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sho

March 28, 2023

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I'd like to speak English naturally, and not like a textbook, so please correct me as accurately as possible so that I can speak like a native!
It's alright if you change an entire sentence!!


A: Have you read Kingdom?
B: No. What is the story about?
A: It is a story about the Spring and Autumn period in China, when China was divided into seven countries, and then first Qin Emperor and Shin who young boy, became generals later unified China by wars.
B: Sounds interesting.
A: It is very interesting. But there is one problem.
B: What's that?
A: It moves very slowly. In short, they have to win over countries one by one and unify them one by one, but right now the series has been running for 17 years and about 70 volumes have been published, but not even one has been unified yet. I think they will be able to unify one of them by the 20th year, so by this calculation, it will take another 100 years to complete the series. So you can enjoy it for a long time! Please read it.

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Manga

I'd like to speak English naturally, and not like a textbook, so please correct me as accurately as possible so that I can speak like a native!

It's alright if you change an entire sentence!!

A: Have you read Kingdom?

B: No.

What is the story about?

A: It is a story about the Spring and Autumn pPeriods in China, when China was divided into seven countries, and then young boy who became the first Qin Emperor and Shin who young boy,and later became a generals later who unified China bythrough wars.

B: Sounds interesting.

A: It is very interesting.

But there is one problem.

B: What's that?

A: It moves very slowly.

In short, they have to win over countries one by one and unify them one by one, but right now the series has been running for 17 years and about 70 volumes have been published, but not even one has been unified yet.

I think they will be able to unify one of them by the 20th year, so, by this calculation, it will take another 100 years to complete the series.

へー!

So you can enjoy it for a long time!

Please read it.

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面白そうです。よく出来ましした!

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March 31, 2023

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ありがとうございます!!🙇‍♂️

Manga

I'd like to speak English naturally, and not like a textbook, so please correct me as accurately as possible so that I can speak like a native!

It's alright if you change an entire sentence!!

A: Have you read Kingdom?

B: No.

What is the story about?

A: It i's a story aboutset in the Spring and Autumn period in China, when China was divided into seven countries, and thenbout first Qin Emperor and Shin who were young boy,s, and then became generals later and unified China bythrough wars.

I changed "It is" to "it's", because "It is" can sound formal or stiff, especially when it's being used in a dialogue.

This character says the story is about the Spring and Autumn period in China, but then talks about the emperors, so I made some minor edits to make that more clear.

B: Sounds interesting.

A: It is very interesting.

"It is" sounds natural here because it adds a sarcastic tone to the dialogue.

But there i's one problem.

"There's" sounds more natural here, again because it's being used in a dialogue.

B: What's that?

A: It moves very slowly.

In short, they have to win over countries one by one and unify them one by one, but right now the series has been running for 17 years and about 70 volumes have been published, but not even one has been unified yet.

I think they will be able to unify one of them by the 20th year, so by this calculation, it will take another 100 years to complete the series.

So you can enjoy it for a long time!

Please read it.

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Very nice work!

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sho

March 29, 2023

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A: It is very interesting.

If I really think it's good, should I just use "It's"?

A: It is a story about the Spring and Autumn period in China, when China was divided into seven countries, and then first Qin Emperor and Shin whose young boy, became a generals who later unified China by wars.

A: ItThe story moves very slowly.

In short, they have to win over countries one by one and unify them one by one, but right now the series has been running for 17 years and about 70 volumes have been published, but not even onetwo countries hasve been unified yet.

I think this is what you meant

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sho

March 31, 2023

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Thank you so much!!

Manga

I'd like to speak English naturally, and not like a textbook, so please correct me as accurately as possible so that I can speak like a native!

It's alright if you change an entire sentence!!

A: Have you read Kingdom?

What i's the story about?

You could also say "No, what's it about?" to feel less formal

A: It is a story about the Spring and Autumn period in China, when China was divided into seven countries, and how then first Qin Emperor and Shin, who was a young boy, became generals laterand unified China byvia wars.

B: Sounds interesting.

A: It is very interesting.

Grammatically correct, but just noting that when it comes to style most English speakers would consider sentences that don't use contractions to be more affirmative. Because the sentence stops, if I were to ask "Have you ever been to Japan?" a response of "I have not." feels more assertive than "No, I haven't." In this case, I'd say you used the perfect variant.

But there i's one problem.

In short, they have to win over countries one by one and unify them one by one, but right now the series has been running for 17 years and about 70 volumes have been published, but not even one has been unified yet.

