June 14, 2022
Some people think that government is responsible for people’s lifestyle and the plethora of problems related to it, like obesity or anorexia and bulimia. Others, on the other hand, consider that parents should take care of their children and take responsibility of raising them. In my humble opinion, and as I know about these kinds of topics as I am a teacher, I would like to condemn governments for that. That being said, we should be realistic and notice that some parents do not really care about their children, as I saw frequently.
As I mentioned before, I had contact with these issues several times. In all cases, it was because their parents do not (or, sadly, could not) give to them a proper diet. Nonetheless, as a person that tries to have a good lifestyle when it comes to diet, sometimes it is really difficult to find healthy food in supermarkets. However, this is not about oneself, this is more about others. When you decide to raise a kid, it is not like having a plant. One has to be aware of how difficult, and, sometimes, excruciating this might be. Unfortunately, these issues are found not only in diet but also in studies.
I do consider that there is a thin boundary between individual responsibility and regulations. I do not believe that if a government decided to eradicate junk food or added sugars in food would, in and of itself, disappear all problems related to it; that is wishful thinking. Parents have to be careful and conscientious about their children and not to expect someone to raise them.
This is not a matter of political parties or ideologies (as sometimes they are ignorant when it comes to understand the reality that surrounds them, as they try to mold the world according to their interests), this is more about respect and self-consciousness. There is no point in having tons of propaganda telling you to do exercise if you do not care about that. And, as it seems crystal clear, I hope nobody expects to find someone at your door compelling you to follow a good lifestyle. The only thing you need is to behave as an adult, by hook or by crook.
I emphasized that concrete children’s case as I think my message would be clearer. Nonetheless, this can be extrapolated to many others. In the end, my point is: be careful of what you do today, as it can have egregious consequences in the future.
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Some people think that government is responsible for people’s lifestyles and the plethora of problems related to ithem, like obesity or anorexia and bulimia.
Others, on the other hand, consider that parents should take care of their children and take responsibility of raising them.
In my humble opinion, and as I know about these kinds of topics as I am a teacher, I would like to condemn governments for that.
That being said, we should be realistic and notice that some parents do not really care about their children, as I sawhave seen frequently.
As I mentioned before, I had contact with these issues several times.
In all cases, it was because their parents do not (or, sadly, could not) give to them a proper diet.
Nonetheless, as a person that tries to have a good lifestyle when it comes to diet, sometimes it is really difficult to find healthy food in supermarkets.
However, this is not about oneself, this is more about others.
When you decide to raise a kid, it is not like having a plant.
One has to be aware of how difficult, and, sometimes, excruciating this might be.
Unfortunately, these issues are found not only in diet but also in studies.
I do consider that there is a thin boundary between individual responsibility and regulations.
I do not believe that if a government decided to eradicate junk food or added sugars in food would, in and of itself, disappear all problemsproblems would disappear related to it; t. That is wishful thinking.
Parents have to be careful and conscientious about their children and not to expect someone to raise them.
This is not a matter of political parties or ideologies (as sometimes they are ignorant when it comes to understand the reality that surrounds them, as they try to mold the world according to their interests), t. This is more about respect and self-consciousness.
There is no point in having tons of propaganda telling you to do exercise if you do not care about thadoing it.
And, as it seems crystal clear, I hope nobody expects to find someone at your door compelling you to follow a good lifestyle.
The only thing you need is to behave aslike an adult, (by hook or by crook?).
No entiendo lo que estás tratando de decir aquí.
I emphasized that concrete children’s case as I think my message would be clearer.
In the end, my point is: to be careful of what you do today, as it can have egregious consequences in the future.
Lifestyle and gGovernment
If this is a title, then capitalise 'g'.
Some people think that government is responsible for people’s lifestyles and the plethora of problems related to it, like obesity or, anorexia, and bulimia.
Don't forget the comma before 'and' when making a list.
That being said, we should be realistic and notice that some parents do not really care about their children, as I sawhave seen frequently.
'As I saw' vs 'As I have seen' - It is a finished action, so use - have seen. I saw is used usually when paired with a noun or verb in a sentence, whereas here you cut it off from the noun/verb, using it as a stand-alone clause so you must use 'I have seen'.
As I mentioned before, I hadve been in contact with these issues several times.
It's more of a phrasal verb/collocation to say it this way.
Nonetheless, as a person that tries to halive a good lifestyle when it comes to diet, sometimes it is really difficult to find healthy food in supermarkets.
When you decide to raise a kichild, it is not like having a plant.
Kid is a very informal way of saying child. This word does not follow the same register as the rest of your piece of writing. Better to use - child.
One has to be aware of how difficult, and, sometimes, excruciating this mightcan be.
Unfortunately, these issues are found not only found in diet but also in studies.
I would swap these words, sounds more natural but what you said makes complete sense.
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The first clause sounds a bit clunky, especially towards the end. Needs to be a separate clause with 'would'.
'It' is too vague, it's been a while since you brought up the problems of obesity, etc. So better to clarify.
Parents have to be careful and conscientious/conscious about their children and not to expect someone else to raise them.
