Dec. 13, 2023
Masks
I'm a socially awkward and timid girl. I constantly fear the judgments of others and anticipate all possible negative outcomes before social events, such as embarrassment, humiliation, or rejection. Because of my social withdrawal, I believe hiding behind a new face or body can provide a shield for me to conceal the less favorable aspects of myself. I believe that, despite my shy and retiring side, I can adopt a different persona to integrate into human society with the help of a mask. It may sound contradictory, but instead of misrepresenting my true self, a mask can enable me to freely express my authentic self in social situations. Masking my identity isn't a surrender to social anxiety or a cowardly act of escapism—it's a means of self-preservation and protection from the harsh judgments of others. To me, it leads to self-empowerment rather than low self-esteem.
Having experienced racism myself, I understand how dehumanizing and repugnant it can be for a person always to be perceived as a member of a specific social category—whether it's a racial or ethnic group or nationality—rather than as an individual. Sometimes, a mask serves as a tool to break free from biases, allowing people to see me for who I truly am beyond any preconceived notions or stereotypes. By presenting a different exterior or putting on a mask, I can compel others to recognize my individuality.
I constantly fear the judgments of others and anticipate all possible negative outcomes before social events, such as embarrassment, humiliation, or rejection.
Because of my social withdrawalanxiety, I believe that hiding behind a new face or body can provide a shield for me to conceal the less favorable aspects of myself.
I believe that, despite my shy and retiring side, I canside, I’m able to adopt a different persona toand integrate into human societybetter with the help of a mask.
It may sound contradictory, but instead of misrepresenting my true self, a mask can enables me to freely express my authentic self in social situations.
Having experienced racism myself, I understand how dehumanizing and repugnant it can be for a person to always to be perceived as a member of a specific social category—whether it's a racial orgroup, an ethnic group or a nationality—rather than as an individual.
Dec. 14, 2023
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Masks
I'm a socially awkward and timid girl.
I constantly fear the judgments of others and anticipatemull over all possible negative outcomes before social events, such as embarrassment, humiliation, or rejection.
Because of myTo combat my inclination towards social withdrawal, I believe hiding behind a new face or body can provide a shield for me to conceal the less favorable aspects of myself.
Masking my identity isn't a surrender to social anxiety or a cowardly act of escapism—it' provides a means of self-preservation and protection from the harsh judgments of others.
I might put it like this.
Having experienced racism myself, I understand how dehumanizing and repugnant it can be for a person always to be perceived as a member of a specific social category—whether it's a racial or ethnic group or nationality—rather than as an individual.
Sometimes, a mask serves as a tool to break free from biases, allowing people to see me for who I truly am beyond any preconceived notions or stereotypes.
By presenting a different exterior or putting on a mask, I can compel others to recognize my individuality.
There might be better word than compel here, but I cannot think of it right now.
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My mom's name is Dagny. Snakker du norsk?
Dec. 14, 2023
Thank you for your corrections!
No, I don't speak Norwegian. I know the name ''Dagny'' is of Norse and Scandinavian origin, so it may be rare in English. I have not settled on a particular English name yet and change my English name from time to time; currently, I like "Dagny" because it's from a character in a novel I love.
Dec. 14, 2023
你知道什么者的名字意思吗？ 新的天。
Dec. 20, 2023
對，它意味著新的一天或明天~
I believe that, despite my shy and retiringclusive side, I can adopt a different persona to integrate into human society with the help of a mask.
It may sound contradictory, but instead of misrepresenting my true self, a mask can enable me to freely express my authentic self in social situations.
"misrepresenting" is a good word here, though I think "hiding" is more common.
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This is really good, both in terms of the English and the point you're making. Also, I can relate to a lot of this as an autistic person with social anxiety. My typical persona is one of objectivity because if what I have to say is provably correct, then it can't be harshly criticized (it doesn't actually work, but that's the theory). On the other hand when I am practicing Japanese, I somehow feel more free to express my subjective experience and play as someone with strong feelings, convictions, and ideas, again shielded by not really knowing the language. But regardless of what I do, in the end my actions are done by me and not a fictitious character. Who am I? I am what I do, regardless of what role I am playing.
Dec. 14, 2023
Thank you for your corrections and feedback!
I resonate with everything you said. I am reticent about sharing my true thoughts or opinions when speaking my native language, whereas I often feel more carefree, and perhaps more detached, when using a second language, especially because I don't know how my words might be received. But just like you said, we are still who we are in the end.
Masks
I'm a socially awkward and timid girl.
I constantly fear the judgments of others and anticipate all possible negative outcomes before social events, such as embarrassment, humiliation, or rejection.
Because of my social withdrawal, I believe hiding behind a new face or body can provide a shield for me to conceal the less favorable aspects of myself.
I believe that, despite my shy and retiring side, I can adopt a different persona to integrate into human society with the help of a mask.
Not sure what retiring means in this context, I don't think it's typically used in this way.
It may sound contradictory, but instead of misrepresenthiding my true self, a mask can enable me to freely express my authentic self in social situations.
Nothing wrong with grammar here, I just think that "hiding" might be a better term when it comes to wearing a mask.
Masking my identity isn't a surrender to social anxiety or a cowardly act of escapism—it's a means of self-preservation and protection from the harsh judgments of others.
To me, it leads to self-empowerment rather than low self-esteem.
Having experienced racism myself, I understand how dehumanizing and repugnant it can be for a person to always to be perceived as a member of a specific social category—whether it's a racial or ethnic group or nationality—rather than as an individual.
I think putting "to" before "always" is more natural here.
Sometimes, a mask serves as a tool to break free from biases, allowing people to see me for who I truly am beyond any preconceived notions or stereotypes.
By presenting a different exterior or putting on a mask, I can compel others to recognize my individuality.
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Very interesting reflection, and great use of vocabulary throughout.
I agree that masks have become a form of self-expression, just like other clothing.
Great writing!
Dec. 14, 2023
Thank you so much for your corrections and feedback! :)
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