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Jack

Sept. 15, 2023

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Today is Friday, which means I am going to rest for the following two days.

When I woke up at 2pm this afternoon, I immediately prepared to go to work. I carried a bag, in which were a few table tennis balls, two table tennis paddles, a bottle of green tea, a towel and a suit of sports clothes.

After I get off work this afternoon, I will go to a sports center to play table tennis.

I rode my bike to work. After I rode it for a couple of weeks, I added a motor to it, since I often felt tired if I rode it for a long time.

Another plan after I get off work this afternoon is to go to some shops to buy a long-sleeve T-shirt. Here it is almost the middle of autumn, so it is cold in the morning and the evening.

I only wear a T-shirt recently, so I feel cold in the morning and evening. I do have a few shirts, but I don’t want to wear them since I think buttoning up buttons is a lot of trouble.

So, after I get off work this afternoon, I will go to some shops first to buy a long-sleeve T-shirt. Afterwards, I am going to go to the sports center to play table tennis for about half an hour. Finally, I will go home to have dinner.

Corrections

I've only been wearing a T-shirt recently, so I feel cold in the morning and evening.

I do have a few shirts, but I don’t want to wear them since I think buttoning up buttons is a lot of trouble.

So, after I get off work this afternoon, first I will go to some shops first to buy a long-sleeve T-shirt.

Afterwards, I am going to go to the sports center to play table tennis for about half an hour.

Finally, I will go home to have dinner.

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Jack

Sept. 16, 2023

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Thank you very much.

Today is Friday, which means I am going to rest for the following two wo days starting tomorrow / to rest tomorrow and Sundays.

We don’t usually use “the following two days” when the starting/reference point is today. And if we say “for the next two days,” it would usually include now, or at least imply that your rest period was starting now.

My corrections above are two ways of saying what you mean that sound natural to me.

When I woke up at 2pm this afternoon, I immediately prepared / got ready to go to work.

I carried a bag,(,) in which were a few table tennis balls, two table tennis paddles, a bottle of green tea, a towel and a suit of sportssome gym clothes.

After I get off work this afternoon, I will go to a sports center to play table tennis.

I rode my bike to work.

After I rode it for a couple of weeks, I added a motor to it, since I often felt tired if I rode it for a long time.

This sentence sounds pretty weird in the sequence of this story—it sounds like it took you 2 weeks to get to work (today)! :-)

It would be less confusing if you put this sentence in parentheses, to show that it’s an aside, not part of the story: (After I had ridden my new (?) bike for a couple of weeks, I added a motor to it, since I often felt tired if I rode it for a long time.)

Another plan after I get off work this afternoon is to [go to some shops to buy | go shopping for] a long-sleeve T-shirt.

Here it is almost the middle of autumn, so it is cold in the morning and the evening.

I’ve only been wearing a T-shirt recently, so I feel cold in the morning and evening.

suggestion: I’ve been dressing in just a T-shirt lately, so…

I do have a few long-sleeve shirts, but I don’t want to wear them since I think [buttoning / doing] up buttons is a lot of trouble.

So, after I get off work this afternoon, I will (first) go to some shops (first) to buy a long-sleeve T-shirt.

or:
- …I will go directly to some shops…
- …I will first go shopping for a…

Afterwards, I am going to go to the sports center to play table tennis for about half an hour.

Finally, I will go home to have dinner.

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Jack

Sept. 16, 2023

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Today is Friday, which means I am going to rest for the following two wo days starting tomorrow / to rest tomorrow and Sundays.

Thank you very much. I wrote “in the following two days” according to Chinese saying “在接下来的两天”. I don’t know that native English speakers don’t say this and the English I wrote includes today.

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Jack

Sept. 16, 2023

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After I rode it for a couple of weeks, I added a motor to it, since I often felt tired if I rode it for a long time.

Yes, you are right. I should phrase it another way to make it clear. “I bought this bike in April this year. After I rode it for a few weeks, I added a motor to it…”

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Jack

Sept. 16, 2023

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Another plan after I get off work this afternoon is to [go to some shops to buy | go shopping for] a long-sleeve T-shirt.

Go shopping is a commonly used English phrase, but I forgot it when I was writing this essay.

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Jack

Sept. 16, 2023

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Get ready, do up, gym clothes. Usage of present perfect continues tense. Thank you very much.

