Aug. 2, 2021
Mountain Stream
When I was young, my family used to go to mountain streams during summer vacations.
My home was close to the mountains, so it was easy to go there.
My friends and I went the stream after school.
But I can't go any mountain streams because my new home is far away from the mountains where have good streams.
Moreover, I don't want to stock in heavy traffic which is occuring every weekend.
However, I need to try to go any places where my kids can get same memories as I did.
Mountain Streams
The title isn't wrong, but given that you refer later in the entry to "streams" plural, the new one makes more sense.
When I was young, my family used to go to mountain streams during summer vacations.
My home was close to the mountains, so it was easy to go there.
My friends and I went to the streams after school.
But I can't go to any mountain streams anymore, because my new home is far away from the mountains wherethat have good streams.
Moreover, I don't want to get stouck in the heavy traffic which isthat occurings every weekend.
However, I need to try to go any places where my kids can get the same memories as I didgot.
The "did" at the end sounded funny to me, but I couldn't really figure out why.
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Great Job! Just a few corrections!
Aug. 3, 2021
Thank you very much.
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Mountain Stream Mountain Streams The title isn't wrong, but given that you refer later in the entry to "streams" plural, the new one makes more sense. |
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When I was young, my family used to go to mountain streams during summer vacations. When I was young, my family used to go to mountain streams during summer vacation |
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My home was close to the mountains, so it was easy to go there. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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My friends and I went the stream after school. My friends and I went to the streams after school. |
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But I can't go any mountain streams because my new home is far away from the mountains where have good streams. But I can't go to any mountain streams anymore, because my new home is far away from the mountains |
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Moreover, I don't want to stock in heavy traffic which is occuring every weekend. Moreover, I don't want to get st |
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However, I need to try to go any places where my kids can get same memories as I did. However, I need to try to go The "did" at the end sounded funny to me, but I couldn't really figure out why. |
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