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Journal 5 my experience as a volunteer.

Journal 5 My Experience as a volunteer
In my research for a different activity that helps me to improve my English and increase my vocabulary, today I went to help the people in the center for food. I started getting on the food in the car for the people that need it. Today I could have met interesting people and finally practice my English in real life because in this pandemic I couldn’t meet people in person and real experience either. I will be tomorrow to continue to do a very nice experience in English.

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Journal 5 m- My experience as a volunteer.

This seems more like a title.

Journal 5 - My Eexperience as a volunteer.

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In my research for a different activity that helps me to improve my English and increases my vocabulary, today I went to help the people in the center for foodI decided to visit the Food Bank today and help out as a volunteer.

The original is grammatically correct, but it does not sound very natural. Some of this is word choice (in my research/search) and some of this is sentence structure.

I started by getting on the food inout of the car for the people thatwho need it.

It's not clear to me whether the food is going into or out of the car. "Getting on" here is not right - it is "getting onto, getting the food out of, or getting the food into"

Today, I could have mwas able to meet interesting people and finally practice my English in real life because during thise pandemic, I couldn’t meet people in person and have any real experience eithers.

"I could have met" tells me you did not actually meet anyone, but the second half of your sentence suggests you did. The other corrections are mostly word choice.

I will be back tomorrow to continue to do a very nice experience using English.

I think the "back" here is necessary and although the second half is grammatically ok, the word choice is a bit off.

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Well done on getting out there, helping people and practising English while doing so :-)

In my researchlooking for a different activity thato helps me to improve my English and increase my vocabulary, today I went to help the people in the center for foodvolunteer at a food bank.

I think this statement is a bit confusing as it combines the intention to look for a activity to practice with you going to do it. I could see writing it as:

I wanted to find more activities where I could practice my English and build my vocabulary. I found a volunteer position at a local food bank that was a perfect fit for this goal.

I started geputting on the food in the car for the people that need itwe were donating in the car.

Today, I could have mfinally got a chance to meet interesting people and finally practice my English in real life b. Because inof thise pandemic I couldn’t meet people in person andnor could I get the real experience of speaking either.

I will be there tomorrow to continue to do a very nice experienceworking and practicing in English.

Journal 5 m: My eExperience as a vVolunteer.

Journal 5: My Experience as a vVolunteer

In my research for a differentpursuit of a new activity thato helps me to improve my English and increase my vocabulary, today I went to help the people in the center for foodfood bank.

I started gettloading on the food in theto cars for the people that needed it.

A better way to write this sentence would be: My role was to load the food into the cars of people that needed it.

Today I could have mwas finally able to meet interesting people and finally practice my English in real life because during this pandemic I couldn’t meet people in person andor get real experience eitherspeaking English.

or “because during this pandemic I couldn’t do either”

I think you wanted to express that you haven’t been able to meet people or practice English due to the pandemic, and that today you were finally able to do so. I corrected the sentence to fit this meaning

I will be going back tomorrow to continue to do a very niceget good experience speaking English.

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Great job and what a cool opportunity to practice English!

Journal 5 m: My eExperience as a vVolunteer.

This repeated an I'm sure if this was intentional or not.

Journal 5 My Experience as a volunteer

In my research for a different activityies that helps me to improve my English and increase my vocabulary, today I went to help the people in the center for foodfood bank (?) today.

I started by getting on the food in the car for the people that need it.

Today I could have mwas able to meet interesting people and finally practice my English in real life, because in this pandemic I couldn’thaven't been able to meet people in person andor get real experience eithers.

I will be tomorrow to continue to dodoing a very nice experience in English tomorrow.

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Great Job! Just a few corrections!

In my research for a different activity that helps me to improve my English and increase my vocabulary, today I went to help the people in the center for food(food distribution center) (restaurant), or something else.

I started getting onput the food in the car for the people that need it.

This might not be what you mean, maybe try saying it differently.

Today I could havehoped to meet interesting people and finally practice my English, but in real lifeity, because inof this pandemic I couldn’t meet people in person andor have a real experience either.

