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March 10th, 2021

Today was busy and fulfilling. I played soccer with my friends. After that, We played Mahjong and a video game. Mahjong is a Chinese game, played for three or four people. People often play it as a gambling betting money, even which is illegal in Japan. (Of course, we didn't do.) It is often said that college students who play Mahjong tend to fail their tests and go astray. This is because Mahjong needs a certain number of people and once a game starts, it takes so much time that people often stay up all night. However, Mahjong is exciting.

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March 10th, 2021

Today was busy and fulfilling.

I played soccer with my friends.

After that, Wwe played Mahjong and a video game.

Mahjong is a Chinese game, played forby three or four people.

People often play it as afor gambling bettingand bet money, even which is illegal in Japan.

(Of course, we didn't do that.) It is often said that college students who play Mahjong tend to fail their tests and go astray.

This is because Mahjong needs a certain number of people and once a game starts, it takes so much time that people often stay up all night.

However, Mahjong is exciting.

This is correct, but it sounds a little blunt, (a strange conclusion). もう少し、意見を説明するのが必要だと思います。"But, I can understand that (麻雀をするために徹夜すること), because Mahjong is so exciting."とか、なんでもいい。

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面白い話です。よくできました!

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March 11, 2021

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添削ありがとうございます!

March 10th, 2021

Today was busy and fulfilling.

I played soccer with my friends.

After that, Wwe played Mahjong and a video game.

Mahjong is a Chinese game, played forwith three or four people.

People often play it as ato gambling bettinge and bet money, even which is illegal in Japan.

"betting money" is redundant because gambling implies that. But you could use both phrases to emphasize the action.

(Of course, we didn't do that.) It is often said that college students who play Mahjong tend to fail their tests and go astray.

"go astray" sounds formal, but I still understand what you mean.

This is because Mahjong needs a certain number of people, and once a game starts, it takes so much time that people often stay up all night.

However, Mahjong is exciting.

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I just made a few minor corrections. Looks good!

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March 11, 2021

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Thank you for your correction!

March 10th, 2021


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Today was busy and fulfilling.


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I played soccer with my friends.


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After that, We played Mahjong and a video game.


After that, Wwe played Mahjong and a video game.

After that, Wwe played Mahjong and a video game.

Mahjong is a Chinese game, played for three or four people.


Mahjong is a Chinese game, played forby three or four people.

Mahjong is a Chinese game, played forwith three or four people.

People often play it as a gambling betting money, even which is illegal in Japan.


People often play it as ato gambling bettinge and bet money, even which is illegal in Japan.

"betting money" is redundant because gambling implies that. But you could use both phrases to emphasize the action.

People often play it as afor gambling bettingand bet money, even which is illegal in Japan.

(Of course, we didn't do.) It is often said that college students who play Mahjong tend to fail their tests and go astray.


(Of course, we didn't do that.) It is often said that college students who play Mahjong tend to fail their tests and go astray.

"go astray" sounds formal, but I still understand what you mean.

(Of course, we didn't do that.) It is often said that college students who play Mahjong tend to fail their tests and go astray.

This is because Mahjong needs a certain number of people and once a game starts, it takes so much time that people often stay up all night.


This is because Mahjong needs a certain number of people, and once a game starts, it takes so much time that people often stay up all night.

This sentence has been marked as perfect!

However, Mahjong is exciting.


This sentence has been marked as perfect!

However, Mahjong is exciting.

This is correct, but it sounds a little blunt, (a strange conclusion). もう少し、意見を説明するのが必要だと思います。"But, I can understand that (麻雀をするために徹夜すること), because Mahjong is so exciting."とか、なんでもいい。

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