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My Brother's lLife My Brother's Life

Remember to capitalize every letter in a title (except for little words, like "the" or "in).

He was born in St-aint Bartheélemy, a fFrench island in the Carribbean Sea. He was born in Saint Barthélemy, a French island in the Caribbean Sea.

It looks like they fully spell out "Saint" in the official English name, so let's do that here, at least for the first time it's mentioned.

HeMy brother was born in St-Barthelemy, a fFrench island in Carribean. My brother was born in St-Barthelemy, a French island in Carribean.

I changed the subject to "my brother". Even though we know you're talking about your brother based on the title, it's more natural to start the first sentence of a story by clarifying who you're talking about.

He was one of the last newborn s there, because the maternity ward closed down after that. He was one of the last newborns there, because the maternity ward closed down after that.

He was one of the last newborns here, because the maternity ward closed after that. He was one of the last newborns here, because the maternity ward closed after that.

"Newborn" should be plural since there are many, so I switched it to "newborns". We call it a "maternity ward".

We don't have the same father, so w. When he was fourteen years old, he went definitely in St-Barth with his father to St. Barths. We don't have the same father. When he was fourteen years old, he went with his father to St. Barths.

Using the abbreviated form is okay at this point, because we used the full form in the first sentence.

WeMy brother and I don't have the same father, so when he was fourteen years old, he went definitelyto live in St-Barth with his father. My brother and I don't have the same father, so when he was fourteen years old, he went to live in St-Barth with his father.

"We" is a big vague so I just clarified with "My brother and I" instead. Just changed "he went definitely in" to "he went to live in". This is more specific to what he was doing.

After that, he worked on the island, like as a barman and a waiter. After that, he worked on the island as a barman and a waiter.

After that, he worked on the island, like as a barman and waiter. After that, he worked on the island as a barman and waiter.

"Like" would mean that he did a job that was similar to barman and waiter. "As" means that he was a barman and waiter.

She was a customer who was also French, but resided in Florida, but she was french. She was a customer who was also French, but resided in Florida.

She was a customer who residelived in Florida, but she was fFrench. She was a customer who lived in Florida, but she was French.

"Lived" is a bit more natural. Remember to capitalize proper nouns like "French".

After encountering a lot of obstacles to staying in the U.S.A., he decided to marry with her. After encountering a lot of obstacles to staying in the U.S.A., he decided to marry her.

After a lot of obstacles to stay in U.S.A, he decided to marry with her. After a lot of obstacles to stay in U.S.A, he decided to marry her.

We just say "to marry her" not "to marry with her".

It wasThey had a beautiful mariagewedding, because the family of this wife iwas really wealthy. They had a beautiful wedding, because the family of his wife was really wealthy.

If I'm guessing what you intended to write correctly, this is a nicer rephrasing.

It was a beautiful marriage, because the family of this wife is really wealthy. It was a beautiful marriage because the family of his wife is really wealthy.

"Marriage" is spelled with two r's.

(fFor exeample, the aunt, who was the richest in their family, haved a movie theater on her house and a helicopter on ther garden.) (For example, the aunt, who was the richest in their family, had a movie theater on her house and a helicopter on her garden.)

(fFor exeample, the aunt, who is the richest, haves a movie theater oin her house and a helicopter oin the garden). (For example, the aunt, who is the richest, has a movie theater in her house and a helicopter in the garden).

Just a minor spelling error. I see you're using some of the French spellings (exemple vs example). Tricky because the words are so similar! Your sentence refers to the aunt, so your verb here should be singular - "the aunt has" instead of "the aunt have".

Actually, mMy brother dwellnow lives on a pretty house in Florida with his two sons and he work in. He now works at the Four Seasons hHotel. My brother now lives on a pretty house in Florida with his two sons. He now works at the Four Seasons Hotel.

ActuallyNow, my brother dwell olives in a pretty house in Florida with his two sons, and he works in the Four Seasons hotel. Now, my brother lives in a pretty house in Florida with his two sons, and he works in the Four Seasons hotel.

"Now" would fit better here because you're referencing his current life. "Lives" is more natural than "dwells" here. The subject of your sentence is "he" so make sure you match the right verb conjugation: "he lives" and "he works" instead of "he live" and "he work".