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JoeTofu

Sept. 16, 2023

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You’re welcome ☺️

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Today is Friday, which means I am going to rest for the followingthese next two days.

When I woke up at 2pm this afternoon, I immediately prepared got ready to go to work.

I carried amy bag, in which werehad a few table tennis balls, two table tennis paddles, a bottle of green tea, a towel and a suit of sports clothes (and some gym clothes).

After I get off work this afternoon, I will go to a sportsrecreational center to play table tennis.

I rode my bike to work.

After I rodeWhen I first got it, it was fine. But after riding it for a couple of weeks, I added a motor to it, since I often felt tired ifwhen I rode it for a long time.

Finally, I will go home to have dinner.

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Jack

Sept. 16, 2023

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Thank you very much.

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38592958

Sept. 16, 2023

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Thank you very much.

No problem!

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Today is Friday, which means I am going to rest for the following two days.


Today is Friday, which means I am going to rest for the followingthese next two days.

Today is Friday, which means I am going to rest for the following two wo days starting tomorrow / to rest tomorrow and Sundays.

We don’t usually use “the following two days” when the starting/reference point is today. And if we say “for the next two days,” it would usually include now, or at least imply that your rest period was starting now. My corrections above are two ways of saying what you mean that sound natural to me.

When I woke up at 2pm this afternoon, I immediately prepared to go to work.


When I woke up at 2pm this afternoon, I immediately prepared got ready to go to work.

When I woke up at 2pm this afternoon, I immediately prepared / got ready to go to work.

I carried a bag, in which were a few table tennis balls, two table tennis paddles, a bottle of green tea, a towel and a suit of sports clothes.


I carried amy bag, in which werehad a few table tennis balls, two table tennis paddles, a bottle of green tea, a towel and a suit of sports clothes (and some gym clothes).

I carried a bag,(,) in which were a few table tennis balls, two table tennis paddles, a bottle of green tea, a towel and a suit of sportssome gym clothes.

After I get off work this afternoon, I will go to a sports center to play table tennis.


After I get off work this afternoon, I will go to a sportsrecreational center to play table tennis.

This sentence has been marked as perfect!

I rode my bike to work.


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After I rode it for a couple of weeks, I added a motor to it, since I often felt tired if I rode it for a long time.


After I rodeWhen I first got it, it was fine. But after riding it for a couple of weeks, I added a motor to it, since I often felt tired ifwhen I rode it for a long time.

After I rode it for a couple of weeks, I added a motor to it, since I often felt tired if I rode it for a long time.

This sentence sounds pretty weird in the sequence of this story—it sounds like it took you 2 weeks to get to work (today)! :-) It would be less confusing if you put this sentence in parentheses, to show that it’s an aside, not part of the story: (After I had ridden my new (?) bike for a couple of weeks, I added a motor to it, since I often felt tired if I rode it for a long time.)

Another plan after I get off work this afternoon is to go to some shops to buy a long-sleeve T-shirt.


Another plan after I get off work this afternoon is to [go to some shops to buy | go shopping for] a long-sleeve T-shirt.

Here it is almost the middle of autumn, so it is cold in the morning and the evening.


This sentence has been marked as perfect!

I only wear a T-shirt recently, so I feel cold in the morning and evening.


I’ve only been wearing a T-shirt recently, so I feel cold in the morning and evening.

suggestion: I’ve been dressing in just a T-shirt lately, so…

I've only been wearing a T-shirt recently, so I feel cold in the morning and evening.

I do have a few shirts, but I don’t want to wear them since I think buttoning up buttons is a lot of trouble.


I do have a few long-sleeve shirts, but I don’t want to wear them since I think [buttoning / doing] up buttons is a lot of trouble.

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So, after I get off work this afternoon, I will go to some shops first to buy a long-sleeve T-shirt.


So, after I get off work this afternoon, I will (first) go to some shops (first) to buy a long-sleeve T-shirt.

or: - …I will go directly to some shops… - …I will first go shopping for a…

So, after I get off work this afternoon, first I will go to some shops first to buy a long-sleeve T-shirt.

Afterwards, I am going to go to the sports center to play table tennis for about half an hour.


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This sentence has been marked as perfect!

Finally, I will go home to have dinner.


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