iI was thinking iI will apologizes to him in the morning when he comes back, but he never did t. That was 14 years ago.

last week i heard that he died in yemen in he sleep he left he is dad to go look for his mom leaving younger brother alone and all this from 15 just started flooding back i wished i could've

lLast week iI heard that he died in yYemen in heis sleep h. He left he is dad to go look for his mom, leaving his younger brother alone and all this from 15 years ago just started flooding back i. I wished i I could've

meet once more time so i can say i was sorry for acting childish

meet him once more time so iI can say i wasI"m sorry for acting childish

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