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April 14, 2024

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Mountain climbing refreshes my body and soul

After I retired last April, I put on nearly 6 kilos before I knew it. This is surely because I have been sedentary almost daily staying home. To keep fit, I got to take a walk but ended up just wandering aimlessly, bearing no fruit.

And so last Autumn, hoping to strengthen my legs, I made up my mind to go up to the local mountain that has a vast tangerine orchard. The mountain trail was so twisting and steep that while I was climbing my heart was racing faster almost hitting my throat.

That said when I looked back once reaching where the slope became gentle, Sagami Bay and the Miura peninsula came into view beyond a row of houses. The scenery was so refreshing. As I kept climbing the mountain every day, I came to exchange words with local people. Talking with frank "Mountain friends" invigorates me. Also, I get to find pleasure in thinking about who I can meet today on the mountain.

Thanks to the daily routine, I started to lose weight recently. I took my chance for my health and that introduced me to mountain climbing, which has kept me cheerful both mentally and physically.

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Mountain cClimbing rRefreshes mMy bBody and s& Soul

"&" is just a special character that means "and"

After I retired last April, I put on nearly 6 kilos before I knew it.

This is surely because I have been sedentary almost daily by staying home. all day.

To keep fit, I got to take atried to go out on walks, but since I ended up just wandering around aimlessly, bearingthey all bore no no fruit.

And so last Autumn, hoping to strengthen my legs, I made up my mind to go up to the local mountain that has a vast tangerine orchard.

The mountain trail was so twistinged and steep that while I was climbing, my heart was racing faster almost hitting my throat.

The scenery was so refreshing.

Talking with these frank "Mountain friends" invigoratesd me.

Also, I get to find pleasure in thinking about who I can meet today on the mountain.

Thanks to theis daily routine, I started to lose weight recently.

I took mya chance forto improve my health and that introduced me to mountain climbing, which has kept me cheerfulalhy both mentally and physically.

You can't apply an emotion like "cheerful" to physicality. It sounds a bit awkward, that way

Mountain climbing refreshes my body and soul

After I retired last April, before I knew it, I put on nearly 6 kilos before I knew it.

This is surely because I have been sedentary, staying home almost daily staying home.

To keep fit, I got up to take a walk but ended up just wandering aimlessly, bearing no fruit.

And so last Autumn, hoping to strengthen my legs, I made up my mind to go up to the local mountain that has a vast tangerine orchard.

The mountain trail was so twisting and steep that while I was climbing my heart was racing faster, almost hitting my throat.

That said, when I looked back once reaching where the slope became gentle, Sagami Bay and the Miura peninsula came into view beyond a row of houses.

The scenery was so refreshing.

As I kept climbing the mountain every day, I came to exchange words with local people.

Talking with frank "Mountain friends" invigorates me.

"frank" as in "honest"?

Also, I get to find pleasure in thinking about who I can meet today on the mountain.

Thanks to the daily routine, I started to lose weight recently.

I took my chance for my health and that introduced me to mountain climbing, which has kept me cheerful both mentally and physically.

The expression of "taking a chance" is like 機会を取る so I'm not sure what it means in this context?

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satota

April 15, 2024

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Thank you!

Mountain climbing refreshes my body and soul

After I retired last April, I put on nearly 6 kilos before I knew it.

It looks like you wanted to say that you were surprised in some way. With your sentence, I think it would be a little more clear using a different expression as a separate sentence. For example, "I was surprised." or "It happened so fast."

This is surely because I have been sedentary almost daily staying at home.

To keep fit, I gothave to take a walks but ended up just wandering aimlessly, bearing no fruit.

And so last Autumn, hoping to strengthen my legs, I made up my mind to go up to the local mountain that has a vast tangerine orchard.

The mountain trail was so twisting and steep that while I was climbing my heart was racing faster almost hitting my throat.

I am not familiar with this phrase about my heart hitting my throat. I think the phrase you are looking for is "...it felt like it was going to beat out of my chest".

That said when I looked back once reaching where the slope became gentle, Sagami Bay and the Miura peninsula came into view beyond a row of houses.

The scenery was so refreshing.

