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michiru

Nov. 5, 2024

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Moms of the world  Part 1

In August, rice suddenly disappeared at supermarkets.
I dashed to the supermarket nearby after watching the news about lack of rice.
When I saw a few packs of rice, I thought I was lucky, and I stretched my hand to take one, then a family was coming toward me.
I saw two little kids in the middle of growing, and I pulled my hand back.
I bought only vegetable and came home.
How do I live without rice? While I was thinking so, I was watching YouTube.
Then, I found a video that an European woman cooked pasta.


8月、突然スーパーから米が消えた。
米不足のニュースを見て、駆け足でスーパーに行ったら、まだ米が2、3パックあったので、ラッキーと思い手を伸ばそうとしたら、小さな子供を2人連れた家族がやってきた。
育ち盛りの子供を見て、笑いは手を引っ込めて野菜だけを買って帰った。
お米なしでどうしたもんかと考えながらYouTubeを見ていると、あるヨーロッパ人の女性がパスタを作るビデオを見つけた。

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In August, rice suddenly disappeared atfrom supermarkets.

I dashed to the supermarket nearby after watching the news about the lack of rice.

instead of 'the lack of rice', you could also say 'the rice shortage'

When I saw a few packbags of rice, I thought I was lucky, and. I stretched out my hand to take one, but then I saw a family was coming toward me.

This sentence was quite long, so I split it into two sentences.

I saw two little kids in the middle of growinggrowing children, and I pulled my hand back.

I bought only vegetables and came home.

How dowill I live without rice?

Since you are thinking about the future, you should use 'will'.

While I was thinking thiso, I was watching YouTube.

Then, I found a video thatof an European woman cookeding pasta.

You could also say 'I found a video that said European women cooked pasta'

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michiru

Nov. 7, 2024

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Thank you very much for the correction and the advice. They are very helpful!

Moms of the world  Part 1

In August, rice suddenly disappeared atfrom the supermarkets.

I dashed to the supermarket nearby after watching the news about the lack of rice.

When I saw a few packs of rice left, I thought I was lucky, and I stretached my handout to take one,. But then I saw a family was coming toward me.

I saw two little kids in the middle of growing, and I pulled my hand back. They needed the rice more than I did because they are still growing.

I bought only vegetables and came home.

If it's only one vegetable, though, we usually say what it is, e.g., "I just bought a cabbage/zucchini/beetroot"

How do I live without rice?

While I was thinking sothis thought, I was watching YouTube.

Then, I found a video thaabout an European woman cookeding pasta.

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michiru

Nov. 7, 2024

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Thank you very much for the correction and the advice. They are very helpful!

In August, rice suddenly disappeared atfrom the supermarket shelves.

Or:
In August, it was suddenly impossible to buy rice at the supermarkets.

I dashed to the supermarket nearby after watching the news about lacknd hearing about the shortage of rice.

When I saw a few packs of rice, I thought I was lucky, and. As I stretched out my hand to take one, thenI noticed a family suddenly was coming towards me.

I saw two little kids in the middle of growing, and I pulled my hand back.small children and I pulled my hand back; it didn't feel right to take the last of the rice from from growing children.

I only bought onlysome vegetables and came home.

How do I live without rice?

While I was thinking about thiso, I was watching YouTube.

Or:
I was watching YouTube as I was thinking about this.

Then, I found a video thaabout an European woman cookedwho made (fresh) pasta.

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michiru

Nov. 7, 2024

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Thank you very much for the corrections and the paraphrases. I can learn a lot.

Then, I found a video that an European woman cooked pasta.


Then, I found a video thaabout an European woman cookedwho made (fresh) pasta.

Then, I found a video thaabout an European woman cookeding pasta.

Then, I found a video thatof an European woman cookeding pasta.

You could also say 'I found a video that said European women cooked pasta'

I dashed to the supermarket nearby after watching the news about lack of rice.


I dashed to the supermarket nearby after watching the news about lacknd hearing about the shortage of rice.

I dashed to the supermarket nearby after watching the news about the lack of rice.

I dashed to the supermarket nearby after watching the news about the lack of rice.

instead of 'the lack of rice', you could also say 'the rice shortage'

When I saw a few packs of rice, I thought I was lucky, and I stretched my hand to take one, then a family was coming toward me.


When I saw a few packs of rice, I thought I was lucky, and. As I stretched out my hand to take one, thenI noticed a family suddenly was coming towards me.

When I saw a few packs of rice left, I thought I was lucky, and I stretached my handout to take one,. But then I saw a family was coming toward me.

When I saw a few packbags of rice, I thought I was lucky, and. I stretched out my hand to take one, but then I saw a family was coming toward me.

This sentence was quite long, so I split it into two sentences.

I saw two little kids in the middle of growing, and I pulled my hand back.


I saw two little kids in the middle of growing, and I pulled my hand back.small children and I pulled my hand back; it didn't feel right to take the last of the rice from from growing children.

I saw two little kids in the middle of growing, and I pulled my hand back. They needed the rice more than I did because they are still growing.

I saw two little kids in the middle of growinggrowing children, and I pulled my hand back.

I bought only vegetable and came home.


I only bought onlysome vegetables and came home.

I bought only vegetables and came home.

If it's only one vegetable, though, we usually say what it is, e.g., "I just bought a cabbage/zucchini/beetroot"

I bought only vegetables and came home.

How do I live without rice?


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This sentence has been marked as perfect!

How dowill I live without rice?

Since you are thinking about the future, you should use 'will'.

While I was thinking so, I was watching YouTube.


While I was thinking about thiso, I was watching YouTube.

Or: I was watching YouTube as I was thinking about this.

While I was thinking sothis thought, I was watching YouTube.

While I was thinking thiso, I was watching YouTube.

Moms of the world  Part 1


This sentence has been marked as perfect!

In August, rice suddenly disappeared at supermarkets.


In August, rice suddenly disappeared atfrom the supermarket shelves.

Or: In August, it was suddenly impossible to buy rice at the supermarkets.

In August, rice suddenly disappeared atfrom the supermarkets.

In August, rice suddenly disappeared atfrom supermarkets.

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