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hiep

May 24, 2020

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Earlier today, I turned my laptop on. Everything was until I plugged in charging. My laptop had a problem. It’s screen appeared something strange. I don’t know what is it. But It look likes a lot of white lines run along the screen. It covers all laptop’s screen. I can’t see anything so I can’t do anything on my laptop. I tried restarting my laptop. But this way didn’t work. I will replace new laptop’s screen next week.

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Laptop

Earlier today, I turned on my laptop on.

Everything was okay until I plugged it in to charginge.

My laptop had a problem.

It’On its screen appeared something strange.

I don’t know what ist its.

But It looks likes a lot of white lines running along the screen.

It covers all of the laptop’s screen.

I can’t see anything so I can’t do anything on my laptop.

I tried restarting my laptop.

But this way didn’t work.

I will replace newthe laptop’s screen with a new one next week.

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Good job. Hopefully it doesn't cost too much.

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hiep

May 25, 2020

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Thank you very much.

Earlier today, I turned my laptop on.

Everything was fine, until I plugged int in to charginge.

I hope this is what you were trying to say? You didn't have any adjective in there, so I put "everything was fine".
Instead of saying "I plugged it in charging", you say either "I plugged it in," "I plugged it in to charge," or "I started charging it."

My laptop had a problem.

It’sOn the screen appeared, something strange appeared.

You use the preposition "on" when talking about screens/phones/computers etc ... anything *on* the screen is something you can see.

I don’t know what is it.t was,

Bbut Iit looked likes a lot of white lines running along the screen.

You can combine these two sentences :)

It covers all laptop’sed the entire screen.

You used the possessive ('s) right, but you wouldn't use it here. You can either just say "laptop screen" or "screen". It sounds more natural to say screen.

I can’t see anything, so I can’t do anything on my laptop.

I tried restarting my laptop.,

Bbut this wayrestarting didn't workdo anything to fix the problem.

Sounds better like this.

I will replace new laptop’sthe screen next week.

When you say replace, you don't need to say new, because replacing something already means you will get something new.

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Good job!
Sorry about your laptop :(

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hiep

May 25, 2020

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Yeah, thanks for your help.

Laptop


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Earlier today, I turned my laptop on.


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Earlier today, I turned on my laptop on.

Everything was until I plugged in charging.


Everything was fine, until I plugged int in to charginge.

I hope this is what you were trying to say? You didn't have any adjective in there, so I put "everything was fine". Instead of saying "I plugged it in charging", you say either "I plugged it in," "I plugged it in to charge," or "I started charging it."

Everything was okay until I plugged it in to charginge.

My laptop had a problem.


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It’s screen appeared something strange.


It’sOn the screen appeared, something strange appeared.

You use the preposition "on" when talking about screens/phones/computers etc ... anything *on* the screen is something you can see.

It’On its screen appeared something strange.

I don’t know what is it.


I don’t know what is it.t was,

I don’t know what ist its.

But It look likes a lot of white lines run along the screen.


Bbut Iit looked likes a lot of white lines running along the screen.

You can combine these two sentences :)

But It looks likes a lot of white lines running along the screen.

It covers all laptop’s screen.


It covers all laptop’sed the entire screen.

You used the possessive ('s) right, but you wouldn't use it here. You can either just say "laptop screen" or "screen". It sounds more natural to say screen.

It covers all of the laptop’s screen.

I can’t see anything so I can’t do anything on my laptop.


I can’t see anything, so I can’t do anything on my laptop.

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I tried restarting my laptop.


I tried restarting my laptop.,

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But this way didn’t work.


Bbut this wayrestarting didn't workdo anything to fix the problem.

Sounds better like this.

This sentence has been marked as perfect!

I will replace new laptop’s screen next week.


I will replace new laptop’sthe screen next week.

When you say replace, you don't need to say new, because replacing something already means you will get something new.

I will replace newthe laptop’s screen with a new one next week.

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