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I came to the countryside this afternoon and saw that they raised chickens in fields. No workshop, no feed, just put the chickens in the orchard. The chickens mainly eat grass and a few leftovers and could go everywhere freely. I thought that when I was a child, I was growing up in a way similar to those chickens. So I had some feelings and wrote sentences below: When I was a child, every family raised chickens in this way, and so did we children grew up like this. Grew up naturally, not afraid of the winds and rain.

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No workshcoop, no feeding, just put the chickensting them out in the orchard.

Please note that in the previous sentence, you wrote that you saw the chickens in the field, now they are in the orchard. Which is it? They have different meanings.

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Oct. 19, 2020

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I camewent to the countryside this afternoon and saw that they were raiseding chickens in fields.

What you wrote is not wrong, I am just assuming you mean something slightly different. "I came to the countryside" assumes you are still there, not that you took a short trip there and back. Please ignore if I am assuming incorrectly!

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No workshop, no feed, they just put the chickens in the orchard.

An orchard is very specific. It means a farm where fruit trees are grown. Do you want this, or something more general? If more general, maybe "fields", or "crops."

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Journal 10/19/20


I came to the countryside this afternoon and saw that they raised chickens in fields.


I camewent to the countryside this afternoon and saw that they were raiseding chickens in fields. I went to the countryside this afternoon and saw that they were raising chickens in fields.

What you wrote is not wrong, I am just assuming you mean something slightly different. "I came to the countryside" assumes you are still there, not that you took a short trip there and back. Please ignore if I am assuming incorrectly!

I camewent to the countryside this afternoon and saw that they raised chickens inchickens were being raised in the fields. I went to the countryside this afternoon and saw chickens were being raised in the fields.

No workshop, no feed, just put the chickens in the orchard.


No workshop, no feed, they just put the chickens in the orchard. No workshop, no feed, they just put the chickens in the orchard.

An orchard is very specific. It means a farm where fruit trees are grown. Do you want this, or something more general? If more general, maybe "fields", or "crops."

No workshcoop, no feeding, just put the chickensting them out in the orchard. No coop, no feeding, just putting them out in the orchard.

Please note that in the previous sentence, you wrote that you saw the chickens in the field, now they are in the orchard. Which is it? They have different meanings.

The chickens mainly eat grass and a few leftovers and could go everywhere freely.


The chickens mainly eat grass and a few leftovers andmainly and those with no more grass left to eat could go everywhere freely. The chickens eat grass mainly and those with no more grass left to eat could go everywhere freely.

I thought that when I was a child, I was growing up in a way similar to those chickens.


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So I had some feelings and wrote sentences below: When I was a child, every family raised chickens in this way, and so did we children grew up like this.


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Grew up naturally, not afraid of the winds and rain.


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