As I kept climbing the mountain every day, I came to exchange words with local people.

Talking with frank "Mountain friends" invigorates me.

I am a little confused with the word "frank" here.

Also, I get to find pleasure in thinking about who I can meet today on the mountain.

Thanks to the daily routine, I started to lose weight recently.

I took my chance for my health and that introduced me toFor my health, I decided to start mountain climbing, which has kept me cheerful both mentally and physically.

"to take a chance" in English is quite weird. I think we would use it when there is only a limited time to act on something.

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Lovely story. Makes me want to go climbing!

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satota

April 15, 2024

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Thank you!

Mountain cClimbing rRefreshes mMy bBody and sSoul

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After I retired last April, I put on nearly 6 kilos before I knew it.

This is surely because I have been sedentary almost daily while staying at home.

To keep fit, I got to takehave to / must take a walk / go for a walk but ended up just wandering aimlessly, bearing no fruitwith no results.

'Bearing no fruit' doesn't really fit naturally into this context.

And so last Autumn, hoping to strengthen my legs, I made up my mind to go up to the local mountain that has a vast tangerine orchard.

The mountain trail twisted so much and was so steep / was so twistingy and steep that while I was climbing, my heart was racingraced faster, almost hitting my throat.

That said, when I looked back once reaching where the slope became gentle, Sagami Bay and the Miura peninsula came into view beyond a row of houses.

The scenery was so refreshing.

As I kept climbing the mountain every day, I came to exchange words with local people.

Talking with frank/ conversing with these honest / down to earth "Mmountain friends" invigorates me.

'Frank' is not often used in this context, but wouldn't necessarily be completely wrong.

Also, I get to find pleasure in thinking about who I can meet today on the mountain.

Thanks to the daily routine, I started to lose weight recently.

I took my chance for my health and that introduced me to mountain climbing, which has kept me cheerful both mentally and physically.

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A lovely story.

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satota

April 15, 2024

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Thank you!

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Mountain climbing refreshes my body and soul

After I retired last April, I put on nearly 6 kilos before I knew it.

This is surely because I have been sedentary almost daily staying, at home.

To keep fit, I got to take atook walks but ended up just wandering aimlessly, bearing no fruit.

And sSo last Autumn, hoping to strengthen my legs, I made up my mind to go up to the local mountain that has a vast tangerine orchard.

The mountain trail was so twistinga labyrinth and so steep that while I was climbing my heart was racing faster, almost hitting my throat.

That said when I looked back once reaching where the slope became gentle, Sagami Bay and the Miura peninsula came into view beyond a row of houses.

The scenery was so refreshing.

As I kept climbing the mountain every day, I came to exchanged some words with the local people.

Talking with frankhonest "Mountain friends" invigorates me.

Also, I get to find pleasure in thinking about who I can meet today on the mountain.

Thanks to the daily routine, I started to lose weight recently.

I took mya chance for my health and that introduced me to mountain climbing, which has kept me cheerful both mentally and physically.

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As I kept climbing the mountain every day, I came to exchange words with local people.


As I kept climbing the mountain every day, I came to exchanged some words with the local people.

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Mountain climbing refreshes my body and soul


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Mountain cClimbing rRefreshes mMy bBody and sSoul

Capital letters in titles

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Mountain cClimbing rRefreshes mMy bBody and s& Soul

"&" is just a special character that means "and"

After I retired last April, I put on nearly 6 kilos before I knew it.


After I retired last April, I put on nearly 6 kilos before I knew it.

This sentence has been marked as perfect!

After I retired last April, I put on nearly 6 kilos before I knew it.

It looks like you wanted to say that you were surprised in some way. With your sentence, I think it would be a little more clear using a different expression as a separate sentence. For example, "I was surprised." or "It happened so fast."

After I retired last April, before I knew it, I put on nearly 6 kilos before I knew it.

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This is surely because I have been sedentary almost daily staying home.


This is surely because I have been sedentary almost daily staying, at home.

This is surely because I have been sedentary almost daily while staying at home.

This is surely because I have been sedentary almost daily staying at home.

This is surely because I have been sedentary, staying home almost daily staying home.

