Nov. 8, 2019
It's already November and the mosquitoes are surprisingly still around.
There was one in my room which woke me up in the middle of the night. I couldn't go back to sleep thus I'm writing this to pass time.
I pity them because every single meal is a live or die situation for them. You'd either get slapped and killed or be unnoticed and get away.
I left my door open for a bit and now they seem to be gone.
Live a good life, mosquito!
You'dThey either get slapped and killed or be unnoticed and get away.
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You can use the second person I guess, but it's gives off the impression of a more literary style, as if you were talking directly to the mosquito. I think it's a cool style though!
Mosquitoes in winter
It's already November, and the(yet) mosquitoes are surprisingly still around.
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There was one in my room, which woke me up in the middle of the night.
Live a good life, mosquito!
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Wishing you some mosquito-free nights!
Mosquitoes in winter
It's already November and the mosquitoes are surprisingly still around.
There was one in my room which woke me up in the middle of the night.
I couldn't go back to sleep thusso instead, I'm writing this to pass (the) time.
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"thus" feels kind of weird here, maybe it's just to me but it sounds more natural to say "so" or "so instead". "the" is optional, again just makes it sound more natural to me
I pity them because every single meal is a livfe or dieath situation for them.
Sounds more natural
You'dThey either get slappwatted and killed or be unnoticed and getfly away.
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You swat a fly or bug. slapping sounds odd here and "get away" feels like something is attacking them, if they were unnoticed they wouldn't be attacked so simply just saying "fly away" is fine
I left my door open for a bit and now ithey seems to be gone.
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In this sentence, you're referring to the one mosquito from earlier. "They seem" could also be taken as singular but only when you don't know the gender of a person, you just use "it" as a pronoun for animals. Using "they" as a pronoun for a mosquito feels a little like you're personifying it.
Live a good life, mosquito!
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I just looked at this from a "how natural it sounds" standpoint, If you were going for a certain style then some of the corrections might not apply :) Cool text though!
Mosquitoes in winter
It's already November and the mosquitoes are surprisingly still around.
There was one in my room which woke me up in the middle of the night.
I couldn't go back to sleep and thus I'm writing this to pass time.
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I pity them because every single meal is a live or die situation for them.
You'd either get slapped and killed or be unnoticed and get away.
I left my door open for a bit and now they seem to be gone.
Live a good life, mosquito!
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Aww cute
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You swat a fly or bug. slapping sounds odd here and "get away" feels like something is attacking them, if they were unnoticed they wouldn't be attacked so simply just saying "fly away" is fine
You can use the second person I guess, but it's gives off the impression of a more literary style, as if you were talking directly to the mosquito. I think it's a cool style though! |
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