Dec. 2, 2020
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I think CDs are going to disappear in 10 years. Now, music streaming services are mainstream for listening to music. Just a while ago, It had been CDs, and CDs replaced cassette tapes. Furthermore, cassette tapes had replaced records. It is more convenient to use streaming services than to use CDs, so CDs will be like records. Some people will enjoy CDs as a hobby.
I came up with this topic when I tried to English listening exam but I couldn't find a CD of the problems and couldn't do it.
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CDs
I think CDs are going to disappear in 10 years.
Now, music streaming services arhave become mainstream for listening to music.
Now, music streaming services have become mainstream for listening to music.
This sounds better to me because the passage overall is focusing on the shift in how we listen to music. “To be mainstream” also just sounds odd to me.
Just a while ago, Iit had been CDswas CDs (that were mainstream), and CDs replaced cassette tapes.
Just a while ago, it was CDs (that were mainstream), and CDs replaced cassette tapes.
“Had been” would mean that much of the following text should also be in the pluperfect (“had replaced” instead of “replaced”).
Adding “that were mainstream” would help with clarity.
FurthermoreIn turn, cassette tapes had replaced records.
In turn, cassette tapes replaced records.
It is more convenient to use streaming services than to use CDs, so CDs will be likesuffer the same fate as records.
It is more convenient to use streaming services than to use CDs, so CDs will suffer the same fate as records.
More elegant.
Some people will enjoy CDs as a hobby.
I came up with this topic when I tried to English listening exam but I couldn't’t do it because I was unable to find a CD ofwith the problems and couldn't do it.
I came up with this topic when I tried to English listening exam but couldn’t do it because I was unable to find a CD with the problems.
“Was unable to” to avoid repetition.
The whole part after “when” is one unit, and consolidating the structure and reducing the times “I” appears helps it sound more natural.
Dec. 3, 2020
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I think CDs are going to disappear in 10 years. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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Now, music streaming services are mainstream for listening to music.
Now, music streaming services This sounds better to me because the passage overall is focusing on the shift in how we listen to music. “To be mainstream” also just sounds odd to me. |
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Just a while ago, It had been CDs, and CDs replaced cassette tapes.
Just a while ago, “Had been” would mean that much of the following text should also be in the pluperfect (“had replaced” instead of “replaced”). Adding “that were mainstream” would help with clarity. |
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Furthermore, cassette tapes had replaced records.
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It is more convenient to use streaming services than to use CDs, so CDs will be like records.
It is more convenient to use streaming services than to use CDs, so CDs will More elegant. |
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Some people will enjoy CDs as a hobby. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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I came up with this topic when I tried to English listening exam but I couldn't find a CD of the problems and couldn't do it.
I came up with this topic when I tried to English listening exam but “Was unable to” to avoid repetition. The whole part after “when” is one unit, and consolidating the structure and reducing the times “I” appears helps it sound more natural. |
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