Oct. 21, 2020
2020 Too big to fall HSB/CAT & shame accident
Today the biggest local airline company is “chopping” 6000 staff!
Last month the biggest local bank allowanced stop the dividend interest.
This bank use to be anyone’s lover, now become anyone’s hater.
30 years ago when you told us you were working in either company.
We all envy you.
But today if you said you are working in either company.
We all worry your future.
Today I have a shameful accident.
I riding my bicycle and hit an iron fence.
Why is shameful?
It is a carless little mistake but now right leg is 1.5 times to left leg.
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2020 Too big to fall HSB/CAT & shame: HSBC/CAT are "too big to fail" & my embarrassing accident
2020: HSBC/CAT are "too big to fail" & my embarrassing accident
I've suggested a couple of updates to this above. "Too big to fail" is a known phrase that was used to describe big banks during the 2008 financial crisis and I think it sits best in quotation marks.
I think "embarrassing" is more natural than "shameful" to describe your bike accident - "shameful" has a very strong negative meaning.
Today the biggest local airline company is “chopping” 6000 staff!
Today the biggest local airline is “chopping” 6000 staff!
Last month the biggest local bank allowanced stopped the dividend interest.
Last month the biggest local bank stopped the dividend interest.
This bank use to be anyone’s lover, now become anyone’sloved by everyone but is now haterd.
This bank use to be loved by everyone but is now hated.
"Lover" means sexual partner, so doesn't work in this context!
"Everyone" means "all the people" and I think it works better than "anyone" ("any one of the people") here. You don't need to repeat it twice in the sentence either.
30 years ago when, if you told us you were working in either company, we would all envy you.
30 years ago, if you told us you were working in either company, we would all envy you.
Better to combine these two sentences. I think the "if... would" structure is a nice way of phrasing this.
We all envy you.
See above
But today, if you said you are working in either company, we would all worry for your future. But today, if you said you are working in either company, we would all worry for your future.
As above
We all worry your future.As above
As above
Today I have a shamefuld an embarrassing accident.
Today I had an embarrassing accident.
As above - I think embarrassing is more natural than shameful
I was riding my bicycle and hit an iron fence. I was riding my bicycle and hit an iron fence.
Why is shamefulit embarrassing?
Why is it embarrassing?
It iwas a careless little mistake, but now my right leg is 1.5 times tohicker than my left leg.
It was a careless little mistake, but now my right leg is 1.5 times thicker than my left leg.
You probably need "thicker" to specify what you mean by "1.5 times"
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Interesting post - tough times for the economy but I hope your leg gets better soon!
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2020 Too big to fall HSB/CAT & shame accident
2020 I've suggested a couple of updates to this above. "Too big to fail" is a known phrase that was used to describe big banks during the 2008 financial crisis and I think it sits best in quotation marks. I think "embarrassing" is more natural than "shameful" to describe your bike accident - "shameful" has a very strong negative meaning. |
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Today the biggest local airline company is “chopping” 6000 staff!
Today the biggest local airline |
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Last month the biggest local bank allowanced stop the dividend interest.
Last month the biggest local bank |
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This bank use to be anyone’s lover, now become anyone’s hater.
This bank use to be "Lover" means sexual partner, so doesn't work in this context! "Everyone" means "all the people" and I think it works better than "anyone" ("any one of the people") here. You don't need to repeat it twice in the sentence either. |
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30 years ago when you told us you were working in either company.
30 years ago Better to combine these two sentences. I think the "if... would" structure is a nice way of phrasing this. |
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We all envy you.
See above |
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But today if you said you are working in either company. But today, if you said you are working in either company, we would all worry for your future. But today, if you said you are working in either company, we would all worry for your future. As above |
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We all worry your future.
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Today I have a shameful accident.
Today I ha As above - I think embarrassing is more natural than shameful |
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I riding my bicycle and hit an iron fence. I was riding my bicycle and hit an iron fence. I was riding my bicycle and hit an iron fence. |
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Why is shameful?
Why is |
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It is a carless little mistake but now right leg is 1.5 times to left leg.
It You probably need "thicker" to specify what you mean by "1.5 times" |
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