March 14, 2022
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In April 1989, after 4 years working in another city, I was transferred to my home city, Fuyang.
Before I went back to the city, I had heard that my new workplace was a little far from the city, but I thought it would not be too far because it was a department directly under the county.
When I went back to the city, I didn't go straight to my new work unit because I had to deal with some transfer documents first, so I stayed in a hotel the early few days.
After I finished those documents, I rode a bike to my new work place, which is located in the south of the city.
When I came to a place called Liulipeng, I was already out of the city. I thought I should have arrived, but I didn't. I continued to ride to the south, then I came to a place called Qilibei, but it was still not the place that my department was at.
I rode south for a little while and turned to the left. When I came to a village, I was thinking that the new workplace should be there, but it still wasn't. Then I kept riding to the East. After I rode through the next village, I saw a big yard surrounded by walls.
Yes, it was my new workplace and it was really far from the city.
Although it was only 5 kilometers from the city, in the late 80 s, the roads were really bad, not paved and not smooth, so it was hard to ride.
In 2020, my former work unit was merged, and the work place was bought by a real estate group to develop a residential community. Also, I was transferred to my current work unit.
Here are some pictures of the place I took before.
Journal
In April 1989, after 4 years of working in another city, I was transferred back to my home city, Fuyang.
Before I went back to the city, I had heard that my new workplace was a little far from the city, but I thought it would not be too far because it was a department directly under the county.
When I went back toarrived in the city, I didn't go straight to my new work unit because I had to deal with some transfer documents first, so I stayed in a hotel the earlyfor the first few days.
After I finished those documents, I rode a bike to my new work place, which is located in the south of the city.
When I came toBy the time I had reached a place called Liulipeng, I was already out of the city.
I thought I shwould have arrived by then, but I dihadn't yet.
I continued to ride to the south, then I came to and arrived at a place called Qilibei, but it wasI still nothadn't reached the place that my department was atsupposed to be.
I rode south for a little while and turned to the left.
When I came to a village, I was thinkingthought that themy new workplace shouldmight be there, but it still wasn't.
Then I kept riding to the East.
Yes, it was my new workplace and it was really far from the city. It was much further from the city than I had thought.
Although it was only 5 kilometeres from the city, in the late 80 s, the roads were really bad,. They were not paved and notor smooth, so it wasmade it hard to ride.
In 2020, my former work unit was merged, and the work place was bought by a real estate group to develop a residential community.
Also, I was transferred to my current work unit.
Here are some pictures of the place I took before.
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You seem to be very good at English, so I analysed your writing more than usual. I made some changes that make you sound more advanced. Good job!
March 14, 2022
Thank you very much. All the corrections you made are very good and I appreciate them.
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I rode south for a little while and turned to the left. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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When I came to a village, I was thinking that the new workplace should be there, but it still wasn't. When I came to a village, I |
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Journal This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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In April 1989, after 4 years working in another city, I was transferred to my home city, Fuyang. In April 1989, after 4 years of working in another city, I was transferred back to my home city, Fuyang. |
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Before I went back to the city, I had heard that my new workplace was a little far from the city, but I thought it would not be too far because it was a department directly under the county. Before I went back |
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When I went back to the city, I didn't go straight to my new work unit because I had to deal with some transfer documents first, so I stayed in a hotel the early few days. When I |
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After I finished those documents, I rode a bike to my new work place, which is located in the south of the city. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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When I came to a place called Liulipeng, I was already out of the city.
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I thought I should have arrived, but I didn't. I thought I |
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I continued to ride to the south, then I came to a place called Qilibei, but it was still not the place that my department was at. I continued to ride to the south |
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Then I kept riding to the East. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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After I rode through the next village, I saw a big yard surrounded by walls. |
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Yes, it was my new workplace and it was really far from the city. Yes, it was my new workplace |
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Although it was only 5 kilometers from the city, in the late 80 s, the roads were really bad, not paved and not smooth, so it was hard to ride. Although it was only 5 kilomet |
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In 2020, my former work unit was merged, and the work place was bought by a real estate group to develop a residential community. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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Also, I was transferred to my current work unit. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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Here are some pictures of the place I took before. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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