June 14, 2022
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China is very famous for its tea and many Chinese people like drinking tea.
Amongst many famous Chinese tea brands, green tea is the biggest branch and amongst many green tea brands, West Lake Longjing Tea is in the top place.
Before, I almost didn't drink any tea, even hot water. I only drink water when I feel thirsty. If I drink green tea, my stomach often feels sick.
I checked some information about drinking tea and learned that green tea is raw tea, unfermented tea, therefore it is not friendly to our stomachs.
Puer Tea and Black Tea are fermented tea. It's said that they are friendly to our stomachs. Especially in the winter, drinking them can keep our stomachs warm.
I first tried Puer tea. After I drank it for a while, I found that no matter what types of puer teas they were, they all had musty smells. I worry that they may harm my health, so I quit them.
I secondly tried the Black Tea and I also found they had a special flavor that I didn't like.
In the end, I decided to try some Longjing Tea. I looked it up on the internet to find out if there is one brand that has the best quality and is also a bargain.
I didn't buy those very famous brands of Longjing Tea. Instead, I bought Longjing tea from a tea farmer. I think buying Longjing Tea from a tea grower would be a smart choice.
A unique characteristic of Longjing tea is to have a soybean aroma. When I made the tea, I found it was real, especially after I washed it. Its aroma is very strong and I like smelling its aroma deeply.
This Longjing tea's price is 1 RMB per gram. I also bought a branded Longjing Tea for almost 4 RMB per gram. I compared the two of them, and I didn't find a big difference between them. On the contrary, the branded ones' taste and fragrance are lighter.
I drink tea because of other people's strong recommendations. They think people should have a hobby. Fortunately, so far I have been feeling very good about drinking Longjing Tea.
Amongst many famous different types of Chinese tea brands, green tea is the biggest branchmost popular variant and amongst many green tea brands, West Lake Longjing Tea is in the top place.
Green tea is not so much a 'branch' of tea brands, but rather a variant of tea itself.
'The' is unnecessary here too. Top place
Before, I almost didn't drink any tea, not even hot water.
Before when? I would clarify this.
Mentioning hot water seems a bit odd as well
If I drink green tea, my stomach often feels uneasy/I often feel sick.
I checked some information about drinking tea and learned that green tea is a raw tea, unfermented tea, therefore it is not friendly to our stomachs.
Article needed - 'a'
You do not need to repeat 'tea' as you are using two adjectives to describe the same thing.
Puer Tea and Black Tea are fermented teas.
Tea - singular
Teas - plural
After I drank it for a while, I found that no matter what types of puer teas they were, they all had a musty smells.
I worry that they may harm my health, so I quitstopped drinking them.
I think 'quit' sounds a bit strange here, I would just say stop because it's not so much a habit for you
I sSecondly, I tried the Black Tea and I also found theyat it had a specialcertain flavor that I didn't like.
'The' is unneeded here.
I would replace special with certain/particular
I didn't buy one of those very famous brands of Longjing Tea.
I think buying Longjing Tea from a tea grower would be a smarter choice.
You're discussing a comparison, so use a comparative adjective - smarter.
A unique characteristic of Longjing tea is tohat it haves a green bean aroma.
When I made the tea, I found out it was real, especially after I washed it.
Its aroma iwas very strong and I like smelling its aroma deeply.
You keep swapping tenses when talking about the same subject throughout the text. Try and stick to one tense, especially in the same sentences.
This Longjing tea's price is 1 RMB per gram.
On the contrary, the branded ones' taste and fragrance awere lighter.
Talking about the past, use the past tense.
Feedback
Well done! Just a few nitpicky errors I pointed out to help the flow of the text. However, please pay attention to which tense you are using and try to stick with it. You can change tense but not whilst discussing the same event/situation. Also, watch out for unnecessary articles. Really great, advanced piece of writing! Keep it up!
June 14, 2022
Thank you very much for correcting my journals and giving me a lot of detailed explanations. I am very grateful.
China is very famous for its tea and many Chinese people like drinking tea.
Amongst many famous different types of Chinese tea, green tea is the most popular tea variant and amongst many green tea brands, West Lake Longjing Tea is in top place.
Years before, I almost didn't drink any tea, not even hot water. I only drink water when I feel thirsty. If I drink green tea, my stomach often feels uneasy.
I checked some information about drinking tea and learned that green tea is a raw, unfermented tea, therefore it is not friendly to our stomachs.
Puer Tea and Black Tea are fermented teas. It's said that they are friendly to our stomachs. Especially in the winter, drinking them can keep our stomachs warm.
