Sept. 12, 2023
Memory
When I was in a technical secondary school, I had several practical lessons. One was done in the capital of Anhui Province, Hefei.
The work unit I practiced in was Jianghuai tractor factory. Near it was Hefei agricultural mechanization school, which was located on a big street named West Changjiang Road.
Every time after I had done a practical lesson in the factory, I liked to go to the school. The entrance of the school was on the south of West Changjiang Road and there were a few pedlars at the entrance of the school.
One of the pedlars sold noodles. She only had a stall and a few basic stuff. Her noodles looked very simple, yet I think it was super delicious.
I remember that when she made noodles, she heated water in a pot, and put noodles into the water when it was boiling. One or two minutes later, she took the noodles and the water into a bowl.
Then, she took a spoon of a kind of sauce into the bowl, and put a spoon of chopped green onion on the top of the noodles.
When I ate the noodles, I stirred the ingredients first. The smell of the noodle soup was very different from the one in my hometown, and the green onions were very slender.
I ate the noodles several times during that period. I specifically like the noodles' smell and the chopped thin green onions.
Twenty years later, I went to Hefei many times. I went to the entrance of that school to try to find the pedlar and eat her noodles again, but I couldn't see any pedlars there. I also can't find that kind of noodles in any place in Hefei nowadays.
Memory
When I was in a technical secondary school, I had several practical lessons.
One of them was done in the capital of Anhui Province, Hefei.
The work unit I practiced in was Jianghuai tractor factory.
Near itby was Hefei agricultural mechanization school, which was located on a big street named West Changjiang Road.
Every time after I had done a practical lesson in the factory, I liked to go to the school afterwards.
The entrance of the school was on the south of West Changjiang Road and there were a few pedlars at the entrance of the school.
One of the pedlars sold noodles.
She only had a stall and a few basic stuffthings.
Also, acceptable: a few basic items, a few basic materials, a few basic products, a few basic types of noodles.
If you would like to write ''stuff'', you can write ''She only had a stall with some basic stuff''
Her noodles looked very simple, yet I thinkought it was super delicious.
I remember that when she made noodles, she heated water in a pot, and put noodles into the water when it was boiling.
One or two minutes later, she tookplaced the noodles and the water into a bowl.
A different more simple version: ''She put the noodles and water into a bowl.''
Then, she tookadded (/placed /put) a spoon of a kind of sauce into the bowl, and put a spoon of chopped green onion on the top of the noodles.
''and put a spoon of chopped green onion on the top of the noodles.'' was okay grammar, but sounded strange with the extra 'the''
When I ateBefore eating the noodles, I would stirred the ingredients first.
The smell of the noodle soup was very different from the one in my hometown, and the green onions were very slender.
I ate those noodles several times during that period.
I specifically like the noodles' smell and the thinly chopped thin, green onions.
Twenty years later, I went to Hefei many times.
I went to the entrance of that school to try to find the pedlar and eat her noodles again, but I couldn't see any pedlars there.
I also can't find that kind of noodles in any placanywhere in Hefei nowadays.
Feedback
Nice work! Pedlar is not a word used commonly in English, I would try some alternatives if you get a chance.
Sept. 12, 2023
Thank you very much.
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The smell of the noodle soup was very different from the one in my hometown, and the green onions were very slender. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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When I was in a technical secondary school, I had several practical lessons. When I was in |
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One was done in the capital of Anhui Province, Hefei. One of them was done in the capital of Anhui Province, Hefei. |
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The work unit I practiced in was Jianghuai tractor factory. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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Near it was Hefei agricultural mechanization school, which was located on a big street named West Changjiang Road. Near |
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Every time after I had done a practical lesson in the factory, I liked to go to the school. Every time |
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The entrance of the school was on the south of West Changjiang Road and there were a few pedlars at the entrance of the school. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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One of the pedlars sold noodles. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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She only had a stall and a few basic stuff. She only had a stall and a few basic Also, acceptable: a few basic items, a few basic materials, a few basic products, a few basic types of noodles. If you would like to write ''stuff'', you can write ''She only had a stall with some basic stuff'' |
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Her noodles looked very simple, yet I think it was super delicious. Her noodles looked very simple, yet I th |
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I remember that when she made noodles, she heated water in a pot, and put noodles into the water when it was boiling. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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One or two minutes later, she took the noodles and the water into a bowl. One or two minutes later, she A different more simple version: ''She put the noodles and water into a bowl.'' |
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Then, she took a spoon of a kind of sauce into the bowl, and put a spoon of chopped green onion on the top of the noodles. Then, she ''and put a spoon of chopped green onion on the top of the noodles.'' was okay grammar, but sounded strange with the extra 'the'' |
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When I ate the noodles, I stirred the ingredients first.
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I ate the noodles several times during that period. I ate those noodles several times during that period. |
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I specifically like the noodles' smell and the chopped thin green onions. I specifically like the noodles' smell and the thinly chopped |
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Twenty years later, I went to Hefei many times. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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I went to the entrance of that school to try to find the pedlar and eat her noodles again, but I couldn't see any pedlars there. I went to the entrance of that school to |
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I also can't find that kind of noodles in any place in Hefei nowadays. I also can't find that kind of noodles |
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