Jan. 5, 2021
Live the Moments
The minutes pass by like immigrant birds softly crossing the blue welkin. Pause for a moment and gaze at a flock of uproaring seagulls flying towards a faraway ocean. They go by, leaving only a glimpse of a memory behind.
Life goes on, no matter how hard you dwell on the memories of the past. The birds are gone, and so are those days. Celebrate today. There might be no tomorrow.
Live in the Moments
The minutes pass by like immigrantory birds softly crossing the blue welkin.
"Immigrant" sounds like you are going for a rather metaphoric or surrealist effect.
Pause for a moment and gaze at a flock of uproaring noisy seagulls flying towards a faraway ocean.
"Uproar" is a noun, so you need an alternative to "uproaring."
They go by, leaving only a glimpse of a memory behind.
Life goes on, no matter how hard you dwell on the memories of the past.
The birds are gone, and so are those days.
Celebrate today.
There might be no tomorrow.
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This is written in a rather poetic style, so there is more flexibility with grammar and usage. Most of it was fine though, except for the few things that I pointed out. Great job and welcome to LangCorrect!
Jan. 5, 2021
Thank you so much.
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Celebrate today. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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Life goes on, no matter how hard you dwell on the memories of the past. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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Live the Moments Live in the Moment |
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The minutes pass by like immigrant birds softly crossing the blue welkin. The minutes pass by like "Immigrant" sounds like you are going for a rather metaphoric or surrealist effect. |
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Pause for a moment and gaze at a flock of uproaring seagulls flying towards a faraway ocean. Pause for a moment and gaze at a flock of "Uproar" is a noun, so you need an alternative to "uproaring." |
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They go by, leaving only a glimpse of a memory behind. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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The birds are gone, and so are those days. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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There might be no tomorrow. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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