I think they wi'll be able to unify one of them by the 20th year, so byat this calculation, it wiat rate it'll take another 100 years to complete the series.

So you can'll be able to enjoy it for a long time!

Please read it.

This conveys your meaning, but I would use other phrases (You should read it! or I highly recommend it) to feel more natural.

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Nearly technically perfect, great job! My only real notes are on your style. I changed some of your sentences to create contractions where it felt natural to me, but remember that could be entirely my opinion and you weren't necessarily "wrong".

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sho

March 29, 2023

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A: It is very interesting.

You mean it sounds blunt?

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couuf

March 29, 2023

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You mean it sounds blunt?

That's a good way to put it. Usually if someone is speaking like that then they're either a very direct person or feeling tense.

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sho

March 31, 2023

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That's a good way to put it. Usually if someone is speaking like that then they're either a very direct person or feeling tense.

I didn't know "it's" and "it is" were so different. Thank you so much!!

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couuf

March 31, 2023

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I didn't know "it's" and "it is" were so different. Thank you so much!!

They mean the same thing, but when people use them they usually have slightly different tones.

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sho

April 3, 2023

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They mean the same thing, but when people use them they usually have slightly different tones.

Hmm, it's difficult. I'll try to listen to native speakers more often! Thank you so much!!🙇‍♂️

A: It moves very slowly.


A: ItThe story moves very slowly.

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I'd like to speak English naturally, and not like a textbook, so please correct me as accurately as possible so that I can speak like a native!


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It's alright if you change an entire sentence!!


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A: Have you read Kingdom?


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B: No.


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What is the story about?


What i's the story about?

You could also say "No, what's it about?" to feel less formal

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A: It is a story about the Spring and Autumn period in China, when China was divided into seven countries, and then first Qin Emperor and Shin who young boy, became generals later unified China by wars.


A: It is a story about the Spring and Autumn period in China, when China was divided into seven countries, and how then first Qin Emperor and Shin, who was a young boy, became generals laterand unified China byvia wars.

A: It is a story about the Spring and Autumn period in China, when China was divided into seven countries, and then first Qin Emperor and Shin whose young boy, became a generals who later unified China by wars.

A: It i's a story aboutset in the Spring and Autumn period in China, when China was divided into seven countries, and thenbout first Qin Emperor and Shin who were young boy,s, and then became generals later and unified China bythrough wars.

I changed "It is" to "it's", because "It is" can sound formal or stiff, especially when it's being used in a dialogue. This character says the story is about the Spring and Autumn period in China, but then talks about the emperors, so I made some minor edits to make that more clear.

A: It is a story about the Spring and Autumn pPeriods in China, when China was divided into seven countries, and then young boy who became the first Qin Emperor and Shin who young boy,and later became a generals later who unified China bythrough wars.

B: Sounds interesting.


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A: It is very interesting.


A: It is very interesting.

Grammatically correct, but just noting that when it comes to style most English speakers would consider sentences that don't use contractions to be more affirmative. Because the sentence stops, if I were to ask "Have you ever been to Japan?" a response of "I have not." feels more assertive than "No, I haven't." In this case, I'd say you used the perfect variant.

A: It is very interesting.

"It is" sounds natural here because it adds a sarcastic tone to the dialogue.

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But there is one problem.


But there i's one problem.

But there i's one problem.

"There's" sounds more natural here, again because it's being used in a dialogue.

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B: What's that?


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In short, they have to win over countries one by one and unify them one by one, but right now the series has been running for 17 years and about 70 volumes have been published, but not even one has been unified yet.


In short, they have to win over countries one by one and unify them one by one, but right now the series has been running for 17 years and about 70 volumes have been published, but not even one has been unified yet.

In short, they have to win over countries one by one and unify them one by one, but right now the series has been running for 17 years and about 70 volumes have been published, but not even onetwo countries hasve been unified yet.

I think this is what you meant

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I think they will be able to unify one of them by the 20th year, so by this calculation, it will take another 100 years to complete the series.


I think they wi'll be able to unify one of them by the 20th year, so byat this calculation, it wiat rate it'll take another 100 years to complete the series.

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I think they will be able to unify one of them by the 20th year, so, by this calculation, it will take another 100 years to complete the series.

へー!

So you can enjoy it for a long time!


So you can'll be able to enjoy it for a long time!

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Please read it.


Please read it.

This conveys your meaning, but I would use other phrases (You should read it! or I highly recommend it) to feel more natural.

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