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My Holidays

During those holidays, I didn't get away. I stayed at home because my mother got injured at her leg so she couldn't ski and it meant that we wouldn't go skiing with my cousins on the south of France.
Obviously, I was a little sad, because skiing is one of my favorite hobbies, but I decided to take advantage of that situation by seeing my friends, work for school and improve my skills, like improving my English or guitar skills.
My holidays ended up 3 years ago, and I kept a really good souvenir of them.
Sometimes, I feel like it's a good thing to just rest, get a refill and spend time alone. The only problem was that I had a test right before the holidays, and I thought I failed it so it disturbed me for a while (I received my grade yesterday and got 18 out of 20, best grade of the class, so it was finally a success!).
However, I managed to distract me about that thought by watching the winter Olympic Games. I loved watching them doing freestyle figures and artistic skating. During those holidays, I would watch the different sports during the evening, after hanging out with some friends or working. It was a good way to reward me when I have been productive or whatever.

To conclude, I had a great time during those holidays, I saw my friends and move to Paris for one day (I'll talk about that later).

I hope you enjoyed reading my text! Please tell me what you though of my English and feel free to give me some advice!

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DuringI didn't go away for those holidays, I didn't get away.

I think this might be the most natural way to convey your message.

I stayed at home because my mother got injured at her leg so she couldn't ski and ithis meant that we wouldn't be able to go skiing with my cousins oin the south of France.

Obviously, I was a little sad, because skiing is one of my favorite hobbies, but I decided to take advantage of that situation by seeing my friends, work fordoing school work and improveing my skills, likefor example by improving my English or guitar skills.

My last holidays ended up was 3 years ago, and I keptstill have a really good souvenir of themfrom it.

Sometimes, I feel like it's a good thing to just rest, get a refillreset, and spend time alone.

I think 'refill' is more often used in the context of beverages.

The only problem was that I had a test right before the holidays, andwhich I thought I failed it, so ithis disturbed me for a while (I received my grade yesterday and got 18 out of 20, the best grade of(out) of (everyone in) the class, so it was finalultimately a success!).

However, I managed to distract me aboutyself from that thought by watching the winter Olympic Games.

I loved watching them doing freestyle figures and artistic skating.

During those holidays, I would watch the different sports during the evening, after hanging out with some friends or working.

It was a good way to reward me when I have beenyself after being productive or whatever.

To conclude, I had a great time during those holidays, I saw my friends and movetravelled to Paris for onea day (I'll talk about that later).

I hope you enjoyed reading my text!

Please tell me what you though of my English and feel free to give me some advice!

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Nicely written text! Looking forward to reading your text on what you got up to in Paris :)

During those holidays, I didn't get awayo outside.

I stayed at home because my mother got injured at her leg soa leg injury. As a result, she couldn't ski and it meant that we wouldn't go skiing with my cousins on the south of France.

Obviously, I was a little sad, because skiing is one of my favorite hobbies, but I decided to take advantage of that situation by seeingthe situation as an opportunity to see my friends, work for school, and improve my skills, like improving mysuch as English orand guitar skills.

My holidays ended up 3 years ago, and I kept a really good souvenir of them.

Sometimes, I feel like it's a good thing to just rest, get a refillrecharge, and spend time alone.

The only problem was that I had a test right before the holidays, and I thought I failed it so it disturbed me for a while (I received my grade yesterday and got 18 out of 20, best grade of the class, so it was finally a success!).

Congratulations!

However, I managed to distract me aboutyself from that thought by watching the winter Olympic Games.

I loved watching them doing freestyle figures and artistic skating.

During those holidays, I would watch the different sports during the evening, after hanging out with some friends or after working.

It was a good way to reward me when I have been productive or whateveryself after a productive day or something.

“or something” sounds better than “or whatever”

To conclude, I had a great time during those holidays, I saw my friends, and moved to Paris for one day (I'll talk about that later).

Please tell me what you though ofink about my English and feel free to give me some advice!

My Holidays

During those holidays, I didn't get awayo anywhere.

Or 'I didn't go away'

I stayed at home because my mother got injured at her leg so she couldn't ski and it meant that we wouldidn't go skiing with my cousins oin the south of France.

Don't need the 'at' in 'injured at her leg'.
You would say 'my mother got injured' if you don't want to mention which body part.

Obviously, I was a little sad, because skiing is one of my favorite hobbies, but I decided to take advantage of thate situation by seeing my friends, doing work for school and improveing my skills, like improving my English or guitar skills.

'seeing', 'doing' and 'improving need to have the same conjugation if you're listing activities.

Sometimes, I feel like it's a good thing to just rest, get a refillrecharge and spend time alone.

'recharge' is a better word here, or maybe 'refill my energy'

The only problem was that I had a test right before the holidays, and I thought I failed it so it disturbworried me for a while (I received my grade yesterday and got 18 out of 20, best grade of the class, so it was finally a success!).

'worried' fits better here. 'disturbed' is more intense and refers to something more unsettling.
(Congratulations!)

However, I managed to distract me about that thoughtdistracted myself by watching the winter Olympic Games.

Don't need the 'managed to'.
'myself' instead of 'me'

I loved watching them doing freestyle figures skating and artistic skating.

During those holidays, I would watch thed different sports during the evening, after hanging out with some friends or working.

It was a good way to reward meyself when I have been productive or whatever.

To conclude, I had a great time during those holidays, I saw my friends and moved to Paris for one day (I'll talk about that later).

'saw' and 'moved' need to be in the same tense

I hope you enjoyed reading my text!