I first tried Puer tea. After I drank it for a while, I found that no matter what types of puer teas they were, they all had a musty smell. I worry that they may harm my health, so I stopped drinking them.
Secondly, I tried Black Tea and I also found that it had a certain flavor that I didn't like.
In the end, I decided to try some Longjing Tea. I looked it up on the internet to find out if there is one brand that has the best quality and is also a bargain.
I didn't buy one of those very famous brands of Longjing Tea. Instead, I bought Longjing tea from a tea farmer. I think buying Longjing Tea from a tea grower would be a smarter choice.
A unique characteristic of Longjing tea is to have a soybean aroma. When I made the tea, I found out it was real, especially after I washed it. Its aroma was very strong and I like smelling its aroma deeply.
Longjing tea's price is 1 RMB per gram. I also bought a branded Longjing Tea for almost 4 RMB per gram. I compared the two of them, and I didn't find a big difference between them. On the contrary, the branded one's taste and fragrance were lighter.
I drink tea because of other people's strong recommendations. They think people should have a hobby. Fortunately, so far I have been feeling very good about drinking Longjing Tea.
June 14, 2022
You're very welcome! Thank you for your appreciation. Excellent work!
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China is very famous for its tea and many Chinese people like drinking tea. |
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Amongst many famous Chinese tea brands, green tea is the biggest branch and amongst many green tea brands, West Lake Longjing Tea is in the top place. Amongst many famous different types of Chinese tea Green tea is not so much a 'branch' of tea brands, but rather a variant of tea itself. 'The' is unnecessary here too. Top place |
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Before, I almost didn't drink any tea, even hot water. Before, I almost didn't drink any tea, not even hot water. Before when? I would clarify this. Mentioning hot water seems a bit odd as well |
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I only drink water when I feel thirsty. |
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If I drink green tea, my stomach often feels sick. If I drink green tea, my stomach often feels uneasy/I often feel sick. |
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I checked some information about drinking tea and learned that green tea is raw tea, unfermented tea, therefore it is not friendly to our stomachs. I checked some information about drinking tea and learned that green tea is a raw Article needed - 'a' You do not need to repeat 'tea' as you are using two adjectives to describe the same thing. |
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Puer Tea and Black Tea are fermented tea. Puer Tea and Black Tea are fermented teas. Tea - singular Teas - plural |
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It's said that they are friendly to our stomachs. |
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Especially in the winter, drinking them can keep our stomachs warm. |
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I first tried Puer tea. |
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After I drank it for a while, I found that no matter what types of puer teas they were, they all had musty smells. After I drank it for a while, I found that no matter what types of puer teas they were, they all had a musty smell |
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I worry that they may harm my health, so I quit them. I worry that they may harm my health, so I I think 'quit' sounds a bit strange here, I would just say stop because it's not so much a habit for you |
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I secondly tried the Black Tea and I also found they had a special flavor that I didn't like.
'The' is unneeded here. I would replace special with certain/particular |
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In the end, I decided to try some Longjing Tea. |
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I looked it up on the internet to find out if there is one brand that has the best quality and is also a bargain. |
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I didn't buy those very famous brands of Longjing Tea. I didn't buy one of those very famous brands of Longjing Tea. |
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Instead, I bought Longjing tea from a tea farmer. |
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I think buying Longjing Tea from a tea grower would be a smart choice. I think buying Longjing Tea from a tea grower would be a smarter choice. You're discussing a comparison, so use a comparative adjective - smarter. |
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A unique characteristic of Longjing tea is to have a green bean aroma. A unique characteristic of Longjing tea is t |
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When I made the tea, I found it was real, especially after I washed it. When I made the tea, I found out it was real, especially after I washed it. |
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Its aroma is very strong and I like smelling its aroma deeply. Its aroma You keep swapping tenses when talking about the same subject throughout the text. Try and stick to one tense, especially in the same sentences. |
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This Longjing tea's price is 1 RMB per gram.
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I also bought a branded Longjing Tea for almost 4 RMB per gram. |
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I compared the two of them, and I didn't find a big difference between them. |
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On the contrary, the branded ones' taste and fragrance are lighter. On the contrary, the branded ones' taste and fragrance Talking about the past, use the past tense. |
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I drink tea because of other people's strong recommendations. |
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They think people should have a hobby. |
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Fortunately, so far I have been feeling very good about drinking Longjing Tea. |
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A unique characteristic of Longjing tea is to have a soybean aroma. |
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