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My Best Friend in Elementary School

I remembered I had a best friend named Wang in elementary. His mother was beautiful and filmed for a local toothpaste brand, she once invited me to have a lunch at their house, I had a strong memory on the delightful dumpling on that day.
We studied at school, played games after class, sometimes chipped in money to buy snacks. That's a memory like an elephant, a time without anxiety. I thought him as my best friend.
But about 30 years later, It was in 2014. I met him in the opening ceremony of grade one and occasionally found his daughter and my daughter were in a same classroom. I called his name excitedly, but he forgot my name and finally remembered me after I said out my name.
I felt failure and make a bad conclusion: I treated him as my best friend, but he didn't think so. Actually, we didn't chat or phone to each other face to face even our daughters graduated from school.

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I remembered I had aMy best friend named Wang in elementary. school was named Wang

We know this is a memory , so you don’t have to say I remembered

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Scarlett_Father

Nov. 20, 2022

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It's a good suggestion. Thanks! :)

My Best Friend in Elementary School

I remembered I had a best friend named Wang in elementary school.

His mother was beautiful and filmed for a local toothpaste brand, s. She once invited me to have a lunch at their house,. I hadve a strong memory onf the delightful dumpling ons (she served) that day.

We studied at school, played games after class, and sometimes chipped in pooled our money to buy snacks.

"Chipped in money" would be if someone else were already buying snacks, and you contributed some money. "Pooled our money" means the two of you decided to buy snacks together.

That's a memory like an elephantcherished memory, a time without anxiety.

If we say someone "has a memory like an elephant," we mean they remember things for a long time; they never forget.

I thought of him as my best friend.

But about 30 years later, It was in 2014, I ran into him...

Merge this with the next sentence.

I met him in the opening ceremony of grade one and occasionally foundran into him at my daughter's first grade convocation ceremony and happened to find that his daughter and my daughter were in athe same classroom.

I called his name excitedly, but he had forgotten my name and finalonly remembered me after I said out my name.

I felt a sense of failure and make a badcame to an unpleasant conclusion: I treated him as my best friend, but he didn't think sofeel the same way.

Maybe he has a very bad memory, or was having a bad day and then felt very embarrassed because he couldn't remember your name. Or maybe your appearance had changed so much that he couldn't recognize you.

Actuallyfter that, we didn't chat or phone to each other (face to face ev), not even when our daughters graduated from school.

"Face to face" means "so that you can see each other's faces." It doesn't really make sense to me here, unless maybe you mean a video chat.

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Scarlett_Father

Nov. 17, 2022

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Actuallyfter that, we didn't chat or phone to each other (face to face ev), not even when our daughters graduated from school.

It's not video chat, I think "face to face " is a Chinese English thinking way, no need it.

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Scarlett_Father

Nov. 17, 2022

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You are so kind, thank you! :)

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JoeTofu

Nov. 17, 2022

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You’re welcome ☺️

My Best in Elementary School


I remembered I had a best friend named Wang in elementary.


I remembered I had a best friend named Wang in elementary school.

I remembered I had aMy best friend named Wang in elementary. school was named Wang

We know this is a memory , so you don’t have to say I remembered

His mother was beautiful and filmed for a local toothpaste brand, she once invited me to have a lunch at their house, I had a strong memory on the delightful dumpling on that day.


His mother was beautiful and filmed for a local toothpaste brand, s. She once invited me to have a lunch at their house,. I hadve a strong memory onf the delightful dumpling ons (she served) that day.

We studied at school, played games after class, sometimes chiped in money to buy snacks.


That's a memory like an elephant, a time without anxiety.


That's a memory like an elephantcherished memory, a time without anxiety.

If we say someone "has a memory like an elephant," we mean they remember things for a long time; they never forget.

I thought him as my best friend.


I thought of him as my best friend.

But about 30 years later, It was in 2014.


But about 30 years later, It was in 2014, I ran into him...

Merge this with the next sentence.

I met him in the opening ceremony of grade one and occasionally found his daughter and my daughter were in a same classroom.


I met him in the opening ceremony of grade one and occasionally foundran into him at my daughter's first grade convocation ceremony and happened to find that his daughter and my daughter were in athe same classroom.

I called his name excitedly, but he forgot my name and finally remembered me after I said out my name.


I called his name excitedly, but he had forgotten my name and finalonly remembered me after I said out my name.

I felt failure and make a bad conclusion: I treated him as my best friend, but he didn't think so.


I felt a sense of failure and make a badcame to an unpleasant conclusion: I treated him as my best friend, but he didn't think sofeel the same way.

Maybe he has a very bad memory, or was having a bad day and then felt very embarrassed because he couldn't remember your name. Or maybe your appearance had changed so much that he couldn't recognize you.

Actually, we didn't chat or phone to each other face to face till our daughters graduated from school.


My Best Friend in Elementary School


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We studied at school, played games after class, sometimes chipped in money to buy snacks.


We studied at school, played games after class, and sometimes chipped in pooled our money to buy snacks.

"Chipped in money" would be if someone else were already buying snacks, and you contributed some money. "Pooled our money" means the two of you decided to buy snacks together.

Actually, we didn't chat or phone to each other face to face even our daughters graduated from school.


Actuallyfter that, we didn't chat or phone to each other (face to face ev), not even when our daughters graduated from school.

"Face to face" means "so that you can see each other's faces." It doesn't really make sense to me here, unless maybe you mean a video chat.

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