June 27, 2023
Music
One of my hobbies is listening to music. If I have free time, sometimes I’ll listen to music instead of playing games to relax. I always listen to some modern types of music: Pop Music, Lo-fi and Electronic Dance Music (EDM). I like to listen to EDM most because it brings me some kind of happiness and makes me want to dance to it. Besides, I usually listen to Lo-fi when I’m studying at home. On some rainy days, I turn on the speaker in my room and play some sad Lo-fi and chill with it. Listening to music helps me relieve my stress after school days or makes me feel happy when hanging out with friends. With my smartphone and pair of Bluetooth earphones, I can play my music and enjoy it anywhere, anytime. Not only for chilling, but music also gives me more motivation to achieve something and makes me feel that I can do everything. In conclusion, likes playing games, watching films or reading comics, listening to music is one of the best kinds of entertainment that I like. I wish that one day, I can afford my money to go to some music tours and festivals so that I can enjoy some best moments like dancing with my friends or meeting my favourite singer or producer when travelling abroad.
If I have free tim'm free, sometimes I’ll listen to music instead of playing games to relax.
sounds more natural
I always listen to some modern types of music: Pop Music, Lo-fi and Electronic Dance Music (EDM).
In conclusion, likes playing games, watching films or reading comics, listening to music is one of the best kinds of entertainment that I like.
I wish that one day, I can afford my money to goOne day, I hope I'd be able to afford going to some music tours and festivals so that I can enjoy some best moments like dancing with my friends or meeting my favourite singer or producer when travelling abroad.
June 28, 2023
Thank you very much! :)
Music
One of my hobbies is listening to music.
If I have free time, sometimes I’ll listen to music instead of playing games to relax.
I always listen to some modern types of music: Pop Music, Lo-fi and Electronic Dance Music (EDM).
I like to listen to EDM the most because it brings me some kind of happiness and makes me want to dance to it.
Besides, I usually listen to Lo-fi when I’m studying at home.
On some rainy days, I turn on the speaker in my room and play some sad Lo-fi and chill with it.
Listening to music helps me relieve my stress after school days or makes me feel happy when hanging out with friends.
With my smartphone and pair of Bluetooth heardphones, I can play my music and enjoy it anywhere, anytime.
nobody really says Bluetooth earphones, and earphones isn't really used. you can say wireless headphones
Not only for chilling, but music also gives me more motivation to achieve something and makes me feel thatlike I can do everanything.
In conclusion, likes playing games, watching films or reading comics, listening to music is one of the best kinds of entertainment that I like.
I wish that one day, I can afford mywill have enough money to go to some music tours and festivals so that I can enjoy some bestwonderful moments like dancing with my friends or meeting my favourite singer or producer when travelling abroad.
when an artist goes on tour, you can go to a concert from that tour, but you don't go to a music tour. "best" doesn't work in that sentence. you can use instead something like "amazing", "wonderful", or "memorable".
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you're doing really well!! keep it up
June 28, 2023
Thanks for your corrections, I'll try my best! :D
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I always listen to some modern types of music: Pop Music, Lo-fi and Electronic Dance Music (EDM). I always listen to some modern type I always listen to some modern type |
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I like to listen to EDM most because it brings me some kind of happiness and makes me want to dance to it. I like to listen to EDM the most because it brings me some kind of happiness and makes me want to dance |
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On some rainy days, I turn on the speaker in my room and play some sad Lo-fi and chill with it. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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Listening to music helps me relieve my stress after school days or makes me feel happy when hanging out with friends. Listening to music helps me relieve |
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With my smartphone and pair of Bluetooth earphones, I can play my music and enjoy it anywhere, anytime. With my smartphone and pair of nobody really says Bluetooth earphones, and earphones isn't really used. you can say wireless headphones |
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Not only for chilling, but music also gives me more motivation to achieve something and makes me feel that I can do everything. Not only for chilling, but music also gives me more motivation to achieve something and makes me feel |
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I wish that one day, I can afford my money to go to some music tours and festivals so that I can enjoy some best moments like dancing with my friends or meeting my favourite singer or producer when travelling abroad. I wish that one day, I when an artist goes on tour, you can go to a concert from that tour, but you don't go to a music tour. "best" doesn't work in that sentence. you can use instead something like "amazing", "wonderful", or "memorable".
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