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June 1, 2022

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June 1 2022 (Half Year Report)

Half years was gone!

Happy moment:

Instead using exercise to reduce weight, tried “eat less” method and it works!

But I still want to exercise for many other reasons.

My part time job salary is more than the formal job.

Thanks to the virus in April my formal job schedule was work 4 days and rest 4 days.

In all the rest day I go to working for my part time job.

My pay cheque for April was like a double and more!

Unhappy moment:

Focus issue!

I want to good at A, B, C and many other hobbies.

I become a human octopus got 8 soft and weak hands.

But all we need is just one big gun!

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Half a years w has gone by!

Instead using exercise to reduce weight,of trying to lose weight by just exercising, I tried the “eat less” method and it works!

"I tried the 'eat less' method" sounds a little strange, but it could be okay depending on what you want to emphasize.
I would probably say something like, "I tried dieting and eating less and it works!"

But I still want to exercise for many other reasons.

Would be good to give a couple of the reasons here. This sentence sounds pretty vague.

My part time job salary is more than the formalmy full time job.

Formal job could be okay as well, but full time job is how we would usually say it.

Thanks toBecause of the virus in April my formal job schedule was work 4 days on and rest 4 days off.

IOn all the restmy off days I go to working forwork my part time job.

Half a years w has gone by!

Happy moments:

Instead of using exercise to reduce weight, I tried the “eating less” method, and it works!

My part -time job's salary is more than the formmy official job's.

Thanks to the virus in April, my formofficial job's schedule wasbecame work for 4 days and, then rest for 4 days.

In allDuring the rest days, I go to working for my part -time job.

My pay cheque for April was like a double and mormore than double!

Unhappy moments:

Focusing issues!

I want to be good at A, B, C, and many other hobbies.

I become a human octopus gotwith 8 soft and weak handlimbs.

But all we need is just one big gun!

The grammar is fine, but I don't understand the meaning or if it's supposed to be a continuation of the previous sentence?

June 1 2022 (Half Year Report)


Half years was gone!


Half a years w has gone by!

Half a years w has gone by!

Happy moment:


Happy moments:

Instead using exercise to reduce weight, tried “eat less” method and it works!


Instead of using exercise to reduce weight, I tried the “eating less” method, and it works!

Instead using exercise to reduce weight,of trying to lose weight by just exercising, I tried the “eat less” method and it works!

"I tried the 'eat less' method" sounds a little strange, but it could be okay depending on what you want to emphasize. I would probably say something like, "I tried dieting and eating less and it works!"

But I still want to exercise for many other reasons.


But I still want to exercise for many other reasons.

Would be good to give a couple of the reasons here. This sentence sounds pretty vague.

My part time job salary is more than the formal job.


My part -time job's salary is more than the formmy official job's.

My part time job salary is more than the formalmy full time job.

Formal job could be okay as well, but full time job is how we would usually say it.

Thanks to the virus in April my formal job schedule was work 4 days and rest 4 days.


Thanks to the virus in April, my formofficial job's schedule wasbecame work for 4 days and, then rest for 4 days.

Thanks toBecause of the virus in April my formal job schedule was work 4 days on and rest 4 days off.

In all the rest day I go to working for my part time job.


In allDuring the rest days, I go to working for my part -time job.

IOn all the restmy off days I go to working forwork my part time job.

My pay cheque for April was like a double and more!


My pay cheque for April was like a double and mormore than double!

Unhappy moment:


Unhappy moments:

Focus issue!


Focusing issues!

I want to good at A, B, C and many other hobbies.


I want to be good at A, B, C, and many other hobbies.

I become a human octopus got 8 soft and weak hands.


I become a human octopus gotwith 8 soft and weak handlimbs.

But all we need is just one big gun!


But all we need is just one big gun!

The grammar is fine, but I don't understand the meaning or if it's supposed to be a continuation of the previous sentence?

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