April 1, 2022
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My current office is in an office building on the fifteenth floor in the east part of the building.
It covers an area of about 230 square meters with six single rooms, one living room and a meeting room.
One of the single rooms in the northwest corner is a little bigger than the other five, which is shared by three people while the other five rooms are both shared by two people in each room.
Because the five rooms are all in the east part of the building, they are very bright, so every morning when we enter the offices we always have a mood like the sunshine.
My office is at the southeast end of our office. Compared with the other four offices in the north, I have an extra window in the south wall, so it is brighter than others.
I share this room with my leader because I am the vice leader.
Compared with my former department, the only thing that doesn't satisfy me well is that l can't occupy one single room.
I was the leader of my former department which covers an area of 13340 square meters. We had many offices there, so I could occupy one single room.
But in 2020, my former department was merged into my current department.
Occupying a single room is very beneficial for me because I am learning English and I can learn at anytime, but now I can’t.
My current office is in an office buildingthe east part onf the fifteenth floor in the east part of thof an office building.
Your sentence was perfectly correct and doesn't sound too unnatural. But I think this reads more easily and would sound even more natural.
It covers an area of about 230 square meters with six single rooms, one living room and a meeting room.
One of the single rooms in the northwest corner is a little bigger than the other five, whichand is shared by three people while the other five rooms are bothall shared by two people in eachper room.
"which" makes it sound like you're talking about the five rooms. Because we are adding another piece of information about the single larger room, "and" makes this clearer.
"both" can only be used for two things so for the other 5 rooms we should use "all".
You don't need the preposition "in" for the verb "to share". I think "two people per room" sounds the most natural.
Because the five rooms are all in the east part of the building, they are very bright, so every morning when we enter the offices we always have a moodour moods are always bright like the sunshine.
I think this sounds more natural
My office is at the southeast end of our office.
Compared with the other four offices in the north, I have an extra window in the south wall, so it is brighter than the others.
I share this room with my leader because I am the vice leader.
Compared with my former department, the only thing that doesn't satisfy me well is that l can't occupy onea single room to myself.
Adding "to myself" clarifies that you mean only you occupying the room. It could be assumes since you said a single room. But I think it's better to add this to avoid confusion
I was the leader of my former department which coversed an area of 13340 square meters.
It sounds more correct to put this in past tense. I'm not certain why but I think because it's not your department anymore.
We had many offices there, so I could occupy onehave a single room to myself.
The same as above
But in 2020, my former department was merged intowith my current department.
I'm not sure why but you would use "merge into" and "merge with" in different situations. "with" would sound more natural in this situation
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This is a really good journal. It could be perfectly understood by an English speaker. Only a few changes that I've mentioned would make it sound native. Great job.
(Sorry to hear about your office. I hope you can continue to learn English at your new office)
April 1, 2022
Thank you very much. Yeah, I can continue learning English in my office, but not listening. I can only do writing and silent reading.
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My current office is in an office building on the fifteenth floor in the east part of the building. My current office is in Your sentence was perfectly correct and doesn't sound too unnatural. But I think this reads more easily and would sound even more natural. |
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It covers an area of about 230 square meters with six single rooms, one living room and a meeting room. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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One of the single rooms in the northwest corner is a little bigger than the other five, which is shared by three people while the other five rooms are both shared by two people in each room. One of the single rooms in the northwest corner is a little bigger than the other five, "which" makes it sound like you're talking about the five rooms. Because we are adding another piece of information about the single larger room, "and" makes this clearer. "both" can only be used for two things so for the other 5 rooms we should use "all". You don't need the preposition "in" for the verb "to share". I think "two people per room" sounds the most natural. |
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Because the five rooms are all in the east part of the building, they are very bright, so every morning when we enter the offices we always have a mood like the sunshine. Because the five rooms are all in the east part of the building, they are very bright, so every morning when we enter the offices I think this sounds more natural |
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My office is at the southeast end of our office. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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Compared with the other four offices in the north, I have an extra window in the south wall, so it is brighter than others. Compared with the other four offices in the north, I have an extra window in the south wall, so it is brighter than the others. |
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I share this room with my leader because I am the vice leader. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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Compared with my former department, the only thing that doesn't satisfy me well is that l can't occupy one single room. Compared with my former department, the only thing that doesn't satisfy me well is that l can't occupy Adding "to myself" clarifies that you mean only you occupying the room. It could be assumes since you said a single room. But I think it's better to add this to avoid confusion |
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I was the leader of my former department which covers an area of 13340 square meters. I was the leader of my former department which cover It sounds more correct to put this in past tense. I'm not certain why but I think because it's not your department anymore. |
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We had many offices there, so I could occupy one single room. We had many offices there, so I could The same as above |
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But in 2020, my former department was merged into my current department. But in 2020, my former department was merged I'm not sure why but you would use "merge into" and "merge with" in different situations. "with" would sound more natural in this situation |
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Occupying a single room is very beneficial for me because I am learning English and I can learn at anytime, but now I can’t. |
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