Jan. 8, 2023
Life in Ports (4)
The job turned out to be easy, I have plenty of leisure time now. After two weeks when I work in the port, my girlfriend came to see me by bus. When she saw everything I was doing well and was joyful to say: "I thought you lied and pretended to be working here, I can't believe it's true, it's wonderful! "
I took her to walk around at the port, we didn't go into any ship though she asked me many times because she had never been to a ship on the sea. I didn't tell her that any females were not allowed to go into and close to a ship even in some meters because a young woman was found dead on a ship two years ago. The repercussion of death had led to some strict policies to protect women.
She worked as a teacher in one kindergarten in downtown SZ and bought it a year later. She opened three kindergartens in the next few years, she became rich soon and waited for me all the time. She didn't marry until I married several years later in my hometown. Actually, I must admit she stayed with me in my bottom time and loved me much more than I love her, I owe her a great debt.
My job at the port turned out to be easier as time passed, I have met many different people in a variety of fields.
One day, my boss introduce a new colleague - Ahai to me. He was 18 years old, about 168 cm in height with curly yellow hair, he was the younger brother of Director Chen's one lover. My boss had to arrange a job for him, I like him and we became friends soon
Life in Ports (4)
The job turned out to be easy,. I haved plenty of leisure time now.
This is past tense.
or,
The job turned out to be easy so I had plenty of leisure time now.
After two weeks when Iof work ing at the port, my girlfriend came to see me by bus.
When she saw everythingthat I was doing well and was joyful to say:everything well, she was happy and said, "I thought you lied and pretended to be working here,. I can't believe it's true, i. It's wonderful!
We use commas (,) and not colons (:) to punctuate when a quotation will begin.
Wow, what a girlfriend ...
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I took her tofor a walk around at the port, w. We didn't go into any ships though she asked me many times because she had never been ton a ship on the sea.
I didn't tell her that any females were not allowed to go into and close toor even near a ship even infor some meters because a young woman was found dead on a ship two years ago.
わー！怖い！
The repercussions of the death had led to some strict policies to protect women.
SheMy girlfriend worked as a teacher in onea kindergarten in downtown SZ and boughtwas able to buy it a year later.
She opened three kindergartens in the next few years, she. She soon became rich soon and waited for me all ththe whole time.
She didn't marry until I married several years later in my hometown.
Actually, I must admit she stayed with me during my bottom timelowest points and loved me much more than I loved her,. I owe her a great debt.
My job at the port turned out to be easier as time passed,. I have met many different people in a variety of fields.
One day, my boss introduced a new colleague -, Ahai, to me.
He was 18 years old, about 168 cm in height with curly yellow hair, h. He was the younger brother of one of Director Chen's one lovers.
My boss had to arrange a job for him,. I liked him and we soon became friends soon.
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よく出来ました！
Jan. 9, 2023
どうもありがとうございました!
Life in the Ports (4)
The job turned out to be easy,. I have plenty of leisure time now.
After two weeks when Iof working in the ports, my girlfriend came by bus to see me by bus.
When she saw everything I was doing well and was joyful to say:, she said joyfully, "I thought you lied and pretended to be working here,. I can't believe it's true, i. It's wonderful!
I took her to walk around at the port, w. We didn't go into any ship, though she asked me many times because she had never been ton a ship on the sea.
I didn't tell her that any femaleswomen were not allowed to go into andor be close to a ship, even in somewithin a few meters, because a young woman was found dead on a ship two years ago.
The repercussion of deathincident hads led to some strict policies to protect women.
SheMy girlfriend worked as a teacher in one kindergarten in downtown SZ and bought it a year later.
Not sure what she bought. Was it the school?
She opened three kindergartens inover the next few years, she. She soon became rich soon and waited for me all theat time.
Actually, I must admit she stayed with me in my bottomat some of my lowest times and loved me much more than I love her,. I owe her a great debt.
My job at the port turned out to be easier as time passed, and I have met many different people in a variety of fields.
One day, my boss introduced me to Ahai, a new colleague - Ahai to me.
He was 18 years old, about 168 cm in height with curly yellowblonde hair, h. He was the younger brother of Director Chen's one lover.
My boss had to arrange a job for him,. I like him and we soon became friends. soon
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Great job!
Jan. 9, 2023
Thank you so much!
After tTwo weeks when Iafter I started working in the port, my girlfriend came to see me by bus.
When she saw everything and that I was doing well and was, she said joyful to saly: "I thought you lied and pretended to be working here, I can't believe it's true, it's wonderful!
I took her tofor a walk around at the port, we didn't go into any ship enter any of the ships although she asked me many times because she had never been toin a ship on the sea.
I didn't tell her that anyno females were not allowed to go into and close to a ship even in some meterswithin a few meters of a ship because a young woman was found dead on a ship two years ago.
The repercussion of death had led to somea few strict policies to protect women.
She didn't marry until I married her several years later in my hometown.
I assume this was what you meant to say - not that you married someone else?
Actually, I must admit she stayed with me in my bottom timeeven when I was down and loved me much more than I love her, I owe her a great debt.
One day, my boss introduced a new colleague - Ahai to me.
He was 18 years old, about 168 cm in height with curly yellow hair, he was the younger brother of one of Director Chen's one lover.
My boss had to arrange a job for him, I liked him and we became friends soon
Jan. 8, 2023
She didn't marry until I married her several years later in my hometown.
