Sept. 17, 2021
Musical clowns and more.
Musical clowns
A group of happy clowns giving a show for children; they are playing amusing swing and jazz music to entertain their young public.
Carriage at sunset
Carriage drawn by a mule traveling at dusk with a pleasant background light that seems to illuminate the scene.
Blue jeans
Curious illustration of a pair of blue jeans and a shirt.
Young woman
Watercolor of a beautiful and sensual young woman.
Geometric surreal set
Acrylic and abstract composition of a set of geometric shape figures.
A nice, and magic bunny
Why does it always have to be the magician who pulls the bunny out of the hat?
Labyrinth
Pleasing design resembling a blue chalkboard with an apparently endless white line that recalls a labyrinth.
Abstract face with circles
Curious surrealist illustration of a face created with vibrant circles of color.
Musical clowns and more.
Musical Clowns and More
1. A main title usually contains words with an uppercase first letter except such words as "and", "of" and so on, unless those words themselves appear at the beginning or end of the title, when they generally should have an uppercase first letter.
2. A full-stop is not needed at the end of a main title.
Musical clowns
A group of happy clowns giving a show for children; they are playing amusing swing and jazz music to entertain their young public.
How you have written this makes it looks like it is being used as a sort of caption describing an accompanying picture or scene. However, if the sentence is just appearing in the middle of a page of text, it would be more usual to use a fuller verb (in this case, "is giving") in the first part as follows:
"A group of happy clowns is giving a show for children. They are playing amusing swing and jazz music to entertain their young public.
Carriage at sunset
Carriage drawn by a mule traveling at dusk with a pleasant background light that seems to illuminate the scene.
Similar to the above advice with respect to a fuller verb use.
Blue jeans
Curious illustration of a pair of blue jeans and a shirt.
- again, as above
Young woman
Watercolor of a beautiful and sensual young woman.
- as above
Geometric surreal set
Acrylic and abstract composition of a set of geometric shape figures.
- as above
A nice, and magic bunny
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A nice, magic bunny
Why does it always have to be the magician who pulls the bunny out of the hat?
Labyrinth
Pleasing design resembling a blue chalkboard with an apparently endless white line that recalls a labyrinth.
- as above
Curious surrealist illustration of a face created with vibrant circles of color.
- as above
Feedback
Please see comments as above.
Please let me know if you would like further help.
Sincerely,
mjm
Nov. 2, 2021
Thanks mjm. In next sentences "Curious illustration of a pair of blue jeans and a shirt." "Watercolor of a beautiful and sensual young woman." "Acrylic and abstract composition of a set of geometric shape figures." I think you tell me to put an auxiliary verb, but I do not know where is the error.
Nov. 3, 2021
Ok, thanks for getting back to me, Ducky. Here are a few more suggestions:
1. Curious illustration of a pair of blue jeans and a shirt.
Depending on the context, this could be written as, for example: "There was/ I could see a curious illustration ..."
A sentence needs a verb. Your own text doesn't contain any form of verb, auxiliary or otherwise.
2. Watercolor of a beautiful and sensual young woman.
Again, depending on the context, this could be written as: "There was/ I could see a watercolour of a beautiful ..."
Your own text doesn't contain a verb.
3. Acrylic and abstract composition of a set of geometric shape figures.
Just like before, you could have written something like: "The picture shows an acrylic and abstract composition of a set of geometric ..."
Again, your own text doesn't contain a verb.
What I have provided above are only suggestions. I don't know the context in which you are writing. If you were to give me that information, I might be able to help you further and more accurately. As also mentioned in the previous feedback, due to the lack of verb use, your original texts look like captions accompanying an illustration in a book, or some such like. Please see my previous comments concerning that.
I hope the above helps a bit more. Again, please say if you would like further help.
Sincerely,
mjm
Nov. 3, 2021
You have reason, the text are captions of some illustrations I painted time ago. Now I understant all you told me before. Very thanks.
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Curious illustration of a pair of blue jeans and a shirt. Curious illustration of a pair of blue jeans and a shirt. - again, as above |
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Musical clowns and more. Musical clowns and more. Musical Clowns and More 1. A main title usually contains words with an uppercase first letter except such words as "and", "of" and so on, unless those words themselves appear at the beginning or end of the title, when they generally should have an uppercase first letter. 2. A full-stop is not needed at the end of a main title. |
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A group of happy clowns giving a show for children; they are playing amusing swing and jazz music to entertain their young public. A group of happy clowns giving a show for children; they are playing amusing swing and jazz music to entertain their young public. How you have written this makes it looks like it is being used as a sort of caption describing an accompanying picture or scene. However, if the sentence is just appearing in the middle of a page of text, it would be more usual to use a fuller verb (in this case, "is giving") in the first part as follows: "A group of happy clowns is giving a show for children. They are playing amusing swing and jazz music to entertain their young public. |
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Carriage at sunset This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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Carriage drawn by a mule traveling at dusk with a pleasant background light that seems to illuminate the scene. Carriage drawn by a mule traveling at dusk with a pleasant background light that seems to illuminate the scene. Similar to the above advice with respect to a fuller verb use. |
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Blue jeans This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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Watercolor of a beautiful and sensual young woman. Watercolor of a beautiful and sensual young woman. - as above |
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Geometric surreal set This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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Acrylic and abstract composition of a set of geometric shape figures. Acrylic and abstract composition of a set of geometric shape figures. - as above |
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A nice, and magic bunny A nice |
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Why does it always have to be the magician who pulls the bunny out of the hat? This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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Labyrinth This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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Pleasing design resembling a blue chalkboard with an apparently endless white line that recalls a labyrinth. Pleasing design resembling a blue chalkboard with an apparently endless white line that recalls a labyrinth. - as above |
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Abstract face with circles |
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Curious surrealist illustration of a face created with vibrant circles of color. Curious surrealist illustration of a face created with vibrant circles of color. - as above |
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