Not a diary entry Not a diary entry

A diary is a collection of diary entries. I assume you mean this is not a diary entry, but if you want a title to serve as a counterbalance to your series of entries titled “Diary,” I would suggest “Non-diary” for these.

The book that has impressed me most recently is No Longer Human (Renjian Shige) by Osamu Dazai. The book that has impressed me most recently is No Longer Human (Renjian Shige) by Osamu Dazai.

The parenthetical “Renjian Shige” confuses me. I know it’s a pinyin reading of the Japanese title, 人間失格, but I wonder why you used Chinese pinyin instead of the Japanese romanization “Ningen Shikkaku.” Are you reading an English translation of the novel? If so, I’d recommend using “Ningen Shikkaku” instead of “Renjian Shige.”

I didn’t just read it;, I drowned myself in his expressions, in his peculiar way of seeing the world. I didn’t just read it, I drowned myself in his expressions, in his peculiar way of seeing the world.

The semicolon is OK, but a comma looks more natural to me.

It’s a story that unfoldeds from Yozo’s perspective, a man seemingly without a soul. It’s a story that unfolds from Yozo’s perspective, a man seemingly without a soul.

{It’s a story that is unfolded | It’s a story that unfolds | The story unfolds} from {Yozo’s perspective | the perspective of Yozo}, a man seemingly without a soul. {It’s a story that is unfolded | It’s a story that unfolds | The story unfolds} from {Yozo’s perspective | the perspective of Yozo}, a man seemingly without a soul.

His deep-seated fear of human relationships and his strategy of masking his true self through clowning ultimately drive him toward self-destruction——a haunting descent vividly captured in his eyes that, which seem "“like those of a cowardly, pathetic child".” His deep-seated fear of human relationships and his strategy of masking his true self through clowning ultimately drive him toward self-destruction—a haunting descent vividly captured in his eyes, which seem “like those of a cowardly, pathetic child.”

His deep-seated fear of human relationships and his strategy of masking his true self through clowning ultimately drive him toward self-destruction——a haunting descent vividly captured in his eyes that seem "like those of a cowardly, pathetic child". His deep-seated fear of human relationships and his strategy of masking his true self through clowning ultimately drive him toward self-destruction—a haunting descent vividly captured in his eyes that seem "like those of a cowardly, pathetic child".

We rarely use double em-dashes in English.

Every sentence feltels like it wais bleeding. Every sentence feels like it is bleeding.

I would use present tense for consistency.

The first is this: “Everything will pass. The first is this: “Everything will pass.

The first is this: “Everything will pass. The first is this: “Everything will pass.

A very Buddhist sentiment!

So when I read that second sentence —, “The so-called ‘world’ — isn’t it just an individual?”, I felt my blood freeze. So when I read that second sentence, “The so-called ‘world’ — isn’t it just an individual?”, I felt my blood freeze.

Since the quoted text contains an em-dash, it’s better not to introduce the quote with another en-dash.

Suddenly, everything I had been taught about rules, about morality, aboutnd what “society” expects… it all of it seemed like something made upcreated by some people, not by all peopleveryone. Suddenly, everything I had been taught about rules, morality, and what “society” expects… all of it seemed like something created by some people, not by everyone.

We alwaysoften feel judged by principles or by the secular world. We often feel judged by principles or by the secular world.

That’s why Yozo’s reply to Horiki strikes me so hard: “I think you’re the human in your saying.” That’s why Yozo’s reply to Horiki strikes me so hard: “I think you’re the human in your saying.”

“I think you’re the human in your saying” doesn’t make a lot of sense to me, without knowing the full context, but I assume it’s a direct quote from an English translation of the novel.

Dazai also says that if we try to ignore the feedback of certain people, that feedback can become a “scientific ghost”,” which is a very funny, yet deeply unsettling idea. Dazai also says that if we try to ignore the feedback of certain people, that feedback can become a “scientific ghost,” which is a very funny yet deeply unsettling idea.

As for “Everything will pass” — Greek philosophers said something similar: everything flows, nothing remains. As for “Everything will pass” — Greek philosophers said something similar: everything flows, nothing remains.

This concept is central to the Buddhist doctrine of impermanence.

It tells you how to face both failure and success with a normcalm heart. It tells you how to face both failure and success with a calm heart.