July 11, 2022
Journal
In the past few years, I drove cars or rode bikes for transportation.
I usually ride bikes in spring and autumn, and drive cars in summer and winter.
Winters are too cold and summers are too hot, which are not suitable for riding bikes.
Since this spring, somehow the price of gasoline has gradually increased. 200 RMB gasoline only for driving two or three days. I felt I couldn't afford it anymore.
That was the reason I bought a battery bike. This battery bike cost me 2500 RMB. The merchant said that it had five batteries. 12 volts and 20 amps for each battery. And it could go at least 80 kilometers after being fully charged.
There are many benefits to riding a battery bike. First, it really saves money, a fully charged only costs 2 RMB. Second, it's very convenient to ride in cities, and you never need to worry about finding a parking place or violating traffic rules. Third, the feeling of riding a battery bike in the summer is really cool, especially when winds blow your body.
Since I bought this battery bike, I have done many things in the city. Before, I always tried to avoid driving in the city because it was very hard to find a parking spot, and I often violated traffic rules.
In China, most people choose a battery bike as their vehicle because it is convenient, flexible and economical.
In the past few years, I've droiven cars or roidden bikes for transportation.
The past participle is better in this sentence. Using the past tense you used makes it sound like you've finished driving cars and riding bikes. You could also use "cycle" to refer to riding bikes, which is more natural, but I don't know what the past participle of that is.
I usually ride bikes in spring and autumn, and drive cars in summer and winter.
Winters are too cold and summers are too hot, which areis not suitable for riding bikes.
I can see why you used the plural form, but "which is" refers to the whole clause of "Winters are too cold and summers are too hot", so it's singular. Not intuitive, I know!
Since this spring, somehow the price of gasoline has gradually increased for some reason.
200 RMB gasoline only for driving for only two or three days.
"200 RMB gasoline only" sounds like "only" is connected to the price of gasoline, not the number of days.
I felt I couldn't afford it anymore.
That was the reason I bought a battery bike.
This battery bike cost me 2500 RMB.
The merchant said that it had five batteries.
12 volts and 20 amps for each battery.
And it could go at least 80 kilometers after being fully charged.
There are many benefits to riding a battery bike.
First, it really saves money,: a fully charged only costs 2 RMB.
Second, it's very convenient to ride in cities, and you never need to worry about finding a parking splace or violating traffic rules.
"parking spot" could also be used. "Parking place" is fine and understandable, but I don't think I've heard it being used before.
Third, the feeling of riding a battery bike in the summer is really coolcools you down, especially when winds blowthe wind hits your body.
I didn't realise that "cool" referred to temperature until the end of the sentence gave me context, so I rephrased that. I can't explain why "blow" is wrong in this context, but I think it is.
Since I bought this battery bike, I have done many things in the city.
Before, I always tried to avoid driving in the city because it was very hard to find a parking spot, and I often violated traffic rules.
In China, most people choose a battery bike as their vehicle because it is convenient, flexible and economical.
July 11, 2022
Thank you very much for correcting my journals. I really appreciate it.
In the past few years, I have driven cars or cycled bikes for transportation.
I usually ride bikes in spring and autumn, and drive cars in summer and winter.
Winters are too cold and summers are too hot, which is not suitable for cycling bikes.
Since this spring, the price of gasoline has gradually increased for some reason. 200 RMB gasoline for driving for only two or three days. I felt I couldn't afford it anymore.
That was the reason I bought a battery bike. This battery bike cost me 2500 RMB. The merchant said that it had five batteries. 12 volts and 20 amps for each battery. And it could go at least 80 kilometers after being fully charged.
There are many benefits to riding a battery bike. First, it really saves money: a full charge only costs 2 RMB. Second, it's very convenient to ride in cities, and you never need to worry about finding a parking space or violating traffic rules. Third, the feeling of riding a battery bike in the summer cools you down, especially when wind hits your body.
Since I bought this battery bike, I have done many things in the city. Before, I always tried to avoid driving in the city because it was very hard to find a parking space, and I often violated traffic rules.
In China, most people choose a battery bike as their vehicle because it is convenient, flexible and economical.
July 12, 2022
Very good! You don't need to say "cycled bikes" or "cycling bikes" - you can just say "cycled" or "cycling". The bike is implied! :D
July 12, 2022
Very good! You don't need to say "cycled bikes" or "cycling bikes" - you can just say "cycled" or "cycling". The bike is implied! :D
I see now. Thank you very much.
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In the past few years, I drove cars or rode bikes for transportation. In the past few years, I've dr The past participle is better in this sentence. Using the past tense you used makes it sound like you've finished driving cars and riding bikes. You could also use "cycle" to refer to riding bikes, which is more natural, but I don't know what the past participle of that is. |
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I usually ride bikes in spring and autumn, and drive cars in summer and winter. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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Winters are too cold and summers are too hot, which are not suitable for riding bikes. Winters are too cold and summers are too hot, which I can see why you used the plural form, but "which is" refers to the whole clause of "Winters are too cold and summers are too hot", so it's singular. Not intuitive, I know! |
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Since this spring, somehow the price of gasoline has gradually increased. Since this spring, |
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200 RMB gasoline only for driving two or three days. 200 RMB gasoline "200 RMB gasoline only" sounds like "only" is connected to the price of gasoline, not the number of days. |
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I felt I couldn't afford it anymore. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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That was the reason I bought a battery bike. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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This battery bike cost me 2500 RMB. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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The merchant said that it had five batteries. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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12 volts and 20 amps for each battery. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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And it could go at least 80 kilometers after being fully charged. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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There are many benefits to riding a battery bike. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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First, it really saves money, a fully charged only costs 2 RMB. First, it really saves money |
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Second, it's very convenient to ride in cities, and you never need to worry about finding a parking place or violating traffic rules. Second, it's very convenient to ride in cities, and you never need to worry about finding a parking sp "parking spot" could also be used. "Parking place" is fine and understandable, but I don't think I've heard it being used before. |
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Third, the feeling of riding a battery bike in the summer is really cool, especially when winds blow your body. Third, the feeling of riding a battery bike in the summer I didn't realise that "cool" referred to temperature until the end of the sentence gave me context, so I rephrased that. I can't explain why "blow" is wrong in this context, but I think it is. |
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Since I bought this battery bike, I have done many things in the city. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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Before, I always tried to avoid driving in the city because it was very hard to find a parking spot, and I often violated traffic rules. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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In China, most people choose a battery bike as their vehicle because it is convenient, flexible and economical. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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