July 27, 2023
The murder of Gretchen Anthony 2
At first, things were going smoothly. According to Gretchen's friend, David became a good stepdad for his wife's daughter; Gretchen's daughter used called him "bonus father". Although, in 2019, 4 years since their wedding day, their relationship appeared to be in crisis. Shortly, David was kicked out of Gretchen's house, so he began to live with his mother. The troubles started because of David's unstable mental health, his parents even considered that he had bipolar disorder. However, he had never had any official diagnosis. Gretchen was terrified of that her husband would talk sometimes about the end of the world. He started to stockpile food and other stuff in his car. Soon, the woman started to sleep with a knife under her pillow. On the Christmas of 2019, David stole all his wife's personal belongings and stacked them in his car. "I believe it would be safer to keep them here before the upcoming Armageddon", said David.
That's was when the woman decided that it was time to end their relationship. She began to feel unsafe with him; her husband denied any mental problems and refused to go to see a professional. He believed that only sport could help him. Meanwhile, Gretchen continued to go to work, raise her daughter and go to that fitness club where she met her husband. In the February of 2020, Gretchen filed for divorce because she was exhausted with their marriage. But even after their break up, David kept visiting Gretchen's house, unwilling to let her ex wife go.
According to Gretchen's friend, David became a good stepdad for his wife's daughter; Gretchen's daughter used called him her "bonus father".
Although, in 2019, 4 years sinceafter their wedding day, their relationship appeared to be in crisis.
Shortly after their relationship started to deteriorate, David was kicked out of Gretchen's house, so he and began to live with his mother.
The troubles started becauserelationship troubles were a result of David's unstable mental health, and his parents even considered that hebelieved him to hadve bipolar disorder.
Gretchen was terrified of thathow her husband would talk sometimes talk about the end of the world.
On the Christmas of 2019, David stole all his wife's personal belongings and stackpiled them in his car.
That's was when the woman decided that it was time to end their relationship.
He believed that only doing sports could help him.
Meanwhile, Gretchen continued to go to work, raise her daughter, and go to that fitness club where she met her husband.
In the February of 2020, Gretchen filed for divorce because she was exhausted with tr marriage made heir marriageemotionally exhausted.
But even after their break up, David kept visiting Gretchen's house, unwilling to let heris ex -wife go.
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July 28, 2023
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According to Gretchen's friend, David became a good stepdad for his wife's daughter; Gretchen's daughter used called him "bonus father".
Although, in 2019, 4 years sinceafter their wedding day, their relationship appeared to be in crisis.
After seems more natural to me.
The troubles started because of David's unstable mental health, and his parents even considered that he had bipolar disorder.
However, he had never had any official diagnosis.
Gretchen was terrified of thatwhen her husband would talk sometimes about the end of the world.
Soon, the womanhe started to sleep with a knife under her pillow.
"the woman" sounds strange in this context. I might combine this with the previous sentence, as a stylistic choice. E.g. "He started to stockpile food and other stuff in his car, and she started to sleep with a knife under her pillow."
On the Christmas of 2019, David stole all of his wife's personal belongings, and stackshed them in his car.
That's was when the womaGretchen decided that it was time to end their relationship.
Same as earlier, where using "she" or "Gretchen" might make more sense.
Meanwhile, Gretchen continued to go to work, raise her daughter and go to that fitness club where she met her husband.
In the February of 2020, Gretchen filed for divorce because she was exhausted with their marriage.
But even after their break up, David kept visiting Gretchen's house, unwilling to let heris ex -wife go.
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July 28, 2023
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He started to stockpile food and other stuff in his car. |
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Soon, the woman started to sleep with a knife under her pillow. S "the woman" sounds strange in this context. I might combine this with the previous sentence, as a stylistic choice. E.g. "He started to stockpile food and other stuff in his car, and she started to sleep with a knife under her pillow." |
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At first, things were going smoothly. |
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According to Gretchen's friend, David became a good stepdad for his wife's daughter; Gretchen's daughter used called him "bonus father". This sentence has been marked as perfect! According to Gretchen's friend, David became a good stepdad for his wife's daughter; Gretchen's daughter used called him her "bonus father". |
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Although, in 2019, 4 years since their wedding day, their relationship appeared to be in crisis. Although, in 2019, 4 years After seems more natural to me. Although, in 2019, 4 years |
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Shortly, David was kicked out of Gretchen's house, so he began to live with his mother. Shortly after their relationship started to deteriorate, David was kicked out of Gretchen's house |
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The troubles started because of David's unstable mental health, his parents even considered that he had bipolar disorder. The troubles started because of David's unstable mental health, and his parents even considered that he had bipolar disorder. The |
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However, he had never had any official diagnosis. However, he had never had an |
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Gretchen was terrified of that her husband would talk sometimes about the end of the world. Gretchen was terrified Gretchen was terrified of |
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On the Christmas of 2019, David stole all his wife's personal belongings and stacked them in his car. On the Christmas of 2019, David stole all of his wife's personal belongings, and sta On the Christmas of 2019, David stole all his wife's personal belongings and |
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"I believe it would be safer to keep them here before the upcoming Armageddon", said David. |
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That's was when the woman decided that it was time to end their relationship. That's was when Same as earlier, where using "she" or "Gretchen" might make more sense. That |
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She began to feel unsafe with him; her husband denied any mental problems and refused to go to see a professional. |
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He believed that only sport could help him. He believed that only doing sports could help him. |
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Meanwhile, Gretchen continued to go to work, raise her daughter and go to that fitness club where she met her husband. This sentence has been marked as perfect! Meanwhile, Gretchen continued to go to work, raise her daughter, and go to that fitness club where she met her husband. |
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In the February of 2020, Gretchen filed for divorce because she was exhausted with their marriage. This sentence has been marked as perfect! In the February of 2020, Gretchen filed for divorce because |
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But even after their break up, David kept visiting Gretchen's house, unwilling to let her ex wife go. But even after their break up, David kept visiting Gretchen's house, unwilling to let h But even after their break up, David kept visiting Gretchen's house, unwilling to let h I'm assuming you're talking about David in "her ex wife" |
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