This is surely because I have been sedentary almost daily by staying home. all day.

To keep fit, I got to take a walk but ended up just wandering aimlessly, bearing no fruit.


To keep fit, I got to take atook walks but ended up just wandering aimlessly, bearing no fruit.

To keep fit, I got to takehave to / must take a walk / go for a walk but ended up just wandering aimlessly, bearing no fruitwith no results.

'Bearing no fruit' doesn't really fit naturally into this context.

To keep fit, I gothave to take a walks but ended up just wandering aimlessly, bearing no fruit.

To keep fit, I got up to take a walk but ended up just wandering aimlessly, bearing no fruit.

To keep fit, I got to take atried to go out on walks, but since I ended up just wandering around aimlessly, bearingthey all bore no no fruit.

And so last Autumn, hoping to strengthen my legs, I made up my mind to go up to the local mountain that has a vast tangerine orchard.


And sSo last Autumn, hoping to strengthen my legs, I made up my mind to go up to the local mountain that has a vast tangerine orchard.

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The mountain trail was so twisting and steep that while I was climbing my heart was racing faster almost hitting my throat.


The mountain trail twisted so much and was so steep / was so twistingy and steep that while I was climbing, my heart was racingraced faster, almost hitting my throat.

The mountain trail was so twistinga labyrinth and so steep that while I was climbing my heart was racing faster, almost hitting my throat.

The mountain trail was so twisting and steep that while I was climbing my heart was racing faster almost hitting my throat.

I am not familiar with this phrase about my heart hitting my throat. I think the phrase you are looking for is "...it felt like it was going to beat out of my chest".

The mountain trail was so twisting and steep that while I was climbing my heart was racing faster, almost hitting my throat.

The mountain trail was so twistinged and steep that while I was climbing, my heart was racing faster almost hitting my throat.

That said when I looked back once reaching where the slope became gentle, Sagami Bay and the Miura peninsula came into view beyond a row of houses.


That said, when I looked back once reaching where the slope became gentle, Sagami Bay and the Miura peninsula came into view beyond a row of houses.

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That said, when I looked back once reaching where the slope became gentle, Sagami Bay and the Miura peninsula came into view beyond a row of houses.

The scenery was so refreshing.


This sentence has been marked as perfect!

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Talking with frank "Mountain friends" invigorates me.


Talking with frankhonest "Mountain friends" invigorates me.

Talking with frank/ conversing with these honest / down to earth "Mmountain friends" invigorates me.

'Frank' is not often used in this context, but wouldn't necessarily be completely wrong.

Talking with frank "Mountain friends" invigorates me.

I am a little confused with the word "frank" here.

Talking with frank "Mountain friends" invigorates me.

"frank" as in "honest"?

Talking with these frank "Mountain friends" invigoratesd me.

Also, I get to find pleasure in thinking about who I can meet today on the mountain.


This sentence has been marked as perfect!

This sentence has been marked as perfect!

This sentence has been marked as perfect!

Also, I get to find pleasure in thinking about who I can meet today on the mountain.

This sentence has been marked as perfect!

Thanks to the daily routine, I started to lose weight recently.


Thanks to the daily routine, I started to lose weight recently.

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This sentence has been marked as perfect!

Thanks to theis daily routine, I started to lose weight recently.

I took my chance for my health and that introduced me to mountain climbing, which has kept me cheerful both mentally and physically.


I took mya chance for my health and that introduced me to mountain climbing, which has kept me cheerful both mentally and physically.

This sentence has been marked as perfect!

I took my chance for my health and that introduced me toFor my health, I decided to start mountain climbing, which has kept me cheerful both mentally and physically.

"to take a chance" in English is quite weird. I think we would use it when there is only a limited time to act on something.

I took my chance for my health and that introduced me to mountain climbing, which has kept me cheerful both mentally and physically.

The expression of "taking a chance" is like 機会を取る so I'm not sure what it means in this context?

I took mya chance forto improve my health and that introduced me to mountain climbing, which has kept me cheerfulalhy both mentally and physically.

You can't apply an emotion like "cheerful" to physicality. It sounds a bit awkward, that way

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