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The second part of the visit, it was three sake breweries.

They are located not far away from where I live, I recently knew itlearned.

Participating in this tour was good since the tour bus was already arranged so I did not have to worry about driving after tasting sake.

Now is the season ofor new production of sake so they were busy.

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TOn (During) the second part of the visit, it wasthere were three sake breweries.

You want "was" to be in the past tense = "were"

They are located not too far away from where I live, which I recently knew ifound out.

If you recently learned something then it's something you "found out/discovered".

We would use "knew it" for something you already knew. For example, "I already knew where the breweries were located"

Participating in this tour was good sincbecause the tour bus was arranged, so I did not have to worry about driving after tasting the sake.

Now is the season of new production season of sake, so they were busy.

Changed to make the sentence more natural. We typically refer to this as a "production season"

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TOn the second part of the visit, it waswe visited three sSake breweries.

Grammar

They are located not far away from where I live, I recently knewfound out about it.

Cool!

Participating in this tour was good since the tour bus was arranged so I did non't have to worry about driving after tasting sake.

Corrected word order.

Although we could non't enter the production site, we could taste several cups of sSake.

Nice!

NowThey were busy because it is the season of newSake production of sake so they were busy.

Good vocabulary, grammar is incorrect.

I appreciated that I couldan purchase the sSake that wais exclusively available in these breweries.

Past tense is awkward here.