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Journey to the Peach Garden (3)

Hello everyone! Today, I tried to translate a classical Chinese article called "Journey to the Peach Garden". I translated the original text in three parts. This is the third part of this article, and the first and the second part can be found on my homepage.

The fisherman found his boat when he had gone out the strange place. Then he went back the way. And marked everywhere. When he arrived in the county, the fisherman visited the prefecture chiet. He told the unbelieveable experience to him. The chief dispatched some people to find the strange place with the fisherman at once. They tried to find the marks what the fisherman put before. But to everyone surpnise, they got lost and couldn't find their way.
A man who lived in Nanyang named Ziji Liu was a noble character. One day he heard this story and was very happy, so he decided to go to the Peach Garden.But he didn't find this place, either. Liu died of an illness soon. And no one come to find the Peach Garden again.

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Journey to the Peach Garden (3)

Hello, everyone!

Today, I tried to translate a classical Chinese articlestory called "Journey to the Peach Garden".

I translated the original text into three parts.

This is the third part of this article, and te series. The first and the second part can be found on my homepage.

It's okay to divide this into two sentences.

The fisherman found his boat when he had gone ouafter he left the strange place.

Then he went back the same way.

And marked it everywhere.

When he arrived in the county, the fisherman visited the prefecture chietf.

He told thehim of his unbelieveable experience to him.

The chief dispatched some people to find the strange place with the fisherman at once.

They tried to find the marks what the fisherman put beforehad made earlier.

But to everyone's surpnrise, they got lost and couldn't find their way.

A man named Ziji Liu who lived in Nanyang named Ziji Liu was aof noble character.

One day he heard this story and wasbecame very happy, so he decided to go to the Peach Garden.B but he didn't find ithis place, either.

Liu died of an illness soon thereafter.

And no one comewent to find the Peach Garden ever again.

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Nice story and very well done! Thanks for sharing!

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BLsDiary

April 10, 2023

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Thank you for correcting! I will continue to share some stories!

TWhen the fisherman found his boat when he had gonewent out to the strange place, he found his boat.

Then he went back the way he came.

And marked everywhereleft marks on his path.

Not sure if this is entirely what you mean :)

When he arrived in the counback to the village/town/city, the fisherman visited the prefecturelocal chietf.

"County" sounds very American and/or official to me :)

He told thehim about his unbelieveable experience to him.

The chief dispatchedsent out some people at once, to find the strange place with the fisherman at once.

They tried to find the marks what the fisherman puthad left on his trial home before.

But to everyone's surpnrise, they got lost and couldn't find their way.

One day he heard this story and was very happy, so he decided to go to the Peach Garden. But he dicouldn't find this place, either.

Liu died of an illness soon after.

And no one come tould ever find the Peach Garden again.

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Good work!

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BLsDiary

April 10, 2023

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Thank you for correcting! I will continue to share some stories!

Journey to the Peach Garden (3)


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Hello everyone!


Hello, everyone!

Today, I tried to translate a classical Chinese article called "Journey to the Peach Garden".


Today, I tried to translate a classical Chinese articlestory called "Journey to the Peach Garden".

I translated the original text in three parts.


I translated the original text into three parts.

This is the third part of this article, and the first and the second part can be found on my homepage.


This is the third part of this article, and te series. The first and the second part can be found on my homepage.

It's okay to divide this into two sentences.

The fisherman found his boat when he had gone out the strange place.


TWhen the fisherman found his boat when he had gonewent out to the strange place, he found his boat.

The fisherman found his boat when he had gone ouafter he left the strange place.

Then he went back the way.


Then he went back the way he came.

Then he went back the same way.

And marked everywhere.


And marked everywhereleft marks on his path.

Not sure if this is entirely what you mean :)

And marked it everywhere.

When he arrived in the county, the fisherman visited the prefecture chiet.


When he arrived in the counback to the village/town/city, the fisherman visited the prefecturelocal chietf.

"County" sounds very American and/or official to me :)

When he arrived in the county, the fisherman visited the prefecture chietf.

He told the unbelieveable experience to him.


He told thehim about his unbelieveable experience to him.

He told thehim of his unbelieveable experience to him.

The chief dispatched some people to find the strange place with the fisherman at once.


The chief dispatchedsent out some people at once, to find the strange place with the fisherman at once.

This sentence has been marked as perfect!

They tried to find the marks what the fisherman put before.


They tried to find the marks what the fisherman puthad left on his trial home before.

They tried to find the marks what the fisherman put beforehad made earlier.

But to everyone surpnise, they got lost and couldn't find their way.


But to everyone's surpnrise, they got lost and couldn't find their way.

But to everyone's surpnrise, they got lost and couldn't find their way.

A man who lived in Nanyang named Ziji Liu was a noble character.


A man named Ziji Liu who lived in Nanyang named Ziji Liu was aof noble character.

One day he heard this story and was very happy, so he decided to go to the Peach Garden.But he didn't find this place, either.


One day he heard this story and was very happy, so he decided to go to the Peach Garden. But he dicouldn't find this place, either.

One day he heard this story and wasbecame very happy, so he decided to go to the Peach Garden.B but he didn't find ithis place, either.

Liu died of an illness soon.


Liu died of an illness soon after.

Liu died of an illness soon thereafter.

And no one come to find the Peach Garden again.


And no one come tould ever find the Peach Garden again.

And no one comewent to find the Peach Garden ever again.

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