June 21, 2024
Memories
It hasn't rained for a long time. Crops are almost dying. Fortunately, it rained today. It's heavy rain and will continue raining until 7:30 pm tonight, so that farmers can stop combating the drought.
The heavy rain reminds me of a flood in my village in my childhood. My village and our farmland were all covered in the flood. We couldn't see any pieces of the ground. When we went in or out of our village, we had to look at the trees to locate the only entrance to our village.
At that time, we were treated as refugees. The government allocated us clothes and rice.
It was the first time I had a chance to eat rice. I never ate rice before as my area doesn't grow rice.
The way we ate rice was this: at night, my mother put a certain amount of rice into a vacuum pot first, and then poured boiling water into it and turned the lid on tightly.
When we woke up the next morning, the rice porridge was well cooked. I think the porridge cooked this way is really delicious.
I also thought of the kind of shoes that we often wore during rainy days back then. When it was rainy days, the ground was really muddy, but we couldn't afford to buy a pair of rain-proof shoes in the supply and marketing cooperatives in the local town.
Therefore, each family would have a few rainproof wooden shoes made by carpenters. The shoes were very simple and only made of a few wooden sticks. When you wore them, they kept your feet off the ground for at least ten centimeters, so the muddy ground wouldn't dirt your shoes and feet.
Time flies, decades of years have passed in the blink of an eye. All of these things are only memories now.
Memories
It hasn't rained for a long time.
Crops are almost dying.
Fortunately, it rained today.
It's heavy rain and it will continue raining until 7:30 pm tonight, so that farmers can stop combating the drought.
'so that' is used for providing reasons for an action, 'so' is used more like 'therefore'
The heavy rain reminds me of a flood in my village in my childhood.
My village and our farmland were all covered in the flooded.
We couldn't see any pieces of the ground.
When we went in or out of our village, we had to look at the trees to locate the only entrance to our village.
At that time, we were treated as refugees.
The government allocated us clothes and rice.
It was the first time I had a chance to eat rice.
I had never eaten rice before as my area doesn't grow rice.
The way we ate rice was this: at night, my mother put a certain amount of rice into a vacuum pot first, and then poured boiling water into it and turnedput the lid on tightly.
When we woke up the next morning, the rice porridge was well cooked.
I think the porridge cooked this way is really delicious.
I also thought of the kind of shoes that we often wore during rainy days back then.
When it was rainy daysing, the ground was really muddy, but we couldn't afford to buy a pair of rain-proof shoes in the supply and marketing cooperatives in the local town.
Therefore, each family would have a few rainproof wooden shoes made by carpenters.
The shoes were very simple and only made of a few wooden sticks.
When you wore them, they kept your feet off the ground for at least ten centimeters off the ground, so the muddy ground wouldn't dirtmake your shoes and feet dirty.
Time flies, decades of years have passed in the blink of an eye.
All of these things are only memories now.
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Amazing writing!
June 22, 2024
Thank you very much.
Memories
It hasn't rained for a long time.
CThe crops are almost dying.
Fortunately, it rained today.
It's heavy rainThe rain is heavy and will continue raining until 7:30 pm tonight, so that farmers can stop combating the drought.
The heavy rain reminds me of a flood in my village in my childhood.
My village and our farmland were all covered inby the flood.
We couldn't see any pieces of the ground.
When we went in or out of our village, we had to look at the trees to locate the only entrance to our village.
At that time, we were treated as refugees.
The government allocated us clothes and rice.
It was the first time I had a chance to eat rice.
I had never ate rice before as my area doesidn't grow rice.
The way we ate rice was this: at night, my motherMy mother would first put a certain amount of rice into a vacuum pot first, and then, poured boiling water into it, and turnedhen seal the lid on tightly.
I'm not sure exactly why grammatically, but we can use "would" to indicate that we're telling a story about something that happened in the past. This way, you can omit "The way we ate rice was this" because it sounds a little awkward and I don't really see colons being used like this in English.
When we woke up the next morning, the rice porridge was well cooked.
I think the porridge cooked this way is really delicious.
I also thought of the kind of shoes that we often wore during rainy days back then.
When it wasDuring rainy days, the ground was really muddy, but we couldn't afford to buy a pair of rain-proof shoes in the supply and marketing cooperatives in the local town.
Therefore, each family would have a few rainproof wooden shoes made by carpenters.
The shoes were very simple and only made of a few wooden sticks.
When you wore them, they kept your feet off the ground for at least ten centimeters, so the muddy ground wouldn't dirtmake your shoes and feet dirty.
Time flies, decades of years have passed in the blink of an eye.
All of these things are only memories now.
June 22, 2024
Thank you very much.
Memories
It hasn't rained for a long time.
CThe crops are almost dying.
The crops are almost dead / The crops are dying
Fortunately, it rained today.
It's heavy rain and will continue raining until 7:30 pm tonight, so that farmers can stop combating the drought.
The heavy rain reminds me of a flood in my village in my childhood.
My village and our farmland were all covered in the flood.
We couldn't see any pieces of the ground.
I think this is fine, you can also say parts instead of pieces.
When we went in or out of our village, we had to look at the trees to locate the only entrance to our village.
At that time, we were treated as refugees.
The government allocated us clothes and rice.
It was the first time I had a chance to eat rice.
I never ate rice before as my area doesn't grow rice.
The way we ate rice was this: at night, my mother put a certain amount of rice into a vacuum pot first, and then poured boiling water into it and turned the lid on tightly.
When we woke up the next morning, the rice porridge was well cooked.
I think the porridge cooked this way is really delicious.
I also thought of the kind of shoes that we often wore during rainy days back then.
When it was a rainy days, the ground was really muddy, but we couldn't afford to buy a pair of rain-proof shoes in the supply and marketing cooperatives in the local town.
When it was a rainy day / When it was raining
Therefore, each family would have a few rainproof wooden shoes made by carpenters.
The shoes were very simple and only made of a few wooden sticks.
When you wore them, they kept your feet off the ground for at least ten centimeters, so the muddy ground wouldn't dirtmake your shoes and feet dirty.
Time flies, decades of years have passed in the blink of an eye.
All of these things are only memories now.
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Only a few small corrections! I want to compliment your English, you write very well. Your stories are always very interesting.
June 22, 2024
Thank you very much.
It hasn't rained for a long time. and
Cthe crops are almost dying.
It's heavy rain and will continue raining until 7:30 pm.m. tonight, so that farmers can stop combating the drought.
The heavy rain reminds me of a flood in my village that happened in my childhood.
We couldn't see any piecesart of the ground.
When we went in orand out of our village, we had to look at the trees to locate the only entrance to our village.
The government allocatedgave us clothes and rice.
June 22, 2024
Thank you very much.
It's heavy rain and will continue raining until 7:30 pm tonight, so that farmers can stopwhich will help farmers with their combating withe drought.
We couldn't see any piecesart of the ground.
When it was rainy daysing, the ground was really muddy, but we couldn't afford to buy a pair of rain-proof shoes in the supply and marketing cooperatives in the local town.
When you wore them, they kept your feet off the ground forby at least ten centimeters, so the muddy ground wouldn't dirttouch your shoes and feet.
June 21, 2024
Thank you very much.
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