Sept. 21, 2020
I have thought many times about the meaning of life, but every time I fail to figure it out. Coming to this world is not our choice, and it's just an accident. We are carefree when we are kids. We are full of hope when we are young, but when we get old, we will think about this involuntarily.
Maybe it's meaningless at all, we shouldn't make it clear. Now that we come, we just enjoy the journey, do what we want, and don't think about it so much. Maybe happiness is just simple. Okay, go to bed and have a nice dream.
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Maybe it's meaningless at all, we shouldn't make it life doesn't mean anything at all, as its meaning if often unclear.
my correction is a pure guess, as this sentence is not clear to me. In other words, I'm not sure what you're trying to say
Now that we come, weare her, we should just enjoy the journey, do what we want, and don't think too much about it so much.
Maybe achieving happiness is just that simple.
Okay, go to bed and have a nice dream.
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Meaning of life
I have thought many times about the meaning of life, but everyach time I fail to figure it out.
'each' sounds more natural here
Coming to this world is not our choice, and; it's just an accident.
Use of a semi colon is more effective here and makes the sentence have more impact. Using 'and' after a comma is called an Oxford comma. Personally I use an Oxford comma when joining a sentence to another sentence that uses 'and'. For example "Today i want to eat and drink, and go hiking" instead of "Today i want to eat and drink and go hiking".
We are carefree when we are kids.
We are full of hope when we are young, but when we get old, we will think about thiour own lives involuntarily.
perfect until 'this' - it's unclear what aspect of being young/old you're referencing. I've used 'our lives' but also thought about 'mortality'
Maybe it's meaningless atfter all, we shouldn't make it clearsense of it.
'meaningless at all' feels like a word is missing, i'm not sure what you were trying to say here. I've changed the second part to 'make sense of it' to sound more natural.
Now that we come, weare here, we should just enjoy the journey, do what we want, and don'not think about it so much.
changed to 'we are here' since the rest of the sentence feels like the present tense (i.e. happening now). Added 'should' to make it into a suggestion. Oxford comma works great here to break up the sentence for easy reading :)
Okay, go to bed and have a nice dream.
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Hope my corrections weren't too confusing! I'm also very sorry for introducing semi-colons (I hate them too!). Great use of Oxford commas, overall this is a great post.
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Meaning of life This sentence has been marked as perfect! The Meaning of You generally need an article in front of a noun, especially if the noun is the subject of your topic. |
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I have thought many times about the meaning of life, but every time I fail to figure it out. I have thought many times about the meaning of life, but e 'each' sounds more natural here I have thought many times about the meaning of life, but e |
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Coming to this world is not our choice, and it's just an accident. Coming to this world is not our choice Use of a semi colon is more effective here and makes the sentence have more impact. Using 'and' after a comma is called an Oxford comma. Personally I use an Oxford comma when joining a sentence to another sentence that uses 'and'. For example "Today i want to eat and drink, and go hiking" instead of "Today i want to eat and drink and go hiking".
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We are carefree when we are kids. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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We are full of hope when we are young, but when we get old, we will think about this involuntarily. We are full of hope when we are young, but when we get old, we will think about perfect until 'this' - it's unclear what aspect of being young/old you're referencing. I've used 'our lives' but also thought about 'mortality' We are full of hope when we are young, but |
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Maybe it's meaningless at all, we shouldn't make it clear. Maybe it's meaningless a 'meaningless at all' feels like a word is missing, i'm not sure what you were trying to say here. I've changed the second part to 'make sense of it' to sound more natural. Maybe my correction is a pure guess, as this sentence is not clear to me. In other words, I'm not sure what you're trying to say |
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Now that we come, we just enjoy the journey, do what we want, and don't think about it so much. Now that we changed to 'we are here' since the rest of the sentence feels like the present tense (i.e. happening now). Added 'should' to make it into a suggestion. Oxford comma works great here to break up the sentence for easy reading :) Now that we |
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Maybe happiness is just simple. Maybe achieving happiness is just that simple. |
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Okay, go to bed and have a nice dream. This sentence has been marked as perfect! This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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