March 31, 2023
"Laika's return"
When I looked out of the window, I couldn't believe it. It was Laika, my dog! She had been missing for two weeks. And she just returned. My father and I had been looking for her since she had gotten lost. It happened when we went to a cabin to spend the holidays. There were many dogs there, but we knew that Laika got along well with other dogs. However, we hadn't expected it that there were horses too. Laika is afraid of bigger animals than her, so she immediately ran away when she saw them. We hadn't been able to follow her, as suddenly it started to rain; consequently, we had to stop the search. The next day, we continued the search. I couldn't settle for searching Laika every weekend, thus I decided to do it every day afterschool. But we had no luck.
My first reaction when I saw her was to break down in tears. While later, I started to swell with joy. I knew, deep down, that sooner or later he would come back. My father told me that he saw Laika along the road while he was driving home. Despite how far the campsite is from our house, she managed to get there. I considered her the bravest and most determined dog I had ever met.
"Laika's rReturn"
When I looked out of the window, I couldn't believe it.
It was Laika, my dog!
She had been missing for two weeks.
And she had just returned.
My father and I had been looking for her since she had gotten lost.
It happened when we went to a cabin to spend the holidays.
There were many dogs there, but we knew that Laika got along well with other dogs.
However, wWe hadn't expected it, however, that there werould be horses, too.
Laika is afraid of bigger animals bigger than her, so she immediately ran away when she saw them.
We hadn't beenweren't able to follow her, as because it suddenly it started to rain; consequently, we had to stop the searching.
The next day, we continued the search.
I couldn't settle for searching for Laika everyjust on the weekend,s and thus I decided to do it every day after school.
But we had no luck.
My first reaction when I saw her was to break down in tears.
While later, I started to swell with joy.
I knew, deep down, that sooner or later she would come back.
My father told me that he saw Laika along the road while he was driving home.
Despite how far the campsite is from our housme, she managed to get there.
I considered her the bravest and most determined dog I had ever met.
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However, we hadn't expected it that there were horses too.
Laika is afraid of bigger animals bigger than her, so she immediately ran away when she saw them.
April 1, 2023
Thanks!
When I looked out of the window, I couldn't believe it.
Your sentence is also correct, but I think this would be more natural :)
And she just returned.
We don't really start sentences with 'and'. I would combine this and your previous sentence: "She had been missing for two weeks and she just returned."
My father and I had been looking for her since she had gotten lost.
I'd maybe say "My father and I had been looking for her since she had gone missing."
However, we hadn't expected it that there werould be horses too.
We hadn't beenweren't able to follow her, as suddenly it started to rain; consequently, we had to stop the search.
I couldn't settle for searching for Laika only every weekend, thus I decided to do it every day after school.
Assuming you're trying to say that you didn't feel like searching for her on the weekend was enough, then adding the word "only" would help portray that meaning.
But, we had no luck.
My first reaction when I saw her was to break down into tears.
While later, I started to swell with joy.
I'd maybe combine this with the above sentence: "My first reaction when I saw her was to break down into tears, while later I started to swell with joy."
I knew, deep down, that sooner or later she would come back.
March 31, 2023
Thanks! :D
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When I looked out of the window, I couldn't believe it. When I looked out Your sentence is also correct, but I think this would be more natural :) When I looked out |
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It was Laika, my dog! This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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She had been missing for two weeks. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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And she just returned. And she just returned. We don't really start sentences with 'and'. I would combine this and your previous sentence: "She had been missing for two weeks and she just returned." And she had just returned. |
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My father and I had been looking for her since she had gotten lost. My father and I had been looking for her since she had gotten lost. I'd maybe say "My father and I had been looking for her since she had gone missing." This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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It happened when we went to a cabin to spend the holidays. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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There were many dogs there, but we knew that Laika got along well with other dogs. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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However, we hadn't expected it that there were horses too. However, we hadn't expected However, we hadn't expected
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Laika is afraid of bigger animals than her, so she immediately ran away when she saw them. Laika is afraid of Laika is afraid of |
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We hadn't been able to follow her, as suddenly it started to rain; consequently, we had to stop the search. We We |
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The next day, we continued the search. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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I couldn't settle for searching Laika every weekend, thus I decided to do it every day afterschool. I couldn't settle for searching for Laika only every weekend, thus I decided to do it every day after school. Assuming you're trying to say that you didn't feel like searching for her on the weekend was enough, then adding the word "only" would help portray that meaning. I couldn't settle for searching for Laika |
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But we had no luck. But, we had no luck. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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My first reaction when I saw her was to break down in tears. My first reaction when I saw her was to break down into tears. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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While later, I started to swell with joy. While later, I started to swell with joy. I'd maybe combine this with the above sentence: "My first reaction when I saw her was to break down into tears, while later I started to swell with joy." This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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I knew, deep down, that sooner or later he would come back. I knew, deep down, that sooner or later she would come back. I knew, deep down, that sooner or later she would come back. |
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My father told me that he saw Laika along the road while he was driving home. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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Despite how far the campsite is from our house, she managed to get there. Despite how far the campsite is from our ho |
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I considered her the bravest and most determined dog I had ever met. I consider |
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