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many governments think that economic progress is their most

Many government believe that economic advancement is the most important aspect of the society. However, some people concerned that government put much attention and resources on economic progress, the other society progress should have the same benefits. In this essay, I will discuss both views and give my opinion.

On the one hand, in the contemporary society, our living cost is expensive as we need to afford the rents, medical bill, food so on. If the government can't building a better economic environment and policies, that will pose a lot of problems such as a high inflation, high unemployment, and then even crimes. Therefore, to place the economic development on the first position is necessary because it touched to our lives everywhere.

On the other hand, the other sectors in our daily life are also important as like education and health care. A good education system can provide many talents to certain significant industries such as the medical trade or technology company. The health care also important to the economic advancement. For example, if we don't have a completed medical system, so many jobs can't offer the job security, it may causes people lost their enthusiasm for work.

In conclusion, society as a car, every components in the car is crucial. We can't not neglected every aspects in the society.

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Many governments believe that economic advancement is the most important aspect of the sociesociety's main priority.

However, some people concerned that government put much attention and resources on economic progress, the other society progress should have the same benefits.

Some are concerned, however, that the government pays too much attention to the economy at the expense of other measures of progress.

On the one hand, in the contemporary society, our living cost is expensive as we need to afford the rents, medical bill, food so on.

in contemporary society, our living costs are expensive, as we are obliged to pay rent, medical bills as well as paying for food and other goods/services.

If the government can't building a better economic environment and policies, that will pose a lot of problems such as a high inflation, high unemployment, and then even crimes.

If government is unable to develop better economic and environmental policies, several problems will emerge, including high inflation, high unemployment and an increase in crime rate.

Therefore, to place the economic development on the first position is necessary because it touched to our lives everywhere.

It is thus crucial to prioritise the economy because it affects every aspect of our lives.

On the other hand, the other sectors in our daily life are also important as like education and health care.

On the other hand, other sectors are also important in our everyday lives such as education and health care.

A good education system can provide many talents to certain signifsupply criticantl industries such as the medical trade or technology companyindustry or tech sector with talented employees.

The health care also important to the economic advancement.

Healthcare is also important to economic development.

For example, if we don't have a completed medical system, so many jobs can't offer the job security, it may causes people lost their enthusiasm for work.

Without a good medical system for example, people are not such reliable employees and businesses and institutions lose out.

In conclusion, society as a car, every components in the car is crucial.

In conclusion, just as a car is made up of several equally important components that work in synchrony and harmony, society itself is comprised of several sectors, all of which have equal importance and mutual benefit.

We can't not neglected every aspects in the society.

We cannot afford to neglect any sector in society.

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Great ideas! I reckon watching Youtube videos on Politics/econ in English would help with fluency and maybe checking out LingQ if you're interested in doing some more reading about Politics and econ. :)
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many governments think that economic progress is their most


Many government believe that economic advancement is the most important aspect of the society.


Many governments believe that economic advancement is the most important aspect of the sociesociety's main priority.

However, some people concerned that government put much attention and resources on economic progress, the other society progress should have the same benefits.


However, some people concerned that government put much attention and resources on economic progress, the other society progress should have the same benefits.

Some are concerned, however, that the government pays too much attention to the economy at the expense of other measures of progress.

In this essay, I will discuss both views and give my opinion.


On the one hand, in the contemporary society, our living cost is expensive as we need to afford the rents, medical bill, food so on.


On the one hand, in the contemporary society, our living cost is expensive as we need to afford the rents, medical bill, food so on.

in contemporary society, our living costs are expensive, as we are obliged to pay rent, medical bills as well as paying for food and other goods/services.

If the government can't building a better economic environment and policies, that will pose a lot of problems such as a high inflation, high unemployment, and then even crimes.


If the government can't building a better economic environment and policies, that will pose a lot of problems such as a high inflation, high unemployment, and then even crimes.

If government is unable to develop better economic and environmental policies, several problems will emerge, including high inflation, high unemployment and an increase in crime rate.

Therefore, to place the economic development on the first position is necessary because it touched to our lives everywhere.


Therefore, to place the economic development on the first position is necessary because it touched to our lives everywhere.

It is thus crucial to prioritise the economy because it affects every aspect of our lives.

On the other hand, the other sectors in our daily life are also important as like education and health care.


On the other hand, the other sectors in our daily life are also important as like education and health care.

On the other hand, other sectors are also important in our everyday lives such as education and health care.

A good education system can provide many talents to certain significant industries such as the medical trade or technology company.


A good education system can provide many talents to certain signifsupply criticantl industries such as the medical trade or technology companyindustry or tech sector with talented employees.

The health care also important to the economic advancement.


The health care also important to the economic advancement.

Healthcare is also important to economic development.

For example, if we don't have a completed medical system, so many jobs can't offer the job security, it may causes people lost their enthusiasm for work.


For example, if we don't have a completed medical system, so many jobs can't offer the job security, it may causes people lost their enthusiasm for work.

Without a good medical system for example, people are not such reliable employees and businesses and institutions lose out.

In conclusion, society as a car, every components in the car is crucial.


In conclusion, society as a car, every components in the car is crucial.

In conclusion, just as a car is made up of several equally important components that work in synchrony and harmony, society itself is comprised of several sectors, all of which have equal importance and mutual benefit.

We can't not neglected every aspects in the society.


We can't not neglected every aspects in the society.

We cannot afford to neglect any sector in society.

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