Nov. 20, 2023
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This afternoon. I went to the Office SEEK to receive my package, because my ordered headphones have already arrived. I'm satisfied with new headphones, because it's a hundred times better, than the previous one. When I received it, I said: "Thank you very much, goodbye" and went home to test the new headphones.
Сегодня днём. Я пошел в офис СДЭК чтобы получить мою посылку, потому что мои новые заказанные наушники уже пришли. Я доволен сполна, потому что эти наушники в сто раз лучше чем предыдущие. Когда я получил это, Я сказал: "Большое спасибо, досвидания" И ушёл домой тестировать новые наушники.
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Package from Aliexpress
This afternoon.,
This afternoon,
I went to the Office SEEK to receive my package, because my orderedthe headphones have alreI had ordered, hady arrived.
I went to the Office SEEK to receive my package, because the headphones I had ordered, had arrived.
I'm satisfiedhappy with new headphones, because it's a hundred times better, than the previous one.
I'm happy with new headphones, because it's a hundred times better, than the previous one.
When I received it, I said: "Thank you very much, goodbye" and went home to test the new headphones. When I received it, I said: "Thank you very much, goodbye" and went home to test the new headphones.
This afternoon. This afternoon.
That period should be a comma to connect with the next sentence. "This afternoon" is not a complete sentence.
I went to the Office SEEK to receive my package, because my ordered headphones have alreadyd arrived.
I went to the Office SEEK to receive my package because my ordered headphones had arrived.
"I went..." is in past tense and so "had" in "had arrived" also needs to be in past tense.
The "already" is unnecessary because you don't have a need to any further emphasis on the fact it's past tense. Please consider:
"I tried to buy it while it was on sale, but by the time I got there it was too late."
"I tried to buy it while it was on sale, but by the time I got there it was already too late."
Both sentences are perfectly fine, but what "already" is doing in the sentence is not adding new information, but strengthening the feeling of regret.
I'm satisfied with new headphones, because it'sthey're a hundred times better, than the previous one.
I'm satisfied with new headphones because they're a hundred times better than the previous one.
Like the other poster said, pleural.
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Overall very good, but you don't need commas to separate every clause when followed by a conjunction like "and" or "because". I don't think they are technically wrong, but feel unnatural.
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This afternoon.,
This afternoon,
I went to the Office SEEKSEEK office to receive my package, because my orderedthe headphones I ordered have already arrived.
I went to the SEEK office to receive my package, because the headphones I ordered have already arrived.
"have already" is okay for your context, but I think "had already" is best if we are talking about something in the past.
I'm satisfied with my new headphones, because it'sthey're a hundred times better, than the previous ones.
I'm satisfied with my new headphones because they're a hundred times better than the previous ones.
When I received it, I said:, "Thank you very much, goodbye." and went home to test the new headphones.
When I received it, I said, "Thank you very much, goodbye." and went home to test the new headphones.
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Headphones are difficult. Because of the "s" at the end, we consider them a plural, even though you only have one item. We also call them a pair of headphones when counting.
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This afternoon.
This afternoon This afternoon. This afternoon. That period should be a comma to connect with the next sentence. "This afternoon" is not a complete sentence.
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I went to the Office SEEK to receive my package, because my ordered headphones have already arrived.
I went to the "have already" is okay for your context, but I think "had already" is best if we are talking about something in the past.
I went to the Office SEEK to receive my package "I went..." is in past tense and so "had" in "had arrived" also needs to be in past tense. The "already" is unnecessary because you don't have a need to any further emphasis on the fact it's past tense. Please consider: "I tried to buy it while it was on sale, but by the time I got there it was too late." "I tried to buy it while it was on sale, but by the time I got there it was already too late." Both sentences are perfectly fine, but what "already" is doing in the sentence is not adding new information, but strengthening the feeling of regret.
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I'm satisfied with new headphones, because it's a hundred times better, than the previous one.
I'm satisfied with my new headphones
I'm satisfied with new headphones Like the other poster said, pleural.
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When I received it, I said: "Thank you very much, goodbye" and went home to test the new headphones.
When I received it, I said When I received it, I said: "Thank you very much, goodbye" and went home to test the new headphones. When I received it, I said: "Thank you very much, goodbye" and went home to test the new headphones. |
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