This is not a matter of political parties or ideologies (as sometimes they are ignorant when it comes to understanding the reality that surrounds them, as they try to mold the world according to their interests), this is more about respect and self-consciousawareness.
Better to use 'awareness' here. Because consciousness is already a part of ourselves, we do not need to add 'self' here.
There is no point in having tonsan abundance of propaganda telling you to do exercise if you do not care about thait.
'Tons', is quite an informal register compared to the rest of your text.
And, as it seems crystal clear, I hope nobody expects to find someone at your door, compelling you to follow a good lifestyle.
I am not sure why you added - as it seems crystal clear. Seems lost in this sentence and unnecessary.
The only thing you need is to behave aslike an adult, by hook or by crook.
Wow, even I did not know of 'by hook or by crook', well done!
I emphasized that concrete children’s case as I think my message would be clearer.
Really not sure what you're trying to say here, sorry
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A splendid piece of writing - really advanced and well written, even for a native speaker! Just remember to keep the same level of formality and register in your pieces of writing and learn when to use certain articles more appropriately. Overall, really impressive writing skills! :3 Well done!
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Some people think that government is responsible for people’s lifestyle and the plethora of problems related to it, like obesity or anorexia and bulimia. Some people think that government is responsible for people’s lifestyles and the plethora of problems related to it, like obesity Don't forget the comma before 'and' when making a list. Some people think that government is responsible for people’s lifestyles and the plethora of problems related to |
Others, on the other hand, consider that parents should take care of their children and take responsibility of raising them. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
In my humble opinion, and as I know about these kinds of topics as I am a teacher, I would like to condemn governments for that. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
That being said, we should be realistic and notice that some parents do not really care about their children, as I saw frequently. That being said, we should be realistic and notice that some parents do not really care about their children, as I 'As I saw' vs 'As I have seen' - It is a finished action, so use - have seen. I saw is used usually when paired with a noun or verb in a sentence, whereas here you cut it off from the noun/verb, using it as a stand-alone clause so you must use 'I have seen'. That being said, we should be realistic and notice that some parents do not really care about their children, as I |
As I mentioned before, I had contact with these issues several times. As I mentioned before, I ha It's more of a phrasal verb/collocation to say it this way. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
In all cases, it was because their parents do not (or, sadly, could not) give to them a proper diet. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
Nonetheless, as a person that tries to have a good lifestyle when it comes to diet, sometimes it is really difficult to find healthy food in supermarkets. Nonetheless, as a person that tries to This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
However, this is not about oneself, this is more about others. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
When you decide to raise a kid, it is not like having a plant. When you decide to raise a Kid is a very informal way of saying child. This word does not follow the same register as the rest of your piece of writing. Better to use - child. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
One has to be aware of how difficult, and, sometimes, excruciating this might be. One has to be aware of how difficult, and, sometimes, excruciating this This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
Unfortunately, these issues are found not only in diet but also in studies. Unfortunately, these issues are I would swap these words, sounds more natural but what you said makes complete sense. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
I do consider that there is a thin boundary between individual responsibility and regulations. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
I do not believe that if a government decided to eradicate junk food or added sugars in food would, in and of itself, disappear all problems related to it; that is wishful thinking. I do not believe that if a government decided to eradicate junk food or added sugars in food, it would The first clause sounds a bit clunky, especially towards the end. Needs to be a separate clause with 'would'. 'It' is too vague, it's been a while since you brought up the problems of obesity, etc. So better to clarify. I do not believe that if a government decided to eradicate junk food or added sugars in food |
Parents have to be careful and conscientious about their children and not to expect someone to raise them. Parents have to be careful and conscientious/conscious about their children and not This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
This is not a matter of political parties or ideologies (as sometimes they are ignorant when it comes to understand the reality that surrounds them, as they try to mold the world according to their interests), this is more about respect and self-consciousness. This is not a matter of political parties or ideologies (as sometimes they are ignorant when it comes to understanding the reality that surrounds them, as they try to mold the world according to their interests), this is more about respect and self- Better to use 'awareness' here. Because consciousness is already a part of ourselves, we do not need to add 'self' here. This is not a matter of political parties or ideologies (as sometimes they are ignorant when it comes to understand the reality that surrounds them, as they try to mold the world according to their interests) |
There is no point in having tons of propaganda telling you to do exercise if you do not care about that. There is no point in having 'Tons', is quite an informal register compared to the rest of your text. There is no point in having tons of propaganda telling you to |
And, as it seems crystal clear, I hope nobody expects to find someone at your door compelling you to follow a good lifestyle. And I am not sure why you added - as it seems crystal clear. Seems lost in this sentence and unnecessary. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
The only thing you need is to behave as an adult, by hook or by crook. The only thing you need is to behave Wow, even I did not know of 'by hook or by crook', well done! The only thing you need is to behave No entiendo lo que estás tratando de decir aquí. |
I emphasized that concrete children’s case as I think my message would be clearer. I emphasized that concrete children’s case as I think my message would be clearer. Really not sure what you're trying to say here, sorry This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
Nonetheless, this can be extrapolated to many others. |
In the end, my point is: be careful of what you do today, as it can have egregious consequences in the future. In the end, my point is |
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