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kiwy

Dec. 21, 2021

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I started to play jazz drums 2 years ago. Recently, I practice the song 'Numb' a lot. Its bpm is 110, which is quite fast. Its rythm isn't complicated, so it isn't hard to play. I practice it a lot, so that I can play it without music score. What I want to reach is that I can play it by my heart, in other words, I can really enjoy it, become a part of it. By now, when I play the song, I always feel relieve at the beginning. For the reason, when I feel bad, I always practice the song. After playing it half an hour later, I will feel irritable. Maybe because it is too noisy for continuing listening for thirty minutes. Then I will change a lively song like 'Yellow' to makes me feel good again.
It seems that I play drums isn't because of love of music, but the need of mood ventilation.

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After playing it half an hour later, I will feel half hour into playing the song, I start to get irritable.

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kiwy

Dec. 23, 2021

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Thanks~

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I started to playing jazz drums 2 years ago.

Recently, I've been practiceing the song 'Numb' a lot.

It's bpm is 110played at 110 bpm, which is quite fast.

ItsThe rhythm isn't complicated, so it isn't hard to play.

I practice it a lot, so that I can eventually play it without musicthe score sheet.

What I want to reach is thatthe level where I can play it by my heart,; in other words, where I can really enjoy it, become a part of it.

By now, when I play the song, I always feel relieve atd in the beginning.

Relaxed可能更合适

For the reason, when I feel bad, I always practice theis song.

After playing it half an hour lafter, I will feel I play it, I will start to get irritable.

Maybe because it is too noisy forto continuinge listening to for thirty minutes straight.

Then, I will change to a lively song like 'Yellow' to makes meyself feel good again.

It seems that I play drums isn't becausenot out of a love of music, but rather the need of mood ventilationto blow off steam.

如果用“不是因为…”就要说“什么什么的原因不是因为…”

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Nice work

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kiwy

Dec. 23, 2021

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Thanks~

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kiwy

Dec. 23, 2021

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Recently, I've been practiceing the song 'Numb' a lot.

when should I use the ‘have been doing'? I am quite confused of it.

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sivanc

Dec. 24, 2021

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I think it's called the present participle, it's used to express continuity. 最近我练习了这首歌 vs. 最近我练习这首歌了

Recently, I've practiced/I've been practicing the song 'Numb' a lot.

I've practiced or I've been practicing works better than the present tense here, as it flows more naturally :)

Its rhythm isn't complicated, so it isn't hard to play.

Spelling of rhythm was incorrect. A common way for English people to remember the spelling of this word is: 'Run Home Your Teacher Has Measles' (R-H-Y-T-H-M)

What I want to reach is that I can play it by my heart, or in other words, I can really enjoy it, and become a part of it.

For theis reason, when I feel bad, I always practice the song.

After playing it for half an hour later, I will begin to feel irritable.

This helps the sentence to flow a bit better :D

Maybe because it is too noisy for continuing listenito keep listening to this song for thirty minutes.

Then I will change to a lively song like 'Yellow' to- this makes me feel good again.

It seems that I play the drums isn'not because of a love of music, but instead the need of a mood ventilation.ve improvement.

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Hey this was really good! It was really well written and enjoyable. The main corrections that I made were to give this a better flow, but all in all, this is very good!

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kiwy

Dec. 23, 2021

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Thank you very much!

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I started to play jazz drums 2 years ago.


I started to playing jazz drums 2 years ago.

Recently, I practice the song 'Numb' a lot.


Recently, I've practiced/I've been practicing the song 'Numb' a lot.

I've practiced or I've been practicing works better than the present tense here, as it flows more naturally :)

Recently, I've been practiceing the song 'Numb' a lot.

Its bpm is 110, which is quite fast.


It's bpm is 110played at 110 bpm, which is quite fast.

Its rythm isn't complicated, so it isn't hard to play.


Its rhythm isn't complicated, so it isn't hard to play.

Spelling of rhythm was incorrect. A common way for English people to remember the spelling of this word is: 'Run Home Your Teacher Has Measles' (R-H-Y-T-H-M)

ItsThe rhythm isn't complicated, so it isn't hard to play.

I practice it a lot, so that I can play it without music score.


I practice it a lot, so that I can eventually play it without musicthe score sheet.

What I want to reach is that I can play it by my heart, in other words, I can really enjoy it, become a part of it.


What I want to reach is that I can play it by my heart, or in other words, I can really enjoy it, and become a part of it.

What I want to reach is thatthe level where I can play it by my heart,; in other words, where I can really enjoy it, become a part of it.

By now, when I play the song, I always feel relieve at the beginning.


By now, when I play the song, I always feel relieve atd in the beginning.

Relaxed可能更合适

For the reason, when I feel bad, I always practice the song.


For theis reason, when I feel bad, I always practice the song.

For the reason, when I feel bad, I always practice theis song.

After playing it half an hour later, I will feel irritable.


After playing it for half an hour later, I will begin to feel irritable.

This helps the sentence to flow a bit better :D

After playing it half an hour lafter, I will feel I play it, I will start to get irritable.

After playing it half an hour later, I will feel half hour into playing the song, I start to get irritable.

Maybe because it is too noisy for continuing listening for thirty minutes.


Maybe because it is too noisy for continuing listenito keep listening to this song for thirty minutes.

Maybe because it is too noisy forto continuinge listening to for thirty minutes straight.

Then I will change a lively song like 'Yellow' to makes me feel good again.


Then I will change to a lively song like 'Yellow' to- this makes me feel good again.

Then, I will change to a lively song like 'Yellow' to makes meyself feel good again.

It seems that I play drums isn't because of love of music, but the need of mood ventilation.


It seems that I play the drums isn'not because of a love of music, but instead the need of a mood ventilation.ve improvement.

It seems that I play drums isn't becausenot out of a love of music, but rather the need of mood ventilationto blow off steam.

如果用“不是因为…”就要说“什么什么的原因不是因为…”

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