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July 2, 2022

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Lena' Birddays

Lena s Birddays is the biggest Party in the town her family is really rich and everyone is invited of the give it the best food . I will gave cupckes pancakes cookie pommes burger pizza ice cream ( every variety) and than final a big birday cake and we will much fun on te wolrd pool with a big slide . Lena is my best even our childhood . We have both rich parents and she is so friendly to everyone.Her party will so great and she begins this evening but I else need a dress. And I have a surprise she is so shy this is because I do I invited kevin her crush them she likes her is a top student and captain from footbaal team and he loves she to but the both didn't now wish me luck

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Lena's Birdthdays

Lena 's Birdthdays is the biggest Pparty in the town hown. Her family is really rich and everyone is invited of the give itto bring the best food dish.

I will gave bring cupcakes, pancakes, cookie pommess, apples, burgers, pizza, ice cream ( every variety) and thanen, finally, a big birthday cake, and then we will much have a lot of fun on the wolrd hirlpool with a big slide .

I'm not sure you mean a "whirlpool". They are generally small and do not have slides. I think you just mean "swimming pool."

Lena ishas been my best even ourfriend since childhood .

We both have both rich parents and she is sovery friendly to everyone. Her party will sobe great and she begins this evening. The party is tonight but I elsestill need a dress.

And I have a surprise she is so shy this is because I do I invited kevin her crush them she likes her is a top student and captain from footbaal team and he loves she to but the both didn't now wish me luck.

Sentence is not clear. And I have a surprise for her. (she is very shy???) I invited Kevin. ????? He is a top student and the captain of the football team and he loves her too, but neither of them know??? Wish me luck

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Pretty good job. The last sentence is a little difficult to understand. I think you might mean "I invited Kevin. She has a crush on him. He is the ...."

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prisci

July 5, 2022

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thank you

Lena' Birddays


Lena's Birdthdays

Lena s Birddays is the biggest Party in the town her family is really rich and everyone is invited of the give it the best food .


Lena 's Birdthdays is the biggest Pparty in the town hown. Her family is really rich and everyone is invited of the give itto bring the best food dish.

I will gave cupckes pancakes cookie pommes burger pizza ice cream ( every variety) and than final a big birday cake and we will much fun on te wolrd pool with a big slide .


I will gave bring cupcakes, pancakes, cookie pommess, apples, burgers, pizza, ice cream ( every variety) and thanen, finally, a big birthday cake, and then we will much have a lot of fun on the wolrd hirlpool with a big slide .

I'm not sure you mean a "whirlpool". They are generally small and do not have slides. I think you just mean "swimming pool."

Lena is my best even our childhood .


Lena ishas been my best even ourfriend since childhood .

We have both rich parents and she is so friendly to everyone.Her party will so great and she begins this evening but I else need a dress.


We both have both rich parents and she is sovery friendly to everyone. Her party will sobe great and she begins this evening. The party is tonight but I elsestill need a dress.

And I have a surprise she is so shy this is because I do I invited kevin her crush them she likes her is a top student and captain from footbaal team and he loves she to but the both didn't now wish me luck


And I have a surprise she is so shy this is because I do I invited kevin her crush them she likes her is a top student and captain from footbaal team and he loves she to but the both didn't now wish me luck.

Sentence is not clear. And I have a surprise for her. (she is very shy???) I invited Kevin. ????? He is a top student and the captain of the football team and he loves her too, but neither of them know??? Wish me luck

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