She is not my wife though she have waited me many years.
Jan. 8, 2023
Thank you very much!
Life in the Ports (4)
If you lived in only 1 port, I would say "the port".
If you lived in several ports, I would say "ports".
The job turned out to be easy, and I have plenty of leisure time now.
After two weeks when I working in the port, my girlfriend came to see me by bus.
= After two weeks (of) living...
When she saw everything and that I was doing well and, she was joyful to say: "I thought you lied and pretended to be working here, I can't believe it's true, it's wonderful!"
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I took her to walk around at the port,. However we didn't go into any ship, even though she asked me many times because she had never been ton a ship on the sea.
I didn't tell her that any females were not allowed to go into andor close to a ship - even in somewithin a few meters - because a young woman was found dead on a ship two years ago.
The repercussion of death had led to some strict policies to protect women.
SheMy girlfriend worked as a teacher in one kindergarten in downtown SZ and bought it a year later.
If you just use "She", we don't know if you are talking about your girlfriend, or the woman who died.
She opened three kindergartens in the next few years, sheoon became rich soon, and waited for me all theat time.
The more natural order is "soon became...".
She didn't marry until I married several years later in my hometown.
Actually, I must admit she stayed with me in my bottom time and loved me much more than I love her,. I owe her a great debt.
I'm not sure what you mean by "bottom time". Do you mean a time when you were depressed, or in poor circumstsances? In that case, I would say, "she stayed with me through some of my lowest times".
My job at the port turned out to be easier as time passed, and I have met many different people in a variety of fields.
One day, my boss introduced a new colleague - Ahai - to me.
He was 18 years old, about 168 cm in height with curly yellowblond hair, and he was the younger brother of Director Chen's one lover.
My boss had to arrange a job for him,. I liked him and we soon became friends soon.
The more natural order is "soon became...".
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Nice work on this journal! Your meaning and overall structure are clear.
Next, try working on organising your thoughts clearly by using connectors (and, but, however, because, etc.).
Also, be careful not to make sentences too long. It becomes difficult to understand meaning clearly with really long sentences.
Be careful - you often use a comma (,) where you should instead use a full stop (.) or use a connector like the word "and".
E.g. "My job at the port turned out to be easier as time passed, *and* I have met many different people in a variety of fields."
E.g. 2 "My boss had to arrange a job for him [, -> .] I liked him and we soon became friends.
I hope these comments are useful!
Jan. 8, 2023
Thank you very much! Your comment is helpful to me. I often hesitate whether use a comma or a full stop.
Jan. 8, 2023
No problem! Feel free to message me if you ever have any difficulties in the future.
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The job turned out to be easy, I have plenty of leisure time now. The job turned out to be easy, and I have plenty of leisure time now. The job turned out to be easy The job turned out to be easy This is past tense. or, The job turned out to be easy so I had plenty of leisure time now. |
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I took her to walk around at the port, we didn't go into any ship though she asked me many times because she had never been to a ship on the sea. I took her to walk around at the port I took her I took her to walk around at the port I took her |
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I didn't tell her that any females were not allowed to go into and close to a ship even in some meters because a young woman was found dead on a ship two years ago. I didn't tell her that I didn't tell her that I didn't tell her that I didn't tell her that わー！怖い！ |
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The repercussion of death had led to some strict policies to protect women. This sentence has been marked as perfect! The The The repercussions of the death had led to some strict policies to protect women. |
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She worked as a teacher in one kindergarten in downtown SZ and bought it a year later.
If you just use "She", we don't know if you are talking about your girlfriend, or the woman who died.
Not sure what she bought. Was it the school?
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She opened three kindergartens in the next few years, she became rich soon and waited for me all the time. She opened three kindergartens in the next few years, s The more natural order is "soon became...". She opened three kindergartens She opened three kindergartens in the next few years |
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She didn't marry until I married several years later in my hometown. This sentence has been marked as perfect! She didn't marry until I married her several years later in my hometown. I assume this was what you meant to say - not that you married someone else? This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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Actually, I must admit she stayed with me in my bottom time and loved me much more than I love her, I owe her a great debt. Actually, I must admit she stayed with me in my bottom time and loved me much more than I love her I'm not sure what you mean by "bottom time". Do you mean a time when you were depressed, or in poor circumstsances? In that case, I would say, "she stayed with me through some of my lowest times". Actually, I must admit she stayed with me Actually, I must admit she stayed with me Actually, I must admit she stayed with me during my |
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My job at the port turned out to be easier as time passed, I have met many different people in a variety of fields. My job at the port turned out to be easier as time passed, and I have met many different people in a variety of fields. My job at the port turned out to be easier as time passed, and I have met many different people in a variety of fields. My job at the port turned out to be easier as time passed |
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He was 18 years old, about 168 cm in height with curly yellow hair, he was the younger brother of Director Chen's one lover. He was 18 years old, about 168 cm in height with curly He was 18 years old, about 168 cm in height with curly yellow hair, he was the younger brother of one of Director Chen's He was 18 years old, about 168 cm in height with curly He was 18 years old, about 168 cm in height with curly yellow hair |
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My boss had to arrange a job for him, I like him and we became friends soon My boss had to arrange a job for him The more natural order is "soon became...". My boss had to arrange a job for him, I liked him and we became friends soon My boss had to arrange a job for him My boss had to arrange a job for him |
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