Please tell me what you thought of my English and feel free to give me some advice!

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I agree with all the corrections by cmstevie, and I see one more tense to change for consistency: in the following sentence, "have" should be "had":
"It was a good way to reward myself when I have been productive or whatever."

Using "had" makes the tenses consistent with the next sentence when you say "I had a great time... I saw my friends..."

My Holidays


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During those holidays, I didn't get away.


During those holidays, I didn't get awayo anywhere.

Or 'I didn't go away'

During those holidays, I didn't get awayo outside.

DuringI didn't go away for those holidays, I didn't get away.

I think this might be the most natural way to convey your message.

I stayed at home because my mother got injured at her leg so she couldn't ski and it meant that we wouldn't go skiing with my cousins on the south of France.


I stayed at home because my mother got injured at her leg so she couldn't ski and it meant that we wouldidn't go skiing with my cousins oin the south of France.

Don't need the 'at' in 'injured at her leg'. You would say 'my mother got injured' if you don't want to mention which body part.

I stayed at home because my mother got injured at her leg soa leg injury. As a result, she couldn't ski and it meant that we wouldn't go skiing with my cousins on the south of France.

I stayed at home because my mother got injured at her leg so she couldn't ski and ithis meant that we wouldn't be able to go skiing with my cousins oin the south of France.

Obviously, I was a little sad, because skiing is one of my favorite hobbies, but I decided to take advantage of that situation by seeing my friends, work for school and improve my skills, like improving my English or guitar skills.


Obviously, I was a little sad, because skiing is one of my favorite hobbies, but I decided to take advantage of thate situation by seeing my friends, doing work for school and improveing my skills, like improving my English or guitar skills.

'seeing', 'doing' and 'improving need to have the same conjugation if you're listing activities.

Obviously, I was a little sad, because skiing is one of my favorite hobbies, but I decided to take advantage of that situation by seeingthe situation as an opportunity to see my friends, work for school, and improve my skills, like improving mysuch as English orand guitar skills.

Obviously, I was a little sad, because skiing is one of my favorite hobbies, but I decided to take advantage of that situation by seeing my friends, work fordoing school work and improveing my skills, likefor example by improving my English or guitar skills.

My holidays ended up 3 years ago, and I kept a really good souvenir of them.


My holidays ended up 3 years ago, and I kept a really good souvenir of them.

My last holidays ended up was 3 years ago, and I keptstill have a really good souvenir of themfrom it.

Sometimes, I feel like it's a good thing to just rest, get a refill and spend time alone.


Sometimes, I feel like it's a good thing to just rest, get a refillrecharge and spend time alone.

'recharge' is a better word here, or maybe 'refill my energy'

Sometimes, I feel like it's a good thing to just rest, get a refillrecharge, and spend time alone.

Sometimes, I feel like it's a good thing to just rest, get a refillreset, and spend time alone.

I think 'refill' is more often used in the context of beverages.

The only problem was that I had a test right before the holidays, and I thought I failed it so it disturbed me for a while (I received my grade yesterday and got 18 out of 20, best grade of the class, so it was finally a success!).


The only problem was that I had a test right before the holidays, and I thought I failed it so it disturbworried me for a while (I received my grade yesterday and got 18 out of 20, best grade of the class, so it was finally a success!).

'worried' fits better here. 'disturbed' is more intense and refers to something more unsettling. (Congratulations!)

The only problem was that I had a test right before the holidays, and I thought I failed it so it disturbed me for a while (I received my grade yesterday and got 18 out of 20, best grade of the class, so it was finally a success!).

Congratulations!

The only problem was that I had a test right before the holidays, andwhich I thought I failed it, so ithis disturbed me for a while (I received my grade yesterday and got 18 out of 20, the best grade of(out) of (everyone in) the class, so it was finalultimately a success!).

However, I managed to distract me about that thought by watching the winter Olympic Games.


However, I managed to distract me about that thoughtdistracted myself by watching the winter Olympic Games.

Don't need the 'managed to'. 'myself' instead of 'me'

However, I managed to distract me aboutyself from that thought by watching the winter Olympic Games.

However, I managed to distract me aboutyself from that thought by watching the winter Olympic Games.

I loved watching them doing freestyle figures and artistic skating.


I loved watching them doing freestyle figures skating and artistic skating.

I loved watching them doing freestyle figures and artistic skating.

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During those holidays, I would watch the different sports during the evening, after hanging out with some friends or working.


During those holidays, I would watch thed different sports during the evening, after hanging out with some friends or working.

During those holidays, I would watch the different sports during the evening, after hanging out with some friends or after working.

During those holidays, I would watch the different sports during the evening, after hanging out with some friends or working.

It was a good way to reward me when I have been productive or whatever.


It was a good way to reward meyself when I have been productive or whatever.

It was a good way to reward me when I have been productive or whateveryself after a productive day or something.

“or something” sounds better than “or whatever”

It was a good way to reward me when I have beenyself after being productive or whatever.

To conclude, I had a great time during those holidays, I saw my friends and move to Paris for one day (I'll talk about that later).


To conclude, I had a great time during those holidays, I saw my friends and moved to Paris for one day (I'll talk about that later).

'saw' and 'moved' need to be in the same tense

To conclude, I had a great time during those holidays, I saw my friends, and moved to Paris for one day (I'll talk about that later).

To conclude, I had a great time during those holidays, I saw my friends and movetravelled to Paris for onea day (I'll talk about that later).

I hope you enjoyed reading my text!


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Please tell me what you though of my English and feel free to give me some advice!


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