Sept. 7, 2022
Train and Dragonfly 1
I'd like to write down about two recent experiences I had with dragonflies.
The first;
One day I was taking a train to go shopping. When the train stoped at a station and a door opened, two dragonflies connecting of each other fried into the train.
Those were pretty big dragonflies, so other customers were also surprised.
I worried that the door might close with the dragonflies in, but they left before the door closed.
I was relieved.
I'd like to write the second on next entry.
最近あったトンボについての経験を２つ書こうと思います。
１つ目：
ある日、買い物に行くために電車に乗っていたら、ある駅で電車が止まってドアが開いた途端に２匹のトンボが繋がった状態で飛び込んできました。
結構大きいトンボだったので、他のお客さんも驚いていました。
トンボが入ったままドアが閉まってしまうかもしれないと思いましたが、閉まる前に出ていきました。
ホッとしました。
２つ目は、次の日記で書きたいと思います。
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Train and Dragonfly 1
I'd like to write down about two recent experiences I had with dragonflies.
I'd like to write about two recent experiences I had with dragonflies.
The first;1)
1)
One day I was taking a train to go shopping.
When the train stopped at a station and athe doors opened, two dragonflies connecting ofed to each other fried ilew onto the train.
When the train stopped at a station and the doors opened, two dragonflies connected to each other flew onto the train.
Thosey were pretty big dragonflies, so the other custompassengers were also surprised.
They were pretty big dragonflies, so the other passengers were also surprised.
I worried that the doors might close withon the dragonflies in, but they left before the doors closed.
I worried that the doors might close on the dragonflies, but they left before the doors closed.
I was relieved.
I'd like to write the second on nextabout my second experience in my next journal entry.
I'd like to write about my second experience in my next journal entry.
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I'd like to write about my second experience in the next journal entry.
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Sept. 8, 2022
Thank you for your corrections.
I'd like to write down about two recent experiences I had with dragonflies.
I'd like to write about two recent experiences I had with dragonflies.
The first;:
The first:
One day I was taking a train to go shopping.
When the train stoped at a station and athe door opened, two dragonflies connecting ofed to each other friedlew into the train.
When the train stoped at a station and the door opened, two dragonflies connected to each other flew into the train.
Thosey were pretty big dragonflies, so other custompassengers were also surprised.
They were pretty big dragonflies, so other passengers were also surprised.
I worried that the door might close with the dragonflies instill inside (the train), but they left before the door closed.
I worried that the door might close with the dragonflies still inside (the train), but they left before the door closed.
I was relieved.
I'd like to write about the second onexperience in my next entry.
I'd like to write about the second experience in my next entry.
Sept. 8, 2022
Thank you for your corrections.
The Train and Dragonfly: Part 1 The Train and Dragonfly: Part 1
Just for a more "complete" title!
I'd like to write down about two recent experiences I had with dragonflies.
I'd like to write about two recent experiences I had with dragonflies.
This is the first; one.
This is the first one.
A semi-colon is usually to link two separate sentences together, not really to list something
One day I was taking a train to go shopping.
When the train stopped at a station and athe door opened, two dragonflies connecting ofed to each other friedlew into the train.
When the train stopped at a station and the door opened, two dragonflies connected to each other flew into the train.
Using all past tense for this sentence
Thosey were pretty big dragonflies, so other custompassengers were also surprised.
They were pretty big dragonflies, so other passengers were also surprised.
The best word for people on train is "passengers"
I was worried that the door might close with the dragonflies instill inside, but they left before the door closed.
I was worried that the door might close with the dragonflies still inside, but they left before the door closed.
I was relieved.
I'd like to write about the second onexperience in my next entry.
I'd like to write about the second experience in my next entry.
Just fleshing out the sentence!
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Great job overall! Dragonflies are beautiful~
Sept. 8, 2022
Thank you for your corrections and comments.
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When the train stoped at a station and a door opened, two dragonflies connecting of each other fried into the train.
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I worried that the door might close with the dragonflies in, but they left before the door closed.
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I'd like to write the second on next entry.
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