Korossol into the Ring 31

Korossol

July 14, 2021

Korossol into the Ring 31

On my island, life has gotten a lot easier since I was a little girl. I grew up here, so I saw every little change, every progress. But my mother grew up in Paris (France) and it can't compare. You shouldn't compare. She still believes that if you do the right thing, talk to the right people, go early and prepare, you will obtain what you want. For me, it's not how life works: it's a video game. Smash the right button, click right and you'll be rewarded by the Object of your Quest!
I know that when I want something a bit more sophisticated than usual, I will have to go to the big city, it will be complicated, tiring and frustrating. Also, I may not find what I want. Not by my fault but because the world doesn't cooperate. It happens. I thought my mother has learned that too. Yesterday I was reminded that we didn't have the same life.
We wanted to buy a mattress, a fancy one. I was ready to buy the first one because I knew that I wouldn't come back soon. She wanted quality. She has requirements. We did three furniture stores and had lots of adventures.
We came back empty-handed. We did everything right. The store didn't, the salesmen didn't and no one but us cared.
She was frustrated, I was not. She thought we could decide, go, have our prize and came back but life on my island doesn't work like that.
I love my mother lots and she likes me but we are really not the same person.

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secretpostman

On my island, life has gotten a lot easier since I was a little girl.

I grew up here, so I saw every little change, ~~every~~all the progress.

In this sense we usually treat progress as uncountable.

But my mother grew up in Paris (France) and it can't compare.

You shouldn't compare.

She still believes that if you do the right thing, talk to the right people, go early and prepare, you will obtain what you want.

For me, ithat's not how life works: it's a video game.

"it" is fine, but "that" is natural here.

Smash the right button, click right and you'll be rewarded by the Object of your Quest!

I know that when I want something a bit more sophisticated than usual, I will have to go to the big city, and it will be complicated, tiring and frustrating.

This is really just style, I think. But it sounded a bit awkward. All those commas without anything connecting them.

Also, I may not find what I want.

Not byecause it's my fault but because the world doesn't cooperate.

"Not by my fault" is clear, but I feel like people rarely say it. This seems a little more natural, maybe? Or "Not because of me", or "not through any fault of my own".

It happens.

I thought my mother hasd learned that too.

"has learned" would be fine if you were talking about this in the present - but you're not, this is in the past. You think she has learned, you thought she had learned.

Yesterday I was reminded that we didn't have the same life.

We wanted to buy a mattress, a fancy one.

I was ready to buy the first one because I knew that I wouldn't come back soon.

She wanted quality.

She has requirements.

We did three furniture stores and had lots of adventures.

We came back empty-handed.

We did everything right.

The stores didn't, the salesmen didn't, and no one but us cared.

Multiple stores, right?

She was frustrated, I was not.

She thought we could decide, go, have our prize and caome back, but life on my island doesn't work like that.

I love my mother lots and she likes me but we are really not the same person.

Korossol

July 19, 2021

Thank you! It helped me a lot.

Korossol into the Ring 31

On my island, life has gotten a lot easier since I was a little girl.