An eEssay An Essay

In English, all nouns, verbs, adverbs, adjectives, pronouns, etc., are capitalized in a title.

According to the letter, the women suggests that the school should set up a snack shop which is operated totally by studentsthat is completely student-operated. According to the letter, the women suggests that the school should set up a snack shop that is completely student-operated.

Your subject of “The letter” and “the women” is vague if the reader doesn’t have any context so I can’t know whether the top part is correct or not.

This e women suggested this because it canould offer a lot of job opportunities and convenience to students. The women suggested this because it could offer a lot of job opportunities and convenience to students.

The man supports this change. The man supports this change.

This is grammatically correct but once again quite vague.

To begin with, he points out that such a student-run snack shop canould provide students withe useful job experiences, which can train the students’ business abilityies. To begin with, he points out that such a snack shop could provide students with useful job experiences, which can train students’ business abilities.

“Student-run” is unnecessary here because it’s already implied.

Moreover, he argues that it canwould be more convenient for students, as eating in the cafeteria of school needed tocan take a long time. Moreover, he argues that it would be more convenient for students, as eating in the cafeteria can take a long time.

“The school” is unneeded here.

And althougheven if one has a car, it can take a half of an hour should be taken for a shopping in theto shop in town. And even if one has a car, it can take a half of an hour to shop in town.

Not to mention the students who don’t have a car. Not to mention the students who don’t have a car.

Another way to put this would be, “Not to mention the students who don’t have cars”.

TheA snack shop on campus willould be convenient, and the time saved canllowing more time to be usaved for studying. A snack shop on campus would be convenient, allowing more time to be saved for studying.

I’m using the conditional tense here because you’ve alluded throughout your essay of the possibility of a snack shop, and not the certainty of it coming into existence.