March 16, 2022
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My first workplace is in a county, Jiashan, which is located in the east central part of Anhui province, and borders a county of Jiangsu province.
Jiashan is on a small hill, roads in it are not even, so we can't ride bikes. There was no public transportation either, we could only walk.
Only about six or seven staff members in my work unit and three of us lived in our work place, including me.
The other two people are local. One of them was our leader, the other was my colleague, who was assigned to that department in the same year as me.
The three of us ate together for a while. We shared the same amount of money together monthly, bought food and cooked food in turn.
There was no tap water, we had to take water from a deep well or just collect rain. Taking water from a deep well with a single bucket really needs skills.
I shared a room with that young guy. In the cold winter we slept in the same bed and put a lot of rice straw under the mat to keep warm.
Our work was not too busy. We often sang a little and sometimes we went to the theatre to watch performances or went to the spot ground to skate.
I couldn't skate as skilled as others no matter how hard I tried. I fell down many times and it really hurt.
Every time after skating, I got very sweaty. Drinking two bottles of orange juice was the necessary thing I always did.
Working away from my hometown was not a good feeling. I had different accents. They could easily tell I was not a local. I often felt like I was
Discriminated.
Fortunately, I finally transferred to my home town with the help of my family and relatives, but I still can remember everything while I work there. After all, I spent my best four years there, 18 to 22 years old.
My first workplace is in a county, Jiashan, which is located in the east central part of Anhui province, and borders a county of Jiangsu province.
Jiashan is on a small hill, r. Roads in it are not even, so we can't ride bikes.
There was no public transportation either, we could only walk.
The other two people are locals.
One of them was our leader, the other was my colleague, who was assigned to that department in the same year as me.
The three of us ate together for a while.
There was no tap water, we had to take water from a deep well or just collect rain.
In the cold winter, we slept in the same bed and put a lot of rice straw under the mat to keep warm.
Our work was not too busy.
I couldn't skate as skilledfully as others no matter how hard I tried.
I fell down many times and it really hurt.
DI would drinking two bottles of orange juice was the necessary thing I always didafterwards.
This sounds very foreign and unnatural, although it is technically grammatically correct. I switched it up from passive voice to active voice.
I had a different accents.
They could easily tell I was not a local.
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March 16, 2022
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My first workplace iwas in a county, Jiashan county, which is located in the east central part of Anhui province, and borders a county of Jiangsu province.
Jiashan is on a small hill, roads in it aand its roads were not even, so we caouldn't ride bikes on them.
There was no public transportation either,; we could only walk.
OThere were only about six or seven staff members in my work unit, and three of us including myself lived inat our work place, including me.
The other two people awere locals.
One of them was our leader, and the other was my colleague, who was assigned to that department in the same year as me.
The three of us ate together for a while.
We shared the same amount of money together monthly, bought food and cooked food in turn.
There was no tap water, so we had to take water from a deep well or just collect rain.
Taking water from a deep well with a single bucket really needs skills.
I shared a room with that young guy.
In the cold winter we slept in the same bed and put a lot of rice straw under the mat to keep warm.
Our work was not too busy.
We often sang a little, and sometimes we went to the theatre to watch performances or went to the [spot ground]? to skate.
What do you mean by "spot ground"?
I couldn't skate as skilledfully as others no matter how hard I tried.
I fell down many times and it really hurt.
Every time after skating, I got very sweatyI got very sweaty every time I went skating.
Drinking two bottles of orange juice was the necessary something I always did out of necessity.
Working away from my hometown was not a good feeling.
I had a different accents, so people could tell I was not a local.
They could easily tell I was not a local.
I often felt like I was discriminated against.
Discriminated.
Fortunately, I finally transferred to my home town with the help of my family and relatives, but I still can remember everything that happened while I worked there.
After all, I spent my best four years there, from 18 to 22 years old.
March 16, 2022
We often sang a little, and sometimes we went to the theatre to watch performances or went to the [spot ground]? to skate.
Sport-ground.
March 16, 2022
Thank you very much for helping me with my English.
When I wrote "my first workplace IS in..." I had thought about what tense I should use. I remembered some English native speakers once told me, "if you use WAS, that means 'now it is not'". Because I just tell the truth, I finally chose IS. When I wrote "roads ARE not even" I had the same idea because even now, the roads are still not even. So I am very confused about this situation. Could you tell me more about it?
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Only about six or seven staff members in my work unit and three of us lived in our work place, including me.
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We shared the same amount of money together monthly, bought food and cooked food in turn. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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There was no tap water, we had to take water from a deep well or just collect rain. There was no tap water, so we had to take water from a deep well or just collect rain. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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Taking water from a deep well with a single bucket really needs skills. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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In the cold winter we slept in the same bed and put a lot of rice straw under the mat to keep warm. This sentence has been marked as perfect! In the cold winter, we slept in the same bed and put a lot of rice straw under the mat to keep warm. |
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We often sang a little and sometimes we went to the theatre to watch performances or went to the spot ground to skate. We often sang a little, and sometimes we went to the theatre to watch performances or went to the [spot ground]? to skate. What do you mean by "spot ground"? |
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I couldn't skate as skilled as others no matter how hard I tried. I couldn't skate as skill I couldn't skate as skill |
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I fell down many times and it really hurt. This sentence has been marked as perfect! This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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Every time after skating, I got very sweaty.
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Drinking two bottles of orange juice was the necessary thing I always did. Drinking two bottles of orange juice was
This sounds very foreign and unnatural, although it is technically grammatically correct. I switched it up from passive voice to active voice. |
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Working away from my hometown was not a good feeling. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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I had different accents. I had a different accent I had a different accent |
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They could easily tell I was not a local.
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I often felt like I was I often felt like I was discriminated against. |
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Discriminated.
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Fortunately, I finally transferred to my home town with the help of my family and relatives, but I still can remember everything while I work there. Fortunately, I finally transferred to my home town with the help of my family and relatives, but I still can remember everything that happened while I worked there. |
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After all, I spent my best four years there, 18 to 22 years old. After all, I spent my best four years there, from 18 to 22 years old. |
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