Oct. 5, 2020
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When people are over a certain age, they may think about a lot of things. One thing is probably about the time. When we get a life-long job and have a stable income, what else can we do then? Most of them may spend their life in this way: we don't need to do anything else. We just depend on the job to live our rest of life until we retire. For me, I think my job is so simple and easy and it doesn't need to take much time. But in my free time, can I do something else? According to some rules, I am not allowed to do anything else and I have to comply with these kinds of rules strictly, not to mention running a business or making money. I once saw a text in primary school books. It is called "running against the time" written by the famous writer Linqingxuan who is from Taiwan and I was very touched after reading it. I was also very moved when I saw my mom at her old age. She really wants to do some things but she lost those abilities. Although I am over fifty, I still can do some things. After having my jobs done, in my free time, can't I do some things? Or just like this, let time flow quietly until I retire, and don't have the ability anymore to do things?
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When people are over a certain age, they may think about a lot of things.
One thingof those is probably about the time.
When we get a life-long job and have a stable income, what else can we do then?
Most of themany people may spend their life in this way: wves thinking, "We don't need to do anything else.
We just depend on theour jobs to live ourthe rest of lifeour lives until we retire."
For mIn my case, I think my job is sovery simple and easy, and that it doesn't need to take much of my time.
But in my free time, canould I do something else?
"Could" gives a greater feeling of wondering or reflection here.
According to some rules, I am not allowed to do anything else and I have to comply with these kinds of rules strictly, not toI want to correct this sentence, but I can't think of a good way in which to do so. This sudden mention of rule without explaining what they are and where they come from is confusing. Same thing with the sudden mention of running a business or making money.
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It is calwas titled "rRunning aAgainst the time"Time" and was written by the famous Taiwanese writer Linqingxuan who is from Taiwan and I was. I felt very touched after reading it.
It would add a lot if you explained what the text says and why you felt touched by it. As it stands now, we just know that you read something and it made you feel some way for an unknown reason.
I was also very moved when I saw my mom at her old age.
She really wants to do some things, but she has lost those abilitiesy to do so.
Although I am over fifty, I can still can do some things.
I just changed the word order here to flow a little better.
After havfinishing my jobs done, in my free timework, can't I do some things in my free time?
Or just like this, should I let time flow quietly until I retire, and don't have the ability anymore to do things anymore?
Oct. 6, 2020
According to some rules, I am not allowed to do anything else and I have to comply with these kinds of rules strictly, not toI want to correct this sentence, but I can't think of a good way in which to do so. This sudden mention of rule without explaining what they are and where they come from is confusing. Same thing with the sudden mention of running a business or making money.
I am a state public afficial, according to the state policy, I am not allowed to do things to make money, or something like that.
Oct. 6, 2020
Thank you for your corrections and explanations. You are very kind and helpful.
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When people are over a certain age, they may think about a lot of things. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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One thing is probably about the time. One |
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When we get a life-long job and have a stable income, what else can we do then? This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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Most of them may spend their life in this way: we don't need to do anything else. M |
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We just depend on the job to live our rest of life until we retire. We just depend on |
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For me, I think my job is so simple and easy and it doesn't need to take much time.
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But in my free time, can I do something else? But in my free time, c "Could" gives a greater feeling of wondering or reflection here. |
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According to some rules, I am not allowed to do anything else and I have to comply with these kinds of rules strictly, not to mention running a business or making money.
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I once saw a text in primary school books. I once saw a text in a primary school book |
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It is called "running against the time" written by the famous writer Linqingxuan who is from Taiwan and I was very touched after reading it. It It would add a lot if you explained what the text says and why you felt touched by it. As it stands now, we just know that you read something and it made you feel some way for an unknown reason. |
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I was also very moved when I saw my mom at her old age. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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She really wants to do some things but she lost those abilities. She really wants to do some things, but she has lost th |
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Although I am over fifty, I still can do some things. Although I am over fifty, I can still I just changed the word order here to flow a little better. |
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After having my jobs done, in my free time, can't I do some things? After |
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Or just like this, let time flow quietly until I retire, and don't have the ability anymore to do things? Or just like this, should I let time flow quietly until I retire |
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