I will bcontinue tomorrow to continue to do a veryin order to have a nice experience speaking English.

Feedback

Great job

Journal 5 my experience as a volunteer.


Journal 5 m: My eExperience as a vVolunteer.

This repeated an I'm sure if this was intentional or not.

Journal 5 m: My eExperience as a vVolunteer.

Journal 5 m- My experience as a volunteer.

This seems more like a title.

Journal 5 My Experience as a volunteer


Journal 5 My Experience as a volunteer

Journal 5: My Experience as a vVolunteer

Journal 5 - My Eexperience as a volunteer.

See above

In my research for a different activity that helps me to improve my English and increase my vocabulary, today I went to help the people in the center for food.


In my research for a different activity that helps me to improve my English and increase my vocabulary, today I went to help the people in the center for food(food distribution center) (restaurant), or something else.

In my research for a different activityies that helps me to improve my English and increase my vocabulary, today I went to help the people in the center for foodfood bank (?) today.

In my research for a differentpursuit of a new activity thato helps me to improve my English and increase my vocabulary, today I went to help the people in the center for foodfood bank.

In my researchlooking for a different activity thato helps me to improve my English and increase my vocabulary, today I went to help the people in the center for foodvolunteer at a food bank.

I think this statement is a bit confusing as it combines the intention to look for a activity to practice with you going to do it. I could see writing it as: I wanted to find more activities where I could practice my English and build my vocabulary. I found a volunteer position at a local food bank that was a perfect fit for this goal.

In my research for a different activity that helps me to improve my English and increases my vocabulary, today I went to help the people in the center for foodI decided to visit the Food Bank today and help out as a volunteer.

The original is grammatically correct, but it does not sound very natural. Some of this is word choice (in my research/search) and some of this is sentence structure.

I started getting on the food in the car for the people that need it.


I started by getting on the food in the car for the people that need it.

I started getting onput the food in the car for the people that need it.

This might not be what you mean, maybe try saying it differently.

I started gettloading on the food in theto cars for the people that needed it.

A better way to write this sentence would be: My role was to load the food into the cars of people that needed it.

I started geputting on the food in the car for the people that need itwe were donating in the car.

I started by getting on the food inout of the car for the people thatwho need it.

It's not clear to me whether the food is going into or out of the car. "Getting on" here is not right - it is "getting onto, getting the food out of, or getting the food into"

Today I could have met interesting people and finally practice my English in real life because in this pandemic I couldn’t meet people in person and real experience either.


Today I could havehoped to meet interesting people and finally practice my English, but in real lifeity, because inof this pandemic I couldn’t meet people in person andor have a real experience either.

Today I could have mwas able to meet interesting people and finally practice my English in real life, because in this pandemic I couldn’thaven't been able to meet people in person andor get real experience eithers.

Today I could have mwas finally able to meet interesting people and finally practice my English in real life because during this pandemic I couldn’t meet people in person andor get real experience eitherspeaking English.

or “because during this pandemic I couldn’t do either” I think you wanted to express that you haven’t been able to meet people or practice English due to the pandemic, and that today you were finally able to do so. I corrected the sentence to fit this meaning

Today, I could have mfinally got a chance to meet interesting people and finally practice my English in real life b. Because inof thise pandemic I couldn’t meet people in person andnor could I get the real experience of speaking either.

Today, I could have mwas able to meet interesting people and finally practice my English in real life because during thise pandemic, I couldn’t meet people in person and have any real experience eithers.

"I could have met" tells me you did not actually meet anyone, but the second half of your sentence suggests you did. The other corrections are mostly word choice.

I will be tomorrow to continue to do a very nice experience in English.


I will bcontinue tomorrow to continue to do a veryin order to have a nice experience speaking English.

I will be tomorrow to continue to dodoing a very nice experience in English tomorrow.

I will be going back tomorrow to continue to do a very niceget good experience speaking English.

I will be there tomorrow to continue to do a very nice experienceworking and practicing in English.

I will be back tomorrow to continue to do a very nice experience using English.

I think the "back" here is necessary and although the second half is grammatically ok, the word choice is a bit off.

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