Today I was stoo tired to review my Friday writing, but tomorrow I wouldill do it. Today I was too tired to review my Friday writing, but tomorrow I will do it.

Today I was stoo tired to review my Friday writing, but tomorrow I would do itI'm going to do it tomorrow. Today I was too tired to review my Friday writing, but I'm going to do it tomorrow.

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Not sure what you mean by sidelights here.

Thanks forto all the people who have helped me strengthen my writing capacity. Thanks to all the people who have helped me strengthen my writing capacity.

Thanks forto all people who have helped me strengthen writing capacityimprove my writing. Thanks to all people who have helped me improve my writing.

Thanks to <someone who did something> Thanks for <the favor someone did you>

Today I submitted my homework for a business English course. Today I submitted my homework for a business English course.

Today I submitted my homework for bmy Business English course. Today I submitted my homework for my Business English course.

I am delighted to have a chance to share my thoughts with themy classmates by giving an oral presentation next Wednesday. I am delighted to have a chance to share my thoughts with my classmates by giving an oral presentation next Wednesday.

I am delighted to have a chance to share my thoughts with themy classmates bythrough oral presentation next Wednesday. I am delighted to have a chance to share my thoughts with my classmates through oral presentation next Wednesday.

ItTaking a break also meant that I finally had time for a gentle stroll. Taking a break also meant that I finally had time for a gentle stroll.

It wasn't clear what "it" was referring to.

It also meant that I finally had time for a gentle stroll. It also meant that I finally had time for a gentle stroll.

What also meant that you had time for a stroll? There's a bit of a jump here.

This week I usually spent one hour each day on LangCorrect, spending one third of time to amend my entiries, twenty minutes to correct others' Chinese journals, and the orest of ther time to write a new one. This week I usually spent one hour each day on LangCorrect, spending one third of time to amend my entries, twenty minutes to correct others' Chinese journals, and the rest of the time to write a new one.

This week I usually spent onespent about an hour each day on LangCorrect,: one third of the time to amendreview my entiries, twenty minutes to correct others' Chinese journals, and the other time to write a new onewrite a new one in the time left. This week I spent about an hour each day on LangCorrect: one third of the time to review my entries, twenty minutes to correct others' Chinese journals, and write a new one in the time left.

One third of one hour is twenty minutes, so I'm not sure what you mean by "one third of time" here. What do you mean by "amend" here? I assume you meant review. To amend is more like to rewrite.

The new park was so incredible that many people were flying kites and various flowers were also blooming. The new park was so incredible that many people were flying kites and various flowers were also blooming.

Grammar is correct, but "flowers were also blooming" suggests that the flowers are in the process of blooming (opening up) right now, whereas you mean to say that they had already bloomed. A more natural way to say it is "many flowers had bloomed" or, more poetically, "many flowers were in full bloom".

The new park was so incredible that many people werecame to flying kites, and various flowers were also blooming. The new park was so incredible that many people came to fly kites, and various